up and I couldn't be happier, for now anyway.

As soon as we put out the ad, business was booming, we spent alot of time in the air delivering all sorts of things, from fruits, to clothes, even animals! It was amazing, a carefree life in the skies with me and my sisters. One day while I was in my room getting ready, I was hit by a wave of nausia, I barely made it into the bathroom in time. "Flo, are you ok?" Bloom asked, knocking softly on the closed door. "What's hit ya, sis, it ain't contagious is it?" Thorn asked, playing off like she wasn't worried. "Thorn!" Bloom scolded, I took a deep breath "I'm fine" I said and paused to gag "ungh, but you two should probably go without me." There was a pause "Ya, sure pal?" Thorn asked. "Yeah, probably contagious, just go" I said and promptly threw up. They relunctantly left, and I was happy for it, I hated being sick, made me seem weak.

Over the chourse of a few weeks, I started showing all the signs, so I bought it, a pregnancy test. I waited anxiously, though I already knew it'd be positive, it was, and I cried. I hoped I'd never have to see Karnage again, now I was having his baby, this wasn't fair! I dried my tears and went downstairs, where Thorn and Bloom were lounging in the recliners laughing. "Guys, we need to talk" I said sitting down on the couch, before either of them got a word out, I blurted it out, everything. I told them about running away, about living on the streets and with air pirates, about Don Karnage, and I ended with day's bombshell. They stared at me wide eyed for a moment and Bloom abruptly got up and hugged me. "Aw. sissy, I'm so sorry" she said rubbing my back soothingly as more tears spilled down my cheeks. Thorn put a comforting hand on my shoulder and gave me a small reasurring smile. I was scared, Don Karnage's baby, how was I supposed to deal with this? There was no way I could have it, but then again, the alternative seemed almost unthinkable, perhaps I would give it up for adoption if I decided I still didn't want it after it was born. This was going to be hard...

 

 

 

 

 



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April 02, 2013
Usa
Thank you very much look for part 2!

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March 31, 2013
a good story well written :)

March 23, 2013
Usa
In response to your comment: Any time!

March 23, 2013
Usa
Yeah, I just didn't know what England would be referred to in the show, I apologize, if anyone knows PM me or comment and I'll fix it. Thank you. Flora is not a pirate she just lived with them until she could escape, she and Karange have a nonconsentual relationship it's not going to work out for them. And of course there will be more in time thank you so much for comments and advice I will let you guys know when I have more.

March 23, 2013
Usa
I thought I'd add: I just checked out your character page for Flora and she's from England, huh? No offense but I'm not really sure if this would work in the Talespin setting. At least from everything that's been implied on the show, Talespin takes place in an alternate universe with countries that are only SIMILAR to our own. It just irks me a little whenever I read a talespin fanfiction and get confused because the author added in real-world places which may not necessarily belong.


Oh well, regardless, I can't tell you how to write, and I hope you don't think I'm flaming. I left a comment on your profile today so I hope we can possibly be friends and that you can get back to me soon. Thanks!!

March 23, 2013
Usa
Hmm, nice story so far but if I may i'd like to add some constructive criticism: But before I go on, first and foremost: Will there be more to the story? If yes, please keep me in the know, I would love to see more to it!



But anyway.... I'm just going to say: I've seen several Karnage-in-love stories, and I'm just going to warn you, his love interest has ALWAYS either became a pirate, or already is one at the start of the story. I'm not necessarily saying Flora's a bad character, I like her from what I've seen so far; but if she's going to be a pirate make sure has more things in common with Karnage other than the obvious and superficial (assuming of course their relationship works out :P). Plus, I'd also like to point out: So Flora's 19.


No offense intended, but that just makes her relationship with Karnage seem a little bit creepy since he's what, in his 30's? *shrug* Well, regardless, you DO have some potential for a story here and I patiently wait for more :)




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