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So, following the advise that Lone wolf_Fanwriter gave me by the preview of Fight for Freedom, I'm going to preview all the chpaters that I'm going to write for whole the fanfic and please, not too constructive critics, it's my first fanfic, so bare with me. And, without further Apu (from The Simpsons Episode, The Last Temptation of Krust), here is the first chapter of Balto-The Hell of Nome. (I will present the other chapter when you all readed this first chapter, and so long.)


Chapter 1:Dying family members.

The sun was slowly setting over the Alaskian tundra, the shadows tipping at an couple of western type of buildings. The shadows of two dogs were seeing at the rigth end of Nome Main Street. A bird flow over the buildings of Nome, only to revealing the bodys of the two shadows of two dogs. One was a red and cream purebred husky with amber-hazel eyes, both glowing into the fading sunligth. The other was an grizzly-grey-brown wolf-dog hybrid with golden-red eyes, also glowing into the sunligth. The husky named Jenna, the other named Balto.

They were walking to an stranded fisherboat, only as purpose that they were sleeping over for something.

"Jenna, happy aniversary!" said the wolf-dog.

"Balto, it's only a day to early." said the husky.

They walked both chatting over wen they where young and heroic, when the Diptheria epidemic ran trough the tiny town, when Steele get lost and Balto the only one was that can find them, and many oher things.

When they boarded on the fissherboat, they saw that Boris and his polarbear 'cousins' dind't where there. Hmmm, they must have followd him to Russia, Balto tougth. They walked trough the galley and trough the beneath of the ship. Balto was looking trough an open crack in the ship and saw the beautiful, star choked nigthsky.

After an while, Jenna yawned from exaustion and Balto did see it. "Your rigth, Jenna, let get some sleep." said Balto. Balto laid by Jenna and Jenna curled slowly up on him.

"Good nigth, Balto."

Good nigth, Jenna"

They both slowly drifted up to sleep. While they where sleeping, Balto had laid an paw on her belly, a scream came out of the direction of Nome. It wasn't hearable by Jenna and Balto because they were sleeping vast.

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The morning came and the beams of the sun penetrates trough the cracks in the ship. Jenna was the first awake and saw her mate still sleaping. Jenna stood up and nuzzled him awake.

"W-what's happening? Is it morning already?" Balto said, still with some sleep in his eyes.

"It is morning, you sleaping head! Happy aniversary Balto." Jenna said, laughing between it.

"Oh, happy aniversary Jen."

"Thanks!" They were just an few seconds awake when Ewan run in the boat, out of breath.

"Jen.... Jen....its....." He said, breathing like wild. "What is it, Ewan?" said Jenna, with worry in her voice. "Its....." "Oh no, is it....?" Jenna's eyes widened in reconizion and was taking two steps backwards. "Yes....it...is." Jenna's mind said run, run... "Where is she?" "In the....alley between.....Main street and......" Balto saw that Jenna begun to tear up. "Jen? Jen, what's wrong?" But wen she wanted to awnser, she runed out of sigth, with two tears, rolling over her cheek."Ewan, what's wrong?"he said.

Jenna runed like she have ran never before, only haunted with an horroric tougth. No, no, not him, please not him...... Ewan and Balto ran behind her, Balto still trying to know what was going on. Ewan coudn't tell Balto why.

Jenna runed between the alleys of Nome, only to think that if it wasn't to late. After she runed like crazy, she reached the alley between Main street and Fake street. She stoped in her tracks, only to see the most terrifing thing in her life, she saw her mother, lying in an growing puddle of blood. "No." she cried out. She buried her head on her mothers shoulder and sobbed.

After that Balto and Ewan runed behind her and saw Jenna, crying on the body of her mother, "J-Jenn-a......I-I....." her mother lifting her head up, trying to comform her daugther from such emotional distress. Jenna hearded her mothers dying voice. "Who did this, mom? Who?" she said, with an sobcracked voice. "I-It was Mar.........tin......" An choking sound came from her mothers mussle "No, please mom, don't leave me alone, please." she cried out. "J-Jenna........... I lov......you;" her mothers eyes rolled over. Jenna's mother just died in front of her eyes. After Jenna heared these words, she bursted in tears, crying almost uncontrolable.

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After she regained control over her emotions, she saw Balto and Ewan standing, also in emtional distress, she walked to them. She saw Balto, almost in tears and Ewan, crying uncontrolable. She tried to say something to Balto, but she couldn't bring a word over her lips. After a few second, she said, with an sob cracked voice. "Well, Balto.....sorry that you have to......see this." "It's okay Jenna, I surely think she is in a better place." said Balto, trying to comform her. Ewan regained control over his emotions and asked to his sister, "Who did this, Jen?" "It's was Martin, I knew it." Ewan was in shock, he remembered the name but Balto saw how Ewan and Jenna reacted by hearing this name.

"Jenna, who is Martin?" asked Balto to Jenna. Jenna sighded "Balto, I can't tell you who it is because I......", after she remebered what Martin said on that faithful evening, she runed in tears trowards the outskirts of Nome. "Jenna, wait!" screamed Balto after her when he saw Jenna, running away in tears. "Balto, leave her alone! I will tell you who Martin is and why she can't tell it." Ewan said to Balto when he saw Balto was trying to folow her.

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Meanwhile, somewhere in the forests around the city, walked an black and white malmamute with black, mercyless eyes. He was walking trough the forest, trying to escape from the coolbloody act of murder he did the last nigth. Alrigth, now I will hide here for a while. I want that that monster of nature know that my rage isn't coolled off. I'm comming back, Jenna, and now I'm worser than you think. He tougth. He hided himself in an old wolf den, ready to strike back if the time was ready to take the final revenge.

I think it's rather interesting. The only real thing I have to point out to ya is that there are a few spelling errors. Other than that I think it was good and will be looking forward to up-coming chapters.

What do you mean with "a few sopelling errors"? Is it when Jenna's mother Celeste died just forher eyes? If it is that that is because she had been killed in the nigth and she has been lying all the time in the ice cold snow, no wonder that you talk like that.

Well, the errors I was talking about were just repeated in your post:

sopelling? It should be spelling
forher? I think ya meant before
nigth? It should be night

Besides, ya did ask for some comments and I'm just trying to show ya some areas for improvement. It's not like I said anything bad about the story itself.

Ok guys, here is the second chapter but I must warn you, it is unbelievably horrorably so don't sue me if your readed this story, ok?

Chapter 2:The nigthmare envolves.

Balto and Ewan were sitting at the fire in Jenna's house. "Ewan, you was going to tell who Martin is and what he or it have do do with Jenna?" Balto said. "Well, er, I don't know how to start, but I.....wait I do know again. Balto, do you know my father Barrow?" "Err, yes. Is it that big husky where Jenna always could come when she was sad?" "Yes, he is, or if I can better say, was. He died just two years after she was born."

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It was an stormy nigth over the little city of Applegate. An old shed stood in the front-line of the storm. An big red and wite husky was manking into the shed. He sees an burgundy-cream husky, comformting two huskies, already over their teenager years, but they were scared than ever when the storm unleased his fury on the small shed. This was the most furious storm in years. When the big red and white husky manked into the shed, he spoke up. "Celeste.....I......." "Barrow, what's wrong?" "I............nev...........er....." he studdered. One of the two huskies, the red and cream one, spoke up. "Dad, what's wrong?"

Immediantly, an enourmous crack was heared over the sealing, only could comming from an high speed wind. The brown and cream husky, who was the brother of the red and cream one, sceared stiff. The red and cream husky wasn't listening, her father health was more important. Barrow tried to speak what he had. "Celes.........te.........I.......'ve........" he said. Celeste did notice what Barrow had for an kind of dissease. "Barrow, please, follow me to the hospital, doc will help you" "Mom, what's wrong with dad?" "Quiet, Jenna, I'm bussy." said Celeste. Immediantly, an choking sound came out the mussle of Barrow, causing both Jenna and Celeste to scare stiff. "Barrow, please, follow me, I don't want to see you die." And then, Barrow feld, an growing puddle of blood comming from the rear end of his body.

Jenna cried after she saw that her father died from an terrible dog disease that run trough the Alaskian tundra in the winter of 1924, Lupus Aerlinaes. Ewan, the brother of Jenna, came to see the dead body of his father, only crying both with his sister, but not in the way who Jenna cried. The storm cleared mistiracly up when Barrow died. Celeste noticed this and runed out the shed and was trying to find some help.

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Balto was pinned to the ground after he hearded how Jenna her father died. "After this we moved to Nome, because mom was trying to find a new husband and family to help her and us. Applegate was to small for us. Jenna was found by Rosie and she adopted her." Ewan said. Balto finally knowed how she ended up by Rosie, but he dind't knowed how she got stumeled up with that mistericaly Martin. "Ewan, how your father died must be hard to come over for your mother. Wasn't it hard for your mother to find an replacement for your father?" "It wasn't hard to find him. You see, on a nigth in october 1924....."

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The sun had set over the small city of Nome, with the shadows tipping on an building. Inside were two dogs, both huskies. One was cream and red, the other was cream and brown. They were talking over how their father had died. "Jenna, I'm sure mother hasn't find a new man, dad was to important for her." said the brown husky. "But Ewan,why are you talking over this? I don't think mom will replace dad, I don't think it." Jenna said. They were chatting so hard that they don't noticed that their mother standed in the doorway with an other dog.

The dog was an white and black Alaskian Malamute with mercyless black eyes. Jenna tougth first that it was Steele, the top-dog of Nome in those days. He had an crush on her but after she saw it better, it seemed that he was older. "Steele?.........." she spoke up. "Jenna! Do I have you teached some maners?!! This is my new man, Martin." Celeste said. Jenna wanted to burst in tears because her mother screamed to her. She dind't knew her this way. Martin said something to her mother and walked to her and Ewan. Then he spoke for the first time to her with such an low voice that was doomed to ring trough her and her brother's mind forever. "So, Celeste, are these your children? You didn't say something over these!" "Oh, sorry Martin, I havn't introduced them." She pointed to Ewan. "This is Ewan." She said. Martin dind't did anything. Then she pointed to Jenna. "And this is Jenna." She said. Martin reacted this time so hard that did seal Jenna's fate forever. He screamed out in rage and smaked his razorsharp claws into her face with enourmous speed. The blow was so heavy that she flow 5 meters in the air and then colapsed with an bonecrushing speed into the wall.

She regained control over her body and standed up, almost begining to cry. Martin spoke to Jenna with his low voice: "And the rest is for tonigth!" Martin walked away to Celeste and Celeste spoke up: "Martin, you did a good job, I had my hands full with her!" They both walked out of the door. Jenna hearded these hartwrenching words. She collapsed, curled up and begon to cry. Ewan had seen this and hearded the words of her mother. He walked up to Jenna and was trying to comform her sister, but begon to cry on itself.

That nigth, she was trying to get some sleep but cried because the pain of that evening still runed trough her body. Finaly, she fell into a ligth sleep, only to waked up by the voice of her godfather, the first of a faithfull series of nigths of nigthmaric proportions. The voice spoke up: "Hello, Jenna, do you remind what I have said?" Jenna was shot awake. She shook her head, trying to find where the voice came from. Then, he walked up. Jenna still tougth it was Steele that walked into her bedroom. She said again: "Steele?" Next, she flow again 5 meters into the air, but she landed upon her bed. Martin jumped upon her and begon to claw her stiff. Every claw runed trough her body like a hot knife trough butter, but the pain was uninmanginable. Martin screamed it out. "Steele?!!! Do you see me as that ************?!!! Do you realy see me like him?!!! Well, then it will be!!!" Next, he grasped her neck, causing to smack her on the, almost concrete, hard floor. He smacked her five times on the floor. Then he left her go, smacking her into the wall. The whole nigth, he led his emotions go on her.

After the first sunbeams came trough the windows, Martin stopped with his rage on her. Jenna was crying unstopable. Martin walked away and Jenna, finnaly regaind control over her emotions, tryed to stand up. Martin saw this and smaked her on the wall. "Oh, no you don't!!! You lay down here and don't stand up, or I'll do it again." Jenna feld of she was motionless. She had just met Martin last nigth and he was already on the brick of total madness, only caused by one name, Steele! After the hard words of Martin sunk in, she slamed the ground with her face and begun to cry.

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Balto was almost in tears after hearing this unbelievably nightmmarish night of horror and abuse. He spoke up to Ewan, with an sobcracked voice: "Ewan, How did you find this out? How did Jenna came over it?" "Sorry Balto, I don't know the awnser on all your questions and hold on, because it get worser, much worser. Every nigth, Martin did get madder and madder. Why? I don't know, but on a night in 1978, he begun with another monsterably piece of madness, he begon to rape her!!!" Balto was almost blown away with this word. "Ewan, why did your mother nothing? Why didn't she stop Martin with his monsterably acts?" "Balto, Jenna did said to Celeste what Martin was doing but she didn't believe a word of her and she smacked her also." Balto didn't wanted to hear it any further, but Ewan assisted. "From the year 1978 until the year 2001, he did get worser and worser, Jenna came out with monsterably big scars, until that faithfull night." Ewan paused, remebering the date when everything chanced. "April 28th, 2001."

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Jenna was lying in her bed, crying. She had tryed to say to her mother that Martin had abused her every night. Celeste hadn't believed her and smacked her good. She didn't gave her also breakfast, lunch and dinner as punishment. She, still remebering the hunger and the pain she had, she was a little glad that Martin wasn't here, he was on a familly trip to Switserland, so had her mother told her, and after these calming memory, she drifted in sleep. Until an low, mercyless voice broke the gentill atmosfear. "Hello, Jenna, did you think that I did leave you alone for one night?" Jenna was shot awake. Martin walked up from the darkest place of her room. "No! No, this is impossible, you was on that familly trip to Switserland! Mom said it!" Next, Martin sprung on her bed and grasped her on her neck. "Listen you b****, I wasn't on a vacation or trip, I was rigth here and I had investigaded you all the day!!!! Such as you love that Wolfdog!!!!" Jenna tryed to escape but Martin grasped her neck and swung her on the wall. She landed with an bonecrushing speed on it. Jenna collapsed on the floor. Whole the night, it seemed to go on and on forever, Martin did go on with his abusing.

After the sun came trough, he was satisfied. Jenna did tryed to get up but Martin smacked her on the floor, with bloody results. "As you tell this to anyone, I will come back!!!" he said. And then he walked away. Jenna begun to cry.

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Balto couldn't believe what he just hearded. He just heard the nigthmare of his mate. He tryed to talk to Ewan, but didn't get an word over his lips. "And so did Jenna run away." Ewan said.

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Meanwhile, in the outskirt of Nome, Jenna regained control over her emotions. She wanted to walk back to Balto and Ewan, but she didn't get up, it was almost of she was spun in steel. Then, a black and white Malamute with mercyless black eyes came in front of her, with an sinisterish smile on its face. Jenna's eyes widened in fear. Immediantly, he begun to laugh, harder and harder. Jenna begun to tear up from fear. Martin immediantly sprung up with his jaw open to lunge at her neck. Jenna, in fear brought her eyes shut. She waited to the pain of Martins jaw run trough her neck, but it never came. After that, she opend her eyes and saw that everything was just as normal. She tryed again to stand up and this time it succeeded. She standed up, and walked back to Balto and Ewan, still with the strange dream into her mind. Martin is back, I feel it, she tougth while she was walking.

Back at her house, she could'nt hide a whimper while she was walking trough the doggy door and seeing Balto and Ewan, both with an grim face. "Balto, Ewan had told it, I think?" Jenna said. "Jenna, I..... can't say what I..........."Balto tryed to speak up. "No Balto, don't say anything, I know what your feeling, but I'm sorry that it must be on our anniversary." "Jenna, I will try to protect you from him." Balto said. "Balto, I don't think that it will be enough to stop him, you don't know him!" Jenna said.

I like it!! I think ya need to give yourself more credit because it's not easy to make a fanfic(at least a good one) and I think ya've done quite a good job so far.

I also, noticed much less spelling errors which is a plus.

Say guys, sorry that I didn't tell you anything, but I'm back!!!! I'm almost ready with the third chapter, but it's gonna take a few days when I'm putting this chapter online. And Whitewolf17, if you read this, what do you mean with "you have to give yourself more credit"?

Good day guys, I know that I make some double posts, but that's because nobody had posted on this thread, but I have some good news for the people who are following this fanfic, I have finished the third chapter and I'm putting it now online!!!!

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Chapter 3: Taking the blow.

After Balto and Jenna walked trough the doggy door of her house, the sun had already set on the Alaskian tundra. Jenna decided to stay with her brother into her house, and she assisted to Balto to sleep at her house, too, because she was afraid that Martin would lunge an overnigth attack at her. Balto couldn't stay at her house because he needed to wait for Boris to come back from his anual family visit in Russia. He said that he came back tonigth. Jenna did understand. "Jenna, Boris would help us. Just stay in your house, OK?" "OK, Balto, good nigth!" Jenna said. Balto walked away. Jenna stayed outside to watch him disapear in the fading sunligth. Jenna was away in tougths, from the day that had to be a great day where they could celebrate their anniversary and could see that they were such good at keeping together after more than 80 years. Jenna was sunk into thoughs wgen Ewan said, "Jenna, lets get some sleep, alrigth?" Jenna was shot awake, but she nodded, and said "Yeah, you're rigth Ewan, lets get some sleep".

Balto walked trough the Alaskian snow, in tears. He had the same toughs as Jenna had. He wanted just like her to celebrate the 83 years they were together and that they were so good in keeping their togeter. After he boarded on the boat, he hearded some some rumbling in his house. 'Boris? Jenna? Somebody?" he said. an shadow of something was moving around. It was the shadow of an she-wolf. Balto saw it and was confused, because he dind't know who it was. "Who ever you are, come out the darkness and let me see who you are!" There came no reaction. Balto said it again. Again no reaction. Balto's paitience was out. He lunged out on the place where he saw the shadow, with an speed wich could kill everyone who is in the place. But then, "Please papa, don't kill me! Please!!", the shadow screamed. Balto knew the sound of the scream and crashlanded into a pile of fishingnets wich the fishermen had forgoted when they abandonned this boat. Balto climmed out the fishernets, and run to the shadow. "Aleu!!! Girl!!! Oh man, how did I miss you!!"" "Papa, it is hard to say, but it...... The pack did set me out because they didn't finded any caribou. The caribou where extinted in Russia, but they didn't believe me, so I must swim over the Siberean Sea." While Aleu was telling her story, they didn't saw that Boris was trying to fly over the Alaskan Tundra, but he almost crashlanded in an enourmos pile of snow that was lying in the direction of Balto's boathouse. After him were two polar bears running and trying to follow him. "Not so fast, uncle Boris, we cannot follow you." said the little one, who was named Muk., the other big one, who was named Luk, mummbered something in the ways of yes, we are. "Will yiou please shot up, boychiks? I have here already troubles enough for controling this fligth." Boris said. Muk and luk were then saying both yes. Balto and Aleu were still talking about why Aleu did get trown out her pack. "Unbelievably Aleu, what a couple of jerks." "I know papa, but how is it going on with you and mom?" After Aleu asked this question, Balto coulnd't bare to let an tear, and then bursting into tears. "Papa, what's wrong? Are you and mom divorced?" "No Aleu, it's......It's......Your mother is in trouble because her godfather is going to kill her!!!" "What?!!! papa, tell me the whole story, if it's cruel and horrorfull, I can take it!" Aleu said. "OK Aleu, so, it seems that your mother....." and Balto told the story that Ewan had told him. Aleu didn't knowed what overcame her. She had hearded the stroy of how her mother experienced the nigthmare of her long life. She didn't wanted to believe it. "No.......no, this is imposible......Your covering it up.......I...." "Aleu, this has realy happend" Aleu didn't said a word, until Boris crashlanded into the same pile of fishernets where Balto has landed a few minutes before. Bato and Aleu hearded rumbling behind them. "Goddamned, I still can't fly!!!" came a voice out the nets. Aleu reconized the voice. "Uncle Boris, your back." "Hey Aleu, eh, help me here out." "Alright, Uncle Boris, don't you worry." She helped her uncle out the fishernets, but then, immediantly, came out of the darkness Muk and Luk, both screaming "ALEU!!!!". They hugged Aleu, but with their strength they almost crushed her. "Uuuughh!!! Muk, Luk, let me go!!!!" She said, almost choking from muk and luk. "Alrigth you two, let her go." said Balto, with laughs. "Comnostiash, Muk, Luk, let Aleu go!!!!" Boris screaming to them. They let Aleu go, after both screaming in fear. "Aleu, everything rigth?" said Balto. Aleu, trying to regain her breath, said "Yeah, Much better. Uncle Boris, where did you get from? I tougth you were with Stella, because you said you where going to marry her?" "Aleu, I'm sorry to tell you, because Stella and I are divorced. I'm so sorry." Aleu didn't do anything.

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Meanwhile, in the house of Jenna, Jenna was trying to get some sleep, but she still was on guard, because she thought that Martin could come out the dark spots of her room. Although Ewan had told the story, she still thought that Martin would kill her because he would think that Jenna had told it. A few seconds later she felt into a light sleep, until she was shot awake by pawsteps on the stairs. Next, she begun to scream, "No!!!! No, please!!! No, mercy, please let me alone, please?!!!!!!" The pawsteps went on and on, Jenna begun to scream even harder. A paw begun to scratch onto her door. As a last ditch of hope, she jumped under the sheets of her bed, still screaming to let her alone. While Jenna duck in scared in the pillows, and screamed for mercy, Ewan walked in and saw her little sister in her bed, scared like hell. Ewan said, "Jenna!! It's me, Ewan!!!" Jenna out to see the person who said the words, and if it wasn't a trap of Martin, to forvil his revenge. First, she climed verry slowly out of her bed, were she saw red paws. Then completely conforted, she popped her head out and saw her brother standing for her. She bursted in tears, because she thought that it was Martin, ready to take revenge. Jenna said "Oh, Ewan, I dind't....I thought....I....I" Ewan nuzzled her sister and tried to say something to her. He said, "It's alright Jen. I'm here!". Jenna stopped with her histerical sobbing, returned the favor for chearing the Brother-Sister moment.

After a while, Ewan started to walk down. Jenna begun to walk with him and said, "Ewan, wait! And Martin?" "Don't worry. If he's here, just scream, and l'm come running to you!", Ewan walked following over the squeaky stairs, leaving Jenna alone in her dark room. It was horrorbely quiet, and she perked her ears to hear anything that moved. She still hearded for some minutes and climed her bed, still on her guard. She begun to find her sleapingspot, after she realized that it was save to sleep, and that Martin didn't came to haunt her, and settled for a easy sleep.

She felt after a while into a vast sleep and began with dreaming, but she didn't noticed that that dream would turn into a worse nightmare.........

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Jenna was walking with her parents, Barrow and Celeste, over Nome Main Street, just like a normal family would do, talking about various things. A few minutes later, she felt into a complete darkness, only with sound of growling and yelping on the background. Jenna was feeling scared and wanted to run away, when she fell again in a darkness, where she felt in a lake of mud. After she came back to consiousness, she checked the place where she was, looked down to herself, seeing that she was smeared full with mud, and then screamed hysterically. She had an trauma in case of mud. Next an ridge appeared in the lake, and Jenna leaped for her live trowards the ridge, where she landed succesfully. She tried to lick the mud of her body, but it won't came loose. While she tryed and tryed again, she realized the mud would never came loose, and causing her to cry, for her childhood trauma she got against mud. Next, the ridge dissapeared as quickly as it came, causing for Jenna to fall again in the enourmous lake of mud. After she fell into the rich mud, she lost again consiousness, almost like a coma, and sank towards the bottom. After she regained her consiousness, the first thing she felt was that her lungs were going to shrink, and smelled an high concentration of an earthlike smell. After she regained consiousness,she smelled the smell of the mud, screamed like hell, and swam towards the coast of the mud-ocean. Next, she dragged herself on the solid ground. She tryed again to lick the mud of her body, wich, again didn't came off. Where she almost started to cry, Martin came out of the darkness and stopped into his tracks. He saw that Jenna was covered with mud, and again swung his paw trowards Jenna's face, again with an gigantic, bleeding wound, and screamed to her, "You B****, how many times I said, DON'T PLAY IN THE MUD!!!!!!!", where she flew again 5 metres in the air, landing into a lowhanging tree, where she had fractured her front paw. Next, Martin sprung into the tree and slamed headfirst into her chest. With the blow, she flew out of the tree, and, misterically, her front paw was healed, and the next thing she did was running for her life.

An highspeed-chase occured next over the tundra of Jenna's dreamworld, with Martin, in uncontrollably anger, after her in hot chase. The chase happened over an hour, with a few close calls, for example that she trippled over an root, slamming with full force into a pile of mud, causing for her to lose important metres of Martin. Strangely enough, she stood up and the chase could start all over again. Then, she saw her mother, Celeste, with an verry angry face. She said to her that she was being chased by Martin, and that she feld into an enourmous ocean of mud, but unfortuantly her mother didn't listen a word of her and slaped her again and good. She begun to cry, and started to run, run away from he mother. She just saw that Martin runed to her mother, something said to her mother, and again came after her, were she fell into an black gap, comming out of nothing. She screamed towards her death........

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Jenna screamed when she was shot awake, shaking her head to convince herself that this was the real world, and screamed to Ewan. Ewan came running over the stairs, for saving her little sister for Martin, wich he tougth. He came into the room, but didn't saw Martin, or blood on the walls or anything else, but only an crying Jenna. He walked onto her, seeing that she had cryed uncontrolebly, because she had blubberly eyepatches. Jenna was glad that her brother came towards her. Ewan said, "Jenna, sis, what happened? Did Martin attacked you in sleep and smacked you hard?" Jenna said, "No Ewan, It was much worse, I had the worsed nightmare anybody could have!!"

And next she told about the nightmarish experience of the mudriver, the chase of Martin, the coldbloodiness of her mother and the rest of the dream, which only consulded in many more crying. Her brother, trying to conform her from the horror, said, "Oh, come on, Jenna, it was only a dream, stop your crying. It would'nt happen in real life. You know what? I will let Balto come over to help you, right?" Jenna said, between sobs, "Okay....... Alright....... Thanks Ewan." And Ewan walked following out of the room, and trowards the phone of the house, to call Balto to come over to their house.

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A few minutes later, at Balto's boathouse, Balto, Aleu, Boris and his two polar bears, where talking about the things what happened over the past years and the story of Jenna's terrible yougth, the deaths of her parents and who the demon was who doomed her whole life, when a ringing sound came from the direction of the group. Balto pirked it up, and headed trowards the phone. "It's Ewan.", he said, when he saw which name came on the display of his housephone, and he took it up. "Yes, with Balto? Ahh, Ewan, how it's going? Uh-huh, uh-huh, so,.........what? Jenna had an nightmare? Come on, Ewan, you could know that jenna would have nigthmares after the experiences she went trough the last years. What? we are needed at your house? Okay, we come!! Bye Ewan, and so long.", and Balto laid down the phone. Next, he walked trowards the group, who was still chatting, and said, "Alright, guys, Ewan had called, and we are needed at his house, because Jenna had a nigthmare. Only I and Aleu are needed, so, sorry Boris, you needed to stay home." Boris and his two 'cousins' walked, saddened, to one of the dark spots of the boat, and Balto, a little conserned, said, " Hey, guys, it's just for a little minutes, you may come over after a few minutes." Next, Muk and luk runed like crazy and almost crushed Balto in the progress. "Uuugh, Muk, Luk, I know your happy, but, don't kill me.", Balto said. They loose. "Thanks!" Balto said next.

A few moments later, Balto and Aleu walked in the direction of Jenna's parential home and Aleu begun chatting about the hellish events of her mothers yougth and asked how she should see her when they came into her house. Balto said next, " I don't know, Aleu, I just don't know.", and walked further, hoping to find an husky in good form, not an visistor of Dantes Hell.

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Meanwhile, at Jenna's house, Ewan was trying to comfrom her sister from all what she went trough, even from the most hardest points, and she told Ewan for the first time things he dind't saw or even hearded from. As one of the points, Jenna told a story, dating back from the year 1969, the first year of Martin's madness, when he became hellish than ever, and it wouldn't stop until April 28th, 2001, when Martin dissapeared from her memories, she couldn't tell the ohter stories of Martin's tortures he went trough, but now she told Ewan one that he never hearded or knowed the existence of. She began, "Ewan, I never told you about this, but Martin did in 1969 something worse that started the whole chain of events,"

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The morning of June 27th, 1969, showed much promise of a new great Alaskian summerday, but the room of an teenager Siberean Husky were the walls of her room once again painted with amounts of blood, because an Alaskian Malamute of unknown porportions, bit, sliced, trowed, smacked, clawed, and tortured of unimaginably porportions, his way on the young teenage Husky, who did her best not to burst into tears, because the Malamute was unforgivable for that sort of things, hoped for herself that he would go away, that she could mourn in her self, quietly but not for long, hoping to take something of the breakfast away and not run into a furious mother, screeching about the facts that she weren't on time for the breakfast, about that she was an accident, that she was the cause that her father died because she couldn't stand her attitute, and many other things.....

After a while, the Malamute did go away, and the Husky, thanking the heavens that it was faster than ever, and that he didn't gave her her morning slap, or claw, or whatever, and begun to mourn in herself. She got herself to the breakfastable and the Husky, named Jenna, did got some amounts of her breakfast, unfortuatly not enough for a dog, not even for a human, to lesh the hunger, the unimanigably large hunger she got since that October morning of 1924, she got enough food to last for a few days, but it wasn't enough to keep it at point of an normal person would eat. As the day went on, she did her normal things of the day, not returning in the evening because her mother don't wanted her to be around troughout the day, but after she returnd to her house that evening, she saw that her mother, not even her brother was there, only the Malamute, named Martin, was there, wealding an jackscrew, the same thing they use to haul tractors up. Martin asked her, "Well, where have you been?" Jenna didn't knew where to start. Martin asked her it again, only he screamed this time, "I said, WHERE HAVE YOU BEEN?!!" Jenna still didn't knowed where to start, and Martin's patience was up. Without a warning, he slamed the jackscrew with full force on the back of Jenna, then the legs, and at last the head. He then begun to slamed the jackscrew at harder and harder speeds, until the pain was at the border of unimaginably, where the feeling of her bodyparts where at the point of feeling numb, and next, she forgot the time, he stopped with slaming on her, with the wounds still bleeding of the hard compounds of the jackscrew, and she was crying a little. After it, he left her for death, causing Jenna to crawl upon her room, here she slowly curled up, tryed to have some sleep, and begun to cry a little in herself.........

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Ewan was pinned to the grond, after hearing this untold story of Martin's ravages onto her. Jenna, now crying, from the horrofic memory, from the pain that still ran trough her body and from the unexpected attack that followed was even still fresh in her mind. Jenna said following, with a calm voice because she regained her emotions, "Ewan, why weren't you at the point after Martin hitted me with the jackscrew? Why you dind't came over to conform me a little? Please, Ewan, tell me!" causing Jenna to begin with her crying again. Ewan next tryed to conform her again, and said to her, after he succesfully managed to control her emotions, in an calm voice, "Jenna, I wasn't there because I and mom where then going for an long hike. I said to her that I dind't wanted to go, but mom said that she already had trough that I helped you with rehabilitaiting. I had to lie to her, because she said that If it was true, Martin would begin on me as well, so, I'm sorry, Jenna, I'm so deeply sorry that I couldn't be there to help you." the next few minutes could a long silence be heared, until then, bonks were heared on the door. Jenna, ofcourse, screamed of terror undereath the couch. Ewan said, "Easy Jenna, It's just Balto and Aleu." Ewan walked to the door and opened it, and indeed stood Balto and Aleu. Nexr, they walked in, and Jenna crouched slowly beneath the couch, happy to see that it weren't Martin and some kind of a helper ho he summoned up to help him to torture and kill her. She ran up to Balto, screaming in the progress, "Oh Balto, thank heavens it's you!!!" and with contact, she almost blow Balto of his feet. Luckily, Jenna quickly saw in what she almost had done. Balto reacted even quickly on the point and said nothing. For the rest of the evening Jenna and Ewan told their eyewitness accounts to Balto and Aleu, and strangely enough, Boris and Muk and Luk never came over to the house. The evening turned to night and everybody went to sleep, Balto went to sleep with Jenna to reasure her that Martin wouldn't came to kill her, not after he had passed her lover.......
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If anybody have read this chapter, please, feel free to post your oppinions and comments, because I need to know if yyou like my fanfic, or that it is nothing more than a bunch of ugly words.

II'm now starting at the fourth chpater, but it could take a while, before that will be online.

Lock this thread, please.

Hey, sorry it's been so long but I've caught up in your story. Don't be discouraged, keep it up 'cause I like it.

Dutch, it is nice that you post a comment on the page of my fanfic, but I must dissapoint you, for a little, because the site had trown away the fanifc of the site, maybe with an update.


But there is nothing lost, because I have loaded the fanfic on my documents of word, and I will work the fanfic out to greater hights, and of course I will upload the new chapters on a regular base.


Thanks for supporting me with this work, it is verry hard to do, you know!!!!

Hellooooo?!!! Is somebody still around here? I want some post on my thread, I'm working very hard on this fic, and it isn't helping making my fanfic further as nobody posting his reviews on my preview thread. Is this forum actually working?

If it is because I haven't posted a new chapter, please let me explain. My younger brother creates a lot of havoc at our home the last time, and it's really getting on my nerves, so that means that I haven't got anytime to write at my fanfic, and today it is the first time in months that I started to work at my fanfic, and it would take another time for posting the fourth chapter on this site, and it wouldn't help me making it further if I didn't got any support from fellow forumers.

So if anybody, anybody, came along this thread, please be free to post me some support for making my fanfic, it would make a world of diverence at making it.

Thank you for listening to my words.

Sorry guys, but now that nobody is reading this I'm going to let this thread being closed and deleted.

Sorry, but nobody is reading this, so It's no use for letting this open.

Locked and deleted by request of author!!

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