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Well done, Sierra! I look forward to the next installation.
Now, I 'ave two suggestions:
(Please feel free to ignore these. They are just my humble opinion.)
1) Try to indent more. Start a new paragraph whenever a new character speaks. Just for easier reading...
2) Try to avoid things like: (Her name was Maya you know) It distracts from the story.

Other than that, this is starting out GREAT. Keep it up!
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