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I have an idea where the three hyenas take orders from a hyena named NGuma. This is after they have killed Scar in the first movie. But I need some pointers on how to create an outline for the story.

Hi!
Well, the easiest thing for me would be to figure out what sort of character this NGuma hyena is. What his personality is like. e.g is he kind, has a bad temper, contains a dark secret e.t.c.
After you've worked that out then you can start on what's going to happen in the story. I don't have much pointers on that one but for me, I would just start writing with a basic idea in mind but just let the story go the way it goes. Let your imagination go wild! Be creative and have fun!

Okay, NGuma has a bad temper and a dark secret. An idea I had is that at one point he was exiled from his clan and was shunned by the other members.

Ok sounds interesting!
Maybe you could make it as to how the hyenas are going to figure out that he was shunned from his past clan. Maybe Shenzi could fall in love with him... (Show her good side?) but it's just my opinion of the story, you don't have to do that if you don't want to.
All in all, it sounds as if you're on the way of making a good fanfic!

The only problem is that I'm someone with Asperger's. The best way I can put it is that I don't know social cues. Could you help me with the outline for the story?

Of course, I'd be happy to help.
Okay so NGuma has a bad temper. His dark secret is that he was shunned by the members of his former clan. This makes him unwilling to trust anyone so he could boss the hyenas around and come across as a bit of a bully.
The hyenas (Shenzi, Banzai and Ed) could really hate him at first. Shenzi (being the smartest one of the group) could go to NGuma and try to stop him from being so nasty.
He could argue back at the start of the conversation but then (after a bit of persuasion from Shenzi) tell her the truth and say that he was shunned from his past clan. After hearing this, Shenzi could feel sorry for him and the two begin to fall in love.
This would make Banzai jealous (he could have secretly liked Shenzi) and tries to fight with NGuma. Horrified, Shenzi stops them fighting and reminds them that they are all a clan and should stick together. (A bit like the Lion King 2, the song We are One. )

Then Banzai realizes he shouldn't have started fighting with NGUma and all the hyenas stay as a happy clan.

If you need anymore help with the plot, please ask!

Could you help me some more with the outline? I'm going to also need help with dialogue.

Well, I've basically got all of my ideas for the plot in my last post. I can't really think on what else to add.
Dialogue isn't my strongest point in writing so I'm not the best person to ask for help on that subject. However, if you watch Lion King 1, and pay very close attention to how the hyenas talk in their scenes of the film, it should give you a rough idea on what to put in their dialogue.

This is looking into NGuma's past: NGuma's clan has just made a kill but nobody's letting him join in. He has to sit and watch as they gorge themselves, their muzzles covered in blood. His fur is littered with scars that came from previous fights with his mother and sister who is second in command. They both give him so much as a second glance at frenzies like this. In fact, they hardly acknowledge him at all. Not even giving him the time of day.

I decided to give NGuma some scars as a link to his past. What do you think?

Yes, I think that's a great idea.
It gives him a sense of mystery and it could make Shenzi, Banzai and Ed wonder why and when he got them.

NGuma grows tired of how his clan treats him and leaves in search of a better life.

Good idea, it adds more to his character!

Okay, now I want to start on the outline for the story.

Okay for help with the outline, look at my 2 previous posts on it. My brain can't think of anything else!
You don't have to go with that though, just do what you think works and above all, be creative! Don't be afraid to let your imagination run wild!