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Post subject: No more sorrow. Posted: Fri Jul 11, 2008 12:18 pm |
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"Father... I cant... I cant be you. I'm not good enough!" She screamed through the tears streaming down her cheeks and onto the hard surface of her fathers den.
"Nyx," He cooned softly, "you can do it. I believe in you, I trust you and love you. Dont put yourself down so much... just trust yourself." He smiled, it soon faded when he coughed. Age was getting to him. He was dying slowly.
"No. NO!" she screamed, crying harder now. "I cant... I cant be who you are." With those words, she left.
Nyx, a mute, the princess of the largest pack to ever have exisited. She was next in line after her father was to pass away... When suddendly, she falls in love with a rouge. Her father's sick, and she knows her time to be alphess is comming... and the pack wont allow her to marry a rouge... and in order to stay alphess, she must wed with a male in her pack. The Beta's son to be infact. She cant handle the pain, the pressure. She makes a choice, to leave her dying father, her pack, the best life she ever had... and even the one she loved, the rouge. She never told anyone she leaving and she hated leaving with bitter memories burned inside everyone... When she dissapears, the pack relizes that unless she returns, they have no choice but to stay alphaless- or split. The rouge waited for her to return, when he could'nt wait any longer, he fell inlove only to find Nyx returns. Her life is even more hectic, her fathers gone, and the pack and the land has all wilted. They lost all will. Her return sent mixed emotions. They wanted her to lead... but they hated her for leaving them with no hope.
The male she loved still loves her... and someone else. Hes lost aswell... Pressure was getting to Nyx again, and the thought of leaving again was becoming to sound good...
She finally relized what she had to do... and it efects the rest of her life... as well as the life of others.
We need a player for the Rouge, his Other lover, the Beta, Various Pack members ect. I will play Nyx and another Male (Kiba) and Fae (Blue). They are both pack members, and they are Brother/sister.
Bios are UNnessisary, YOU MUST POST MORE THEN 3 LINES PER POST!!!
Just jump in :]
Nyx looked at her father, her eyes showed this deep pain, a pain that was unexplainable, a pain that was never seen before. She staired at him for a long time as he lay in the pile of leaves. He was sick, oh so very sick... Her father the only one that looked up to her... believed she was something, now lay in a bed of leaves his life deteriating everypassing day. No one else seemed to care about her. He was the only one who listened to her, who believed in her. She nuzzled his black fur. "Father," she whispered though she knew he couldnt hear her, "When I leave... dont miss me. I'll be okay... make sure you dont forget me, forget the bad things i've done... and make sure you help people miss me. I will return someday." She licked his face, tears flowing from her cheeks.
It was in the middle of midnight, and she took a long hard look at her father. She was a spitting image of him. Her dark black fur, her orange eyes... she was him. Her thoughts Shifted from him, to her lover. She never told him she was leaving tonight. As far as he knows, she'll still be here. She looked down, and left the life... the only thing she ever knew.
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Serra20
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Post subject: Re: No more sorrow. Posted: Fri Jul 11, 2008 12:27 pm |
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Can i have my own character?
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x_KiwiFruit_x
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Post subject: Re: No more sorrow. Posted: Fri Jul 11, 2008 12:33 pm |
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Can you post MORE then 3 lines? If so, then yes. If not, then unfortunately, You wont be able to join.
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Serra20
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Post subject: Re: No more sorrow. Posted: Fri Jul 11, 2008 12:48 pm |
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i can try but i'm not too good on speaking english,so.By the way,we still not roleplaying so i can write that much lines i want.And,i want to tell that this roleplay is nice and interesting but i'm angry on those who always say how many lines we had to post.So,why did you do that?If i don't had enough to say or i'm just doing the simple action what cannot be tell in the more than three lines,what have i do?Stop roleplay?
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Post subject: Re: No more sorrow. Posted: Fri Jul 11, 2008 1:20 pm |
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Well, its because some Rpers have certain standards. Its not fun when someone posts
He drank water. He got up. He looked at the water. Then he went to bed.
Something like...
He looked at the cool refreshing water for a long, hard time, the water he could feel rushing down his throat before even drinking any. He took a nice, cool gulp of the refreshing water before standing onto his four paws. He sighed softly, and looked over at his nice den. A nice pile of leaves was calling his name. He trudged tiredly to them, and rested his body comfortably onto the warm leaves that formed perfectly to fit his body shape. He let out a loud yawn, and closed his eyes, slowly drifting off to sleep.
Its more interesting, more fun to respond to.
Theres really nothing that you cant do to put three simple actions into a paragraph. As I did above, I took those VERY simple actions and made them more complex and detailed, so you get a direct feel of the character and his movements, actions and even some of his personality, From that post, you can tell he's a very lazy character, but yet he doesnt seem rude, or eager. He takes his time with things, and he seems overall very peacefull.
if you cant post more then three lines, then dont post at all. There are plenty of rps that dont require advanced or a minimum of lines, just rp in those till something hits you that you can keep rolling on with more... details that your character can do. When you get a drink of water, you dont just magicly have water in your hand, do you? no. You look at the water, you pour the water, you get a cup for the water, you walk to the water, you sip the water, you feel the water pour down your throat, you taste the water, you hold the cup with the water, you think of the water... all those actions can be put into simply getting a nice drink of water, am I wrong?
Putting a minmum of Sentace length is actually helping you, not hurting you. It challenges you to do more then you feel like, challenges your laziness, your creativity, your use of words. So many AMAZING roleplayers left because of the little posts people did when they rped, it just lost all the fun and creativity the rpers used to have.
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Post subject: Re: No more sorrow. Posted: Fri Jul 11, 2008 1:22 pm |
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Paw- can you post MORE then 3 lines? I saw your previous posts... its not up to the RPing standards I listed above in my first post.
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Post subject: Re: No more sorrow. Posted: Fri Jul 11, 2008 1:50 pm |
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 I'm sorry but- What do you mean? I've only posted once! We're not even RPing yet! Why should I have to post more than three lines if I'm just asking to be a character? Alright, you want a good interesting more-than-three-lines paragraph? That's what you're getting... Kiero groaned as his hazy vision became clearer and he realised he had fallen asleep again without realising. His muscles ached as he got up slowly from the hard rocky floor of his cave. His paws felt like lead as he dragged himself towards the mouth of his den. The fresh morning breeze hit his face, reviving his senses, and somewhere in the distance an eagle cried out. He sniffed the air and realised it was nearly noon. This had been happening to him a lot recently- his sleeping patterns had become irregular and broken- sometimes he would just fall unconcious in his den without even knowing it, and he would wake up to find himself collapsed on the floor, nearly 6 hours or so later.
His stomach rumbled like a thousand drums and he was painfully reminded that he hadn't eaten in a few days. Hunger was the only thing that drove him on towards the wood, every step seemed to take an age. Infact, his overall health had sunk terribly since....Nyx had left.
Oh, Nyx. He thought about her every minute, every waking second. It was all his mind acted on, his only motivation, his only will. Now she was gone it felt like a part of him had died- just shrivelled up and faded away into nothingness...and now he was suffering for it. He would often stand, pining away for her, on the rocky outcrop that they used to rest on often. He would give anything now, just to hear her laugh again, or to see her sweet smile or her sparkling eyes....
Food. Yes- he must eat. He continued steadily walking towards the woods. There might be a hare he could catch if he was lucky.....There. Is that good enough?
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Post subject: Re: No more sorrow. Posted: Fri Jul 11, 2008 1:55 pm |
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Paw- what I meant was, in some of your previous Rps. :] And thank you. I appreciate the length. yes, you may be the rouge. ^^ 8D
Whisper- Sorry. :[ but I hope you still stay in the Rp. You can be another Rouge, mabey one that Kiba or Blue (both my chars) could fall inlove with or something. ^^
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Post subject: Re: No more sorrow. Posted: Fri Jul 11, 2008 2:07 pm |
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Thankyou very much! ^^ Yes, I know In other roleplays I haven't posted many big paragraphs- but I can pull off a good show when I want to :]
Whisper - apologies!
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Post subject: Re: No more sorrow. Posted: Fri Jul 11, 2008 5:34 pm |
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Ok can i join? i will be a pack member named Tasha if i can join. Don't worry i can do more than three lines every time i post in the roll play. 
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Post subject: Re: No more sorrow. Posted: Sun Jul 13, 2008 1:45 pm |
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Very Nice plot Kiwi, mind if i join as the Beta male? Name-Chino Age-3 Gender-male breed-Mexican wolf Description-His coat has a mixture of brindled black, asphelt, grey and marron. His striking face featurs make him a handsome wolf. Personality-determinend, smart and witty and cunning Rank-Beta male Crush-Nyx Mate-none Pups-none Pic-  Anything else ma'am?
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Post subject: Re: No more sorrow. Posted: Thu Jul 17, 2008 8:14 pm |
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Oh! Sure, they can join... but the rp would be paused for a month. so... i might be able to post every once and a while.
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