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said. “I shall go to the den right now and inform everyone of your plans.”
“Thank you, Nala.” Simba replied. “And now let us get on with our schedules for the day. Vitani, you go with Kiara and teach her how to hunt and fight; and you come with me Kovu. Your lesson begins now.”
Everyone nodded, and Vitani took Kiara south of Pride Rock and into the open savannah. Nala walked back towards the front of Pride Rock and into the den, where she was to inform the pride of Simba’s plans. Simba and Kovu began walking together towards the top of Pride Rock, where Kovu’s education into kingdomship was to begin.
…To be continued in Part II.
Simba, Nala, Kovu, Kiara, Vitani, Timon, Pumbaa, Nuka, & Zira © Walt Disney
Kufuzu © BlackJack16
Author’s Note: This is my very first attempt at story-writing, so I try my best. This story might even take some time until I finish it. There is a lot to think about when story writing. It doesn’t just come right out of the box, you know. Again, anything that you think might need improvement, by all means let me know.
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Also, you said you wanted some say on how you could improve your writing. The one thing I noticed was that when writing dialogue, after a character is finished speaking, make another paragraph before writing another character's dialogue. Like this sort of:
"Hi," said Kiara to Kovu.
"Hey Kiara," replied Kovu.
Otherwise I think it's epicness! :D