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 Post subject: New Fanfic i am making tell me what you think
PostPosted: Sun Jan 27, 2008 7:39 am 
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Its what I think happend to the red faced pup i nammed Rose. Ok i made only the frist part so if no one liked it I wouln't have to get rid of the whole story. :D ok here goes:


“Rose, you have so much to learn…first…leave the past behind. Enter the present, and never look back at what you have done…”

A Change in my Plans

Rose looked at the older female dog. Then she looked back at her remaining brothers and sisters waiting to be adopted. She dropped her head.

“I am Elizabeth, Rose I think you will find my home to your liking.” Said Elizabeth not glancing down at Rose but keeping her eyes fixed ahead.

Rose looked at Elizabeth. She was a beautiful Long and lean husky. Her fur was a deep shade of almond brown. Around her eyes there were patches of black. Elizabeth’s eyes where sapphires gleaming. Elizabeth’s paws where dainty and she seamed to glide. Rose looked at her own fur, a maroon-brown color. Rose noticed how Elizabeth walked with out even slouching once. Rose straitened up and pranced to Elizabeth’s side. Rose looked around at everything in the little town.

“Rose, you must always keep your eyes fixed on your destination, don’t let them wander or you will get lost.” She said sternly looking down at Rose for the first time.

“Sorry…but I don’t think I have ever been here before, it’s always going to the beach to see dad or mom’s house…never around town.” Rose stopped and looked around for a brief moment and sniffed in the smells. “So where are we going do you live here? Where do you live? Am I going too? What’s it like? Are there other dogs too?” Rose looked up and saw that Elizabeth was a yard away still gliding along the road. Rose hurried to keep up.

“Now what where you saying Rose?” She looked at rose. “Ah yes we are headed to British Columbia in Canada that is.

Rose didn’t know what to say. “Uh… so you came all the way to Nome just to get me…?” Rose was so confused.

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 Post subject: Re: New Fanfic i am making tell me what you think
PostPosted: Sun Jan 27, 2008 11:32 am 
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Hey BB9000, I like the story and I can't wait to see what happens to Rose. I just have one coment, and that is that this story needs a little more description on the place where it is happening. But your dialouge is very good. Just work a little more on the description and this will be an excelent story.

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PostPosted: Sun Jan 27, 2008 1:12 pm 
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thank you and i will i need to !! :lol: thanks again for the coment ^^ :D

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PostPosted: Sun Jan 27, 2008 11:17 pm 
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Good, keep writing then. I hope you make a great story. By the way, I'm new too at making story. You can see it at Fan Fiction.


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PostPosted: Wed Jan 30, 2008 6:47 pm 
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I'll be sure to check it out!!! :D

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