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 Post subject: KH3: Oblivion
PostPosted: Mon Dec 10, 2007 6:11 pm 
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Hiya everybody, this is my very first fic! So please no flaming (^_^')

These characters belong to their respective owners
Balto and Co-Universal
Angel and Kavik-BaltoLuver63
Cecelia, Mooneye, and Cecilia’s subordinates-Fan boy 101
Disney Chars-Disney
Anime chars-Respective Owners

READY STEADY CAN'T HOLD ME BACK
READY STEADY GIVE ME GOOD LUCK
READY STEADY NEVER LOOK BACK
LET'S GET STARTED READY STEADY GO
fukitonde yuku fukei korugaru you ni mae e
kurushi magure demo hyouteki wa mou minogasanai
ate ni naranai chizu yakute shimaeba ii sa
uzumoreta shinjitsu kono tenohira de tsukami torou
muchuu de (hayaku) kake nukete kita
urusai kurai ni harisake sou na kodou no takanari
hibite (yonde) iru kimi no koe
koko de tachidomaru you na jikan wa nai sa
READY STEADY GO
kazoe kirenai kizu kakae konde ite mo
chotto yasotto ja tamashi made wa ubawasenai
ano oka no mukou de kimi ni deaeta nara
nani kara hana sou sonna koto bakari omou yo
muchuu de (hayaku) kake nukete kita
urusai kurai ni harisake sou na kodou no takanari
hibite (yonde) iru kimi no koe
koko de tachidomaru you na jikan wa nai sa
READY STEADY GO
READY STEADY CAN'T HOLD ME BACK
READY STEADY GIVE ME GOOD LUCK
READY STEADY NEVER LOOK BACK
LET'S GET STARTED READY STEADY GO
kokoro wa (hashiru) ano sora no ******
karamawari suru kimochi ga sakebi dasu no o tomerarenai
kimi made (todoke) kitto ato sukoshi
atsuku hizashi ga terasu kono michi no mukou
READY STEADY GO
PLEASE. TRUST ME.




1928 Nome Alaska

Jenna- Oh where’s Balto?

Kodi-Hey mom, you ok? Where’s dad?

Jenna- He’s supposed to take me to see the northern lights. But guess he’s training for the Iditarod race tomorrow. Kodi why don’t you go find dusty and then we can all go.

Kodi- Alright Mom, see you later!

Meanwhile on the other side of town where Boris is training Balto like crazy

Boris- c’mon Balto just 10 more laps.

Balto- I think my heart is going to explode Boris!

Boris- Oy Balto, you do want to win don’t you.

Balto- Yes I do but that doesn’t mean I have to let my heart explode! And if you didn’t realize I was supposed to meet Jenna.

Boris-Okay fine, have it your way.

Balto- What, your not coming?

Boris- Nah, I’ve got a date with Stella tonight.

Balto- Ok but don’t come running back when wolverines have a certain craving for goose!

Boris-(gulps) uh maybe we’ll come with you.

Balto- Alright, see you then.

Aurora borealis 8:00 PM

Jenna-Balto, there you are. I was worrying about you (licks Balto on the cheek)

Balto- It’s good to see you to Jenna (licks Jenna back)

Kodi- Hey pop

Balto- Well Kodi it seems that you aged a bit since the last time I saw you

Kodi- Maybe it’s because you’ve been training with uncle Boris to long.

Balto- Ha-ha very funny

Dusty- Hey, I wounder where Star and Angel could be.

Star- *Ahem*

Dusty- Oops, sorry about that Star

Star- No worries, I get that all the time.

Balto- So what brings you here?

Star-Well Angel and I were going to see the Aurora Borealis, but we didn’t know that we would be having company

(Aurora Borealis lights up the sky)

Angel- isn’t it beautiful Star?

Star-Yeah, it sure is.

(Cut to Kodi)

Kodi- Um dad, I don’t think those are the northern lights!

(Skies turn red, then a Swirling vortex of darkness in the sky)

Balto-Oh crap!

(Strong winds as sharp as a sword made from the sharpest metals violently blasted Balto into the black hole in the sky)

Balto-Arrrggghhh!

Jenna-Balto don’t leave me.

Balto-Jenna, reach for my paw.

(Jenna tries to grab Balto’s paw but the winds pulled him further away that it seemed impossible for him to return to his lover’s arms)

Balto-Jenna!!!!!!!!

Jenna-Balto!!!!!!!

(Everything turns black)


Balto-(Ooooogh) my head, it feels like I got hit by a car.

Balto-Where am I?

(Looks around to see that he’s in a dank, dark alley)

(Black hooded Dog appears in the room)

Black hooded Dog-So, this is the “great” savoir of Nome, (cynical laughter) Balto, you are no hero!

Balto-Who are you and how did you know my name?

Black hooded Dog- Oh, I know everything about you Balto, about your life, about your future, even about your death.

Balto-But I still don’t who you are?

(Takes off hood slowly)

Black hooded Dog- I am Togo, dog of Darkness (Deep, dark laughter)

Balto-Togo……. but I thought you were dead?

Togo -That’s right I was dead, and ever since you won the heart of millions by “saving” them and leaving me out in the wilderness where I had fight to survive, I have been planning for my revenge. But sadly when I was searching for food in the woods, a boulder fell on my spine and my hind legs were broken, but fortunately a man with hair as black as the darkest night came to my aid and told me that if he rescues me, I have to sign a deal with him to be his servant for all eternity.

Balto-And let me guess, you agreed.

Togo -I had no choice! It was the only way to save my life and the only way to get revenge on you Balto!

Togo -You see, I once had a life, a beautiful family, everything was going perfect for me and you had to take it all away!

Balto- But I didn’t kill you, you killed yourself by clouding your thoughts with revenge and lost your sanity

Togo - Like I had any sanity! You had to be all let me get the credit and not let Togo (the dog who worked his tail to the bone) be the true hero.

Balto- I was just trying to put an end to the children’s suffering, while you were just doing it for the fame and fortune.

Togo- SILENCE!!!!!!

Balto- (O_O)

(A barrage of Chains wrap around Balto)

Balto-(Gasping for breath) what did you do with my friends?

Togo-Oh, They’re at our base transforming into heartless as we speak.

Balto-You dirty ******* (choke)

Togo-ahh ahh ah, we wouldn’t want to lose our “hero” now would we?

Balto-(gasping for air)

Togo-Is there anything you want to say during your three seconds of consciousness?

Balto-You...s…ssuck.(fainted)

Togo-(Deep, Dark laughter) Now I can finally dispose of you once and for all!

Zexion -Togo!!

Togo-Grrrrrrr, what the hell do you want?

Zexion-I hope that you’re not trying to sabotage our plans.

Togo-No sir, I was trying to make him weak before we send him to another world where he won’t be a nuisance to us

Zexion-Excellent, the soon we get rid of him the better, carry on.

(Zexion leaves)

Togo-(You’re lucky Balto, if it wasn’t for him your guts would be in my mouth right now.)

(A black vortex of darkness opens up in the wall)

(Togo grabs Balto by the throat

Togo-I don’t care where this thing takes you, I just want you to disappear.

(Togo tosses Balto in the vortex)

(Zexion appears)

Zexion-How dare you interfear with our plans!

Togo-My revenge is far more greater than some idiotic plan about luring the keyblade master to us.

Togo-Why do you need me anyway? Where are all the other members?

Zexion- You know as well as I do that the entire organization was destroyed by that wreched keyblade master and his friends.

Togo- But wait, were you destroyed too?
(flashback)
Zexion- No, I knew that the Keyblade wielder would kill me if he knew that I was involved in this, So I had to use a clone of myself and use it as a decoy to make them belive that I was dead.
(flashback ends)

Togo-Ah, very cunning, but how we are going to destroy him?

Zexion-Patience, my apprentice, patience. Our plan will soon come into fruition.

End of chapter 1

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 Post subject: Re: KH3: Oblivion
PostPosted: Thu Dec 13, 2007 5:04 am 
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Quote:
READY STEADY CAN'T HOLD ME BACK
READY STEADY GIVE ME GOOD LUCK
READY STEADY NEVER LOOK BACK
LET'S GET STARTED READY STEADY GO
fukitonde yuku fukei korugaru you ni mae e
kurushi magure demo hyouteki wa mou minogasanai
ate ni naranai chizu yakute shimaeba ii sa
uzumoreta shinjitsu kono tenohira de tsukami torou
muchuu de (hayaku) kake nukete kita
urusai kurai ni harisake sou na kodou no takanari
hibite (yonde) iru kimi no koe
koko de tachidomaru you na jikan wa nai sa
READY STEADY GO
kazoe kirenai kizu kakae konde ite mo
chotto yasotto ja tamashi made wa ubawasenai
ano oka no mukou de kimi ni deaeta nara
nani kara hana sou sonna koto bakari omou yo
muchuu de (hayaku) kake nukete kita
urusai kurai ni harisake sou na kodou no takanari
hibite (yonde) iru kimi no koe
koko de tachidomaru you na jikan wa nai sa
READY STEADY GO
READY STEADY CAN'T HOLD ME BACK
READY STEADY GIVE ME GOOD LUCK
READY STEADY NEVER LOOK BACK
LET'S GET STARTED READY STEADY GO
kokoro wa (hashiru) ano sora no ******
karamawari suru kimochi ga sakebi dasu no o tomerarenai
kimi made (todoke) kitto ato sukoshi
atsuku hizashi ga terasu kono michi no mukou
READY STEADY GO
PLEASE. TRUST ME.


This is not yours; this is a Japanese song, copyrighted to some artist named Jade (can't remember the surname).

Anyhow, other than that, the story isn't exactly well-built, and could use many improvements on punctuation, and basic grammar. As well as that, crossing Balto with Kingdom Hearts sounds like a very bad idea. In my opinion, it would kill both series.

You might be able to pull this off with a great result if you work hard, though.


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