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Hey Lunawing, You're quite a good writer. Some grammar errors, but it's pretty good. Just a suggestion in grammar to help you out: When one character speaks, then another, the second character's voice should be on another line than the first. This clears up alot of confusion. Keep up the good work.

I agree on all accounts, sleazye.
A well-written story, Luna (esspecially for a first try)!
Aside from sleazye's suggestion on new speakers, I would only like a little more background on Steele and Karla. (Of course he would go off and find someone who shares his discrimination against wolf-dogs, or specifically Balto, but I'd like to know more!)

Write on!
-LWf

This is your very first fanfic? You're off to a really great start,keep up the good work Luna,here's howling at you kid.

This is a very good start, Lunawings! You should create a fan fiction gallery for your profile (on the main site)! I look forward to reading more. Good going, and good luck!