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Well guys, I'm bussy for my first fanfic. In this fanfic Aleu and their sister Tovah plays an important role. This is the summary of the fanfic: In this FanFic plays Aleu the role of an Airborne Trooper of the 506 Parachute Regiment. She follows the greatest battles from the conentai troughwarts the liberation of Belgium. P.S. Tovah plays here an important role too.

The 506th? Are we talking the 101st Airborne Division, the Screaming Eagles?
In that case, I can assume this is World War II.
Having Aleu fight will be quite a switch from Balto or even Kodi being the soldier. Does Aleu perhaps impersonate a guy?
Sounds good so far. Post some if you want to.

-LWf

Well, first of all, this is of course World War 2, why I sould have the 506th? Second of all, Aleu plays not an guy because in this fanfiction she plays an important role because she is here one of the first female soldiers in the US Army wich their fight in the front-line!!!

Well, while nowone is posting anymore, I post something of my FanFic.

Southampton, England, June 5, 1944.

Over the great fields of South England, the morning was comming fast. The dark color of the night transformed slow into the orange color of the morning. The sunshine of the Sun floats into the direction of an military base.

The shadows of the base where pointing at the north, what means that it was in the early morning. The first sunshines of the day where shinning trough an hall, where they floats trough an sleaping hall. Two wolfs laying there, first, an brown wolf with wite paw markings lie on a bed, sleaping because it was only early in the morning. She named Aleu. The other wolf, waking up and taking her clothes on, had gray fur and black paw markings. She named Tovah.

Tovah saw the first sunshines and she wakes up Aleu.

"Aleu, wake up!! Its morning!!"

Aleu wokes up after great murmering.

She said "Tovah... Its only 6.00 A.M., the horn will wake us up!!!"

Tovah was angry, she want realy to woke up and have breakfast, but she can't pas trough the military laws, so she laid down and rest.


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Aleu and Tovah rest a while, but then the sharp sound of an horn crushes the gentil atmosfear, causing Tovah and Aleu waking up with an scream, what they always did.

An raw voice screamed, after they did the door open "Wake up, your bunce of girls, time for breakfast and then in the briefingsroom."

And they did. Tovah and Aleu, sisters of eachother, walks trough the messroom. The messroom was full of soldiers that where to breakfast. Aleu and Tovah where ditting at the table of the 506, also with other soldiers of the 506.

Tovah cames back to the table and she sits down.

"Aleu, thier having cornflakes!!! And my favorite flavour."

Aleu wasn't listening. She was asking herself why the drilmaster just said "and then in the briefingsroom".

After breakfast, they just did the thing what the drillmaster said.


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The Planningmaster telll his plan.

"....will land in.....France...."

After this they walks out the brieffingsroom.

Alue was deep in thinking, she was thinking over this operation and back for home. How it will be there?


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(Flashback) Nome, Alaska, August 7th, 1941.

Somewhere in the Alaskian wikderness, an raindrop fell from an cloud, wich their comming up fast. An rainstorm was forecast.

Back in an warm house at the end of Nome Main Street, an red and white husky walks trough the door, crying, and said: "Why, Tovah and Aleu, why you must figth and don't stay home here?" "Mom, we just grown up girls, we can save ourself!" an brown and white hybrid said. "Jenna, she's rigth! Their old enough to save her lifes."

Well, this is the point of my fanfic, see yah!!!

It seems interesting, but I noticed a few spelling and grammitical mistakes.

How do you mean Mistakes?

where = were
trough an hall = through a hall
Hello again.
I think what PantherPanzer13 meant by 'mistakes' were things like this:

(before = should be / another option)

She named = She was named / Her name was
gentil atmosfear = gentle atmosphere
sisters of eachother, walks = sisters, walked
that where to breakfast = that were there to have breakfast
deep in thinking = deep in thought / thinking deeply
wich their comming up fast = which was coming fast
why you must figth and don't stay home here = why must you fight and not stay here at home
Mom, we just grown up girls, we can save ourself! = Mom, we're grown-up girls, we can save ourselves!
Their old enough to save her lifes. = They're old enough to take care of themselves

These are just a few suggestions. Not a bad first try. Keep at it.
Don't give up!
-LWf

PS: Feel free to PM me if you need any help.