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I might write this up but I don't know if people would like it, so please comment.Also it might not sound too great because I don't want it to be a spoiler.

Suli is 16, at high school and doing very well in her grades. She is quite popular and has a lot of freinds, and quite a lot of the boys have asked her out, but she turned them down, not up for a relationship right now. There is a fair coming to town and she wants to go, all her freinds are going. Her parents agree because she is doing so well at school. She goes with her best freinds Lucy, Tash, Liz and Fiona, and they are having a great time on the rides, but then things start to go wrong. The fair isn't what they had first thought it was, it is a lot more sinister, and dangerous.

I would love to read something like that :3

Ok i'll give it a go, more later ok
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'Hey Suli' Liz called as Suli entered the maths classroom.
'Hia Liz' Suli called back, before being interrupted by their grumpy balding maths teacher Mr Krik.
'This is a maths lesson Suli, not a bar or any other place you young girls 'hang out', so sit down and stop calling out' he snapped, tapping his pencil angrily against his desk. Maths lessons were an hour long usually but today was a double lesson, two hours with Mr Krik was considered torture, and a while back some kids had tried to get everyone to sign a petition to get Mr Krik fired, it didn't work and the poor kids were stuck with a very angry Mr Krik the next day. Luckily Suli's double was a t the end of the day so Mr Krik usually gave them a book of work to do and then leave for coffee. The lesson dragged on but finally it was 4 o'clock. The bell rang and you could almost hear a huge sigh of relief from every classroom, beore the noisy chatter of exited high school kids.
'Hey Suli, you going to the fair tonight' Liz called from the other side of the large crowd that had formed in the corridor.
'Yeh, and so is Lucy, Tash and Fiona, it's going to be great' Suli called back, and turned away smiling to herself, this evening was going to be the best.

And some more
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'Hi mum, i'm home' Suli called, it had taken her ages to get home because there was a traffic accident. She thudded up the stairs into her room and picked out some clothes, a blue top and green trousers, and flung them on. She was meeting Liz, Lucy, Tash and Fiona at the entrance of the fair at 6:00, and it was already 5:35! Luckily the fairground wasn't that far away so it wouldn't take her that long to get there. She picked up her brush and ran it through her gingery brown hair, and then gave her tail a little brush. Glancing at the clock she saw it was 5:50, only 10 minutes! She ran down the stairs, yelled goodbye to her mum, and sprinted down the street.

She arrived outside the fairground with 1 minute to spare, but her freinds were already there.
'Hi guys' Suli panted, 'sorry I took so long, traffic problems.'
'It's no problem Suli, shall we go in' Lucy said, everyone was grinning with excitement. The five girls stepped in and were greeted by the smell of hot dogs, candyfloss and puke. Grinning and laughing they headed towards the rides. A huge rollercoaster towered over the fair, with several smaller ones at it's base. There were shooting galleries, dunk tanks, gambling stalls and food stalls, the place was brilliant.
'Let's go on the rollercoaster' Suli yelled.
'No I want to go on the dropping thing' Liz yelled back, the place was so noisy you had to yell.
'I want to get something to eat, and then have a go at the dunk tank' Fiona yelled, Tash didn't say anything, she always followed Fiona. Lucy waved at everyone to stop yelling and then yelled, 'why don't we split up and do what we want to do, and then meet back here.'
'Good idea' Liz said and headed towards a huge ride that took you to the top and then dropped you really fast. The other four girls split up as well and went to do what they wanted. Suli was just getting to the rollercoaster when she spotted something, a hall of mirrors. She hadn't been in one for years, and with her freinds not around, she wouldn't feel embarressed going in. Looking around to make sure her freinds weren't around, Suli crept inside.
Dark. That was the word to describe it, dark. She fumbled around in the pitch black, hoping the lights would come on soon. A dim light flickered on but it was enough to see by. Another light shone through the mirrors, and Suli thought she could see the exit, and she started towards it.

Nice fanfic!!

I can't wait to read more of your story.

Thanks, I thought no one was reading this so I had sort of given up on it, I might write some more later

Trust me, I know exactly how ya feel.