The Lion King III: Hidden Prophecy Part I
Author : BlackJack16
Date sent : October 10, 2009
Rating : G (Everyone)
Category : Epic
Description : It is the day after the war between the Simba's Pride and the Outsiders, who are now apart of; or "one" with Simba's Pride; and everyone has now settled down to live together in peace. But Kiara fears that they are not out of danger yet as she suspects that Zira might have survived her fall into the river. Nala also suspects that there might be someone out there to be considered a threat.
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Date sent : October 10, 2009
Rating : G (Everyone)
Category : Epic
Description : It is the day after the war between the Simba's Pride and the Outsiders, who are now apart of; or "one" with Simba's Pride; and everyone has now settled down to live together in peace. But Kiara fears that they are not out of danger yet as she suspects that Zira might have survived her fall into the river. Nala also suspects that there might be someone out there to be considered a threat.
Length : Average -
Characters :
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Also, you said you wanted some say on how you could improve your writing. The one thing I noticed was that when writing dialogue, after a character is finished speaking, make another paragraph before writing another character's dialogue. Like this sort of:
"Hi," said Kiara to Kovu.
"Hey Kiara," replied Kovu.
Otherwise I think it's epicness! :D