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okay,here are the characters of my book...tell me if you like them..please!
Rasuk-m,looks like Jenne,Kioma's brother,Regular and unpreictable
Kiomi-f,pure white,Rasuk's sister,sometimes moody
Lasara-f,looks like Rasuk,the mother of the two,Very kind and nice
Kiuke-m,Balto's father and Rasuk's best friend,Looks like Balto
Mea-f,Balto's mother and Kioma's best friend,Pure white
Balto-well,Balto as a puppy

Well, there's not much story description or other description so I don't know if I like them or not.

and here is the first part
PROLUEGE
Kioma looked around."where are you?"she said."Rasuk,I'm scared."Kioma and Rasuk were on their first hunt alone."I'm here Kioma!"Rasuk walked up."Don't worrry,I'm not gonna leave you."Kioma laughed and mumbled to herself."Yes,he would if he thought mom wouldn't find out."I heard that!"Rasuk laughed.Mea walked up."Hey Kioma,I didn't know you were here!"Yes,but I do know."Rasuk mumbled."Rasuk,be nice!"Kioma laughed.A rabbit hopped by.Kioma grabbed it but the rabbit slid out of her paws and hopped away in fear."You made me miss it!"Kioma said."No I didn't!"Rasuk yelled.

sorry,I was typing.

part of the first chapter
BALTO'S BIRTH
Balto laughed as he saw Rasuk covered in mud."I told you it would work!"Lasara laughed.
I gotta go so I can't post any more!bye

Two suggestions to start with that you should take to heart:

1)Instead of typing like one or two sentences here and there wait to post them all together.

2)Don't double-post, and triple-posting is even worse!!

sorry,I had to leave and I couldn't post anymore so I didn't know what to do.

Then edit your previous posts. The edit button isn't that hard to find. So yea, instead of doing like a thousand small posts just put your fanfic into chapters or something.