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Hi, I recently sent a fan fic and not enough people have read it to tell me what they think
of it or what it might be lacking. So, can you tell me what you think of it?

Link: http://baltosource.timduru.org/fic/Love ... -4779.html

Well,you're giving yourself a steer in the right direction,
and that's more than what I've done,when started to write fanfics,
maybe I could learn a lesson from you. ~~S/B.

thank you!