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PostPosted: Tue Jun 20, 2006 6:01 am 
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Okay, this is something I started:

Behind My Hazel Eyes

By: K.G.

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This is based on Behind These Hazel Eyes by Kelly Clarkson. Though, the human girls name isn ot mentioned in this part.

When It Seemed Better

She stood there, legs trebling, eyes watering and blood coated, to her now, everything seemed bleak. No one, no one, will see behind my eyes, I won't ever cry. Ever again. she thought. Her eyes were watering but, no tears came down, she closed her hazel eyes, and then, opened them. No signs of tears, no nothing.

With the fact she'd never cry again, she set off, away from the bloody scene, anguished cries filled her head, she saw everyone who meant anything to her, dead, never to return, she'd never see them again, her heart felt like it was ripped into a million pieces. Suddenly, there and then, she pulledo ut her blade "I swear." she began "I swear that if I cry again, and break the vow I made, let my blade take my life, and pierce my very heart. This pleadge I swear on my dead loved ones souls'."



Chapter I

Ten years later, she still stood, no tears, no nothing but complete insanity. She grinned triumphantly, she owuld not die soon. Her sword would not take her own life, and she'd live to be strong and not cry.

With that, ashe raced herself down the hill from her home. She grinned and tripped herself, now she was rolling down the hill, she heard howls, and she howled back. After a moment, a wolf appeared, blue icy looking eyes and a white and grey coat. It was rolling down wiht the girl, and at the bottom they stopped, panting and on their backs, they looked up at the sky and sighed deeply.



The wolfess looked to the girl, woh looked back, what now?


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Hmm yes rather confusing that one of the character is a human and others wolves...still need some repairs of details ;)

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Nice Idea. But, like Pirkka said, little confusing.

It seems to me that the first part is a human. 'She pulled out her blade' seems more like a human action rather than a wolf. Umm, is this anthro?

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No Balto, one is human and the others wolf


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It's sounds great but I did get a little confussed. Try fixing it up a bit, keep the work.

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