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PostPosted: Tue Dec 25, 2007 7:37 pm 
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PostPosted: Wed Dec 26, 2007 12:47 pm 
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Hello.

If you're going to advertise your fic in the forums, why not re-post it here? Just copy and paste it into this topic and let people read it.
Otherwise, just paste the link in your signature with a title or something.
Please don't just make a topic to say 'read my fic.'
If you're not going to post the fic here, I'll have to close this topic.

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PostPosted: Thu Apr 17, 2008 3:15 pm 
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FINALLY! My newest fic "AN ENEMY'S TWIN" is here!!!! ( and let me clear this up-- Steele and Streak are NOT birth twins; they just look alike. that's why I used the term twin!!!)

AN ENEMY'S TWIN


"Grrrrrr.....," Steele growled, baring his teeth at Streak. Streak backed away, but with a smile. " You know you wanna race....or maybe you're just a little CHICKEN!!!!Bok bok baaaaaaak!!!! ha!" Streak teased his brother. Both black-and-white huskies stared each other down, not moving. Suddenly, Steele lunged, his sharp teeth gleaming in the moonlight, heading for the other's throat. Suprised, Streak widened his bright blue eyes and jumped to the side. Steele looked stunned as he missed his brother's neck. Taking the unusual chance to ambush Steele, Streak lunged back at him. He landed with a thud on the larger husky's muscular back.

"Arrrah! You'll----Regret that, you menace," Steele growled, as he twisted around to face the courageous Streak. The two had been rivals since birth. "oooooh, I'm SOOO terrified!!! C'mon, Steele! All I want to do is race'ya! I thought you LOVED to run!" Streak said, trying to reason with his stronger sibling. Steele's expression told Streak that he was at a loss for words;caught off gaurd. "Well...I'ts not that I'm scared! I mean, I'm just tired..yeah, tired, that's all!!! Now leave me ALONE!" Steele told Streak.

"Oh yeah. That's a REAL good excuse! You really think I'll fall for THAT excuse? Come on, you call yourself a genius? Hey, I bet---" Streak was cut off by an ill-tempred snarl. Steele had had ENOUGH of this! Without warning, he leapt at his brother with wild eyes. He had a look foriegn to Streak-- a look of murder...

"You think you can get away with this?This torture,constant...game?!That's it! You think every waking moment is a GAME! You idiot, you horrible, meanacing IDIOT!!!! You think I'm playing? Well wake up brother, and face it, because I AM NOT LIKE YOU!!!!! I'm what some would call proud, or even accomplished!" Steele paused to take a rasping breath, and to make the look on his face even fiercer. His smirk turning into a snarl, Steele continued his lecture--which was bent on murder.

" But YOU, your'e just a disgrase! A break in champion lines! YOU'RE WORTHLESS, STREAK, AND YOU.....need......to.........GO!!!!!!!!! ARRRAGHHH!" he finally lost it and snapped his jaws around the smaller Streak's throat. He did not ler go, and never intended to until his brother was dead.

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On the other side of the argument was the suffocating Streak. As the gift of breath was being drained of him, Streak's mind went blank with confusion. Dispair showered down into Streak's head, filling it with nothing but disbelif. He was being murdered by his own brother. The enemy's twin was being murdered in plain sight. No one, he thought, could see this, and he was sure his own death was right around the corner.


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What Streak did not know was that, right around the corner, was not death but Nataki. A beautiful , slim, and red and white husky, she was horrified by what Steele was doing. The amber eyes on her red face widened rapidly and she raced out from her observation spot. With an astounded and protesting tone, she shouted at Steele.

" STEELE!!!!!!!!!!STOP! How COULD you??!! He's DYING, Steele! Let GO!!!!!"

Then, in desperation, she tried to shove Steele off of Streak. Steele,as Nataki knew, had NO intentin of letting go, even for Jenna's daughter. She tried a few more times, but Steele's expression was unwavering, still obsessed with the kill. At the moment when Streak's nostrils stopped flaring and his eyes rolled back into his head, Nataki finally resorted to the unthinkable-- she bit Steele's muzzle. Hard. Her teeth met hard flesh, and the canines in the front of her jaws cut deep into Steele's nose. " AROOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!" he cired, letting go of Streak. As Steele writhed in pain, Nataki tore blindily into the larger husky's face. SHE would not let go.



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Streak went unconcious. His lungs worked overtime, hungrilly sucking in air, and claiming life once more. As Streak lay there, his legs splayed and neck torn open and bleeding readilly, Nataki let go of Steele and rushed to his younger brother's aid. She subconciously started to lick his limp body and neck. The crimson blood gushing from his wound only made it harder for Nataki to clean it. She knew she had to try and stop the bleeding, before too much was lost. She lay her body over Streak's, to warm it up from shock.

Steele, however, was getting no such treatment for his wound. Mentally and physically fatigued, he was still delirious from the rush of attack. Nataki would not, could not, approach him. It wasn't safe. Her instinct was to help the weaker-- Streak. Anyways, she knew the only thing Steele had truly hurt was his pride. She continued to lap up Streak's blood, and when it finally subsided to a small trickle, she pushed snow on his face. It did the trick of waking him up, and he quietly mumbled, " Wuzzzzuh........? N-N-Naktaki?"
" Yes, Streak, it's me.Here--" she said, pulling him onto her back. " I'll carry you home." she assured Streak.



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Nataki's shrill yap sent Streak's owners to their door almost immediately. When they opened the door, thier faces turned pale as a ghost's. The sight of Streak's lifeless body in fromt of her made the woman gasp.

"Streak! Oh, poor boy! Oh, my....Streak? What happened?" his owner's voices babbled and sobbed. Nataki carefullly let Streak slide off her back. She licked Streak's ear to show she meant no harm. When Nataki did this, the hands petting Streak turned to her. The strokes calmed Nataki from her anxiousness.

"Good girl, Nataki! Good, good girl! Thank you..." they told her. Then Megan, the woman, asked her husband," Nick, can you take Nataki home? Rosy must miss her. I need to take our baby in the house, don't I, Streak?"

The man agreed and took Nataki's green collar in his large hands. "C'mon, girl! Let's go home!" he called. But the red and white dog didn't budge. She couldn't go. She wanted, no, needed to stay with Steele's victim. He needed care. And someone to tell him what happened. Yes, it was midnight, and yes, Rosy and Jenna would probably be worried sick, but only Nataki could remember the horror that Steele had brought upon Streak. He needed her.

So, Nataki pulled through her designer collar and to the dog door located on Streak's house. She daintily stepped through it, and once iniside the warm house, looked around for Streak. When she saw him, suprise came to her. Streak, who, just one munite ago had been unconcious and broken, was now laying awkwardly on his stomach, but looking okay. A faint twinkle of his old self shone through his pain-glazed eyes as Nataki trotted over joyfully. His tail wagged weakly as she spoke in almost what was a motherly tone.

" Streak! You- you're looking...lots better. Uh- do- do you...remember? What happened?" she asked. " No- no, I don't. What? What happend? Was it bad? Who-- ow....!" he replied, and when he shifted his weight, pain came again. Nataki's heart sank. Was he really going to pull through?



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"Steele....?He-- he really did that to me?" Streak gasped. Nataki had just finished retelling the tradegy of Steele's fury. " Well that explained why my neck hurts..." he said. Nataki sighed. Would he ever regain memory-- or the ability to pull the sled he held so dear to his heart-- again? She lowered her head to his level and examined his neck's wound closely for the first time. A shudder racked her body and she silently grieved for Streak. With that injury, the sled harness could irritate, rub, or even reopen the cut. A whimper of dismay escaped Nataki's throat. The thought of Streak not bering able to sled anymore was unbearable. That was his pure passion; his lifeblood.

"What's wrong?" Streak intterupeted her thoughts with a raspy voice. " Uh, nothing. Nothing. You- you just take a rest. You need it." she said, and added " don't talk. That'll just agravate the pain."

After flashing a weak smile, Streak's pain-stricken muzzle lowered back to the floor. Nataki sighed and licked her paws nervously. She sat, never taking eyes off Streak. But with every hour, exaustion crept up and into every part of Nataki's body. The constant care of the wounds embedded in the black and white fur was tiring. Finally, she gave in to the beckoning comfort of sleep. Her head sank to her paws. Her eyelids flickered over amber eyes before closing.

Nataki's sleep was filled with thoughts, which turned into dreams. Despite the day's events, the dreams of Nataki were plesant. Beside Nataki, Streak was also resting, but his mind was busy envisioning a nightmare. He had finally regained his memory-- and in suprisingly realistic detail......


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Streak was franticlly racing away from Steele's fury-based attacks.... pant pant pant his tongue lolled out the side fo his foaming mouth. Steele lunged again and again, getting closer each time. No...NO! Streak thought in dispair as his brother's jaws closed tightly around his throat.....

Bared fangs were the last thing Streak saw.



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" Pant pant pant AWWOOO!!! Whimper whimper" Streak voiced many different sounds in a matter of seconds. His head had swiflty risen and the dream had vanished. Now all that was left was a quiet room that was ligtened by the sunrise. He saw Nataki wake and rush over to him.

"Streak! Streak, are* yawn* okay?" she asked groggily. He answered, his brow creased with worry. " I... I think I finally got my memory back.... and-- and I wish I hadn't." Streak began, chuckling to himself at his last statement. " It's just a dream! Everyone has bad dreams once in a while...don't they? Well, stop being so fretful! I'm fine!" he said after Nataki's eyes shone with panic.

"Oh....okay. Um...sorry. Yeah, well, I just-- it's just-- I--I really want you to get better!!!" she stammered, blurting the last part out, embarassed. She silently cursed at herself as she abruptly decided to leave.

Streak was grateful for her words, and he understood her concern, but still there was something else he had hoped she would say. But he kept his hopes up as he remembered her embarassed stuttering.



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That night, Nataki finally went home. Her owners were relived to have her back. But, of copurse, they knew why she was late-- Streak's owners had gave Nataki's a visit.

Now, curled up by the warm fireplace, Nataki was deep in thought. So many things were on her mind, she didn't even hear the rattle of food being poured in her dish.

Why? Why didn't I tell hime! Rrrrrrrr..... I hate myself! And-- ugh! How could I be so stupid?!!! she thought.

The truth was, Nataki like Streak. A lot. And ever since the attack, they had grown even closer, closer than thier usual relationship as jsut friends. If only she could muster the courage to tell him......



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The next day, Steele had fully recovered. When his trio of followers ( Nikki, Kaltag, and Star) had heard about Steele's sucess, they hadn't been so amazed as they usually would.

"Good job, boss, but, eh, ya think ya was a little, I dunno, too harsh on the little one?" Nikki cautiously said. Kaltag followed with, " Yeah! You were hard, unessacery, you were--" he was cut off by Star. " You shouldn't have done that!" Star exclaimed, and for once, Kaltag didn't bang him on his head.

Steele, however, felt like he had been hit in the head. How could his companions say this? They "dissaproved" of him attacking Streak? Why?

Steele growled and moved closer, angry. " Hey,boss, what're you doin'? Uh... guys? We better RUN!!!!!!" Nikki shouted, and the three dogs bolted out of the alleyway. Steele lept after them. He, again, would attack. As he was chasing the trio, a brown and scruffy canine jumped into Steele's path. " Steele! What do you think you are doing?!" he said.

It was Balto, a spunky wolf hybrid that was known as a hero in Nome. He had carried life-saving diptheria and saved a sled team ( that, coincidentaly, was Steele's lost team) to bring the medicine to Jenna, a beutiful red-and-white husky's, owner , Rosy. Soon after that, Jenna was expecting puppies, Nataki being one of them.

Steele had hated Balto ever since he laid eyes on him. " Get out of may way, wolfdog!" he shouted.

" No! Not if you're chasing them!" Balto replied bravley, pointing his paw to the three dogs taht had stopped running, and were now panting hard. They stared down the street ar thir pursuer and Balto.

"Hey, Balto! Yeah, he was chasing us! All we did was tell him he shouldn't have been mean to Streak!" Star called to Balto.

Balto then just stared Steele down. " Leave them alone", he said slowly. After hearing this, Steele just gave up. What was the use? Ever since "the hero" had returned, the town's dogs had turned against Steele. The only ones who even went near Steele were Nikki, Kaltag, Star, and Streak. But those dogs had steered their days further and further away from him and towards the more positive influence of Balto.

"You won this time..... but I'll make sure you lose.... you mangy MUTT!!!" Steele thought darkly. He'd make Balto suffer for all the times he turned the dogs turn on him, and that was a promise.

Steele didn't break promises.


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PostPosted: Sun Apr 20, 2008 11:09 am 
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Star--> Umm... why did you post that here? :|

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PostPosted: Sun Apr 20, 2008 3:02 pm 
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Star--> Umm... why did you post that here? :|


Yeah, I've got the same question.
If you want to post your fic on the forums, that's fine. Just make your own topic and post your fic there.
Not in someone else's topic, please.

If you've got any other questions, feel free to PM me.

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PostPosted: Mon Apr 21, 2008 5:47 pm 
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BECAUSE-- "If you're going to advertise your fic in the forums, why not re-post it here? Just copy and paste it into this topic and let people read it. " --> LOOK WHAT YOU WROTE-- don't deny it! It says paste into THIS topic!!!!!!

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PostPosted: Tue Apr 22, 2008 5:08 pm 
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Okay, that was my mistake. I mis-typed.
Let me re-phrase what I said: If you're going to advertise your fic in the forums, why not re-post it here in the fanfiction forums?
That is what I meant. Again, my mistake.
At first, I thought that DolphinsFriend had changed names, but that's clearly not the case.

Please move your story to a new topic at the earliest convinience.
I apologize for the confusion.

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why, thank you, lone_wolf, it's real nice of you to apologize. I'm glad now, and I'll be careful where I post. It's just I'm new to all this fourum stuff and such. So thanks again. (and I'm not DOlphin, but I'm her friend though!^^)

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How do make a fanic? :?:


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PostPosted: Tue May 13, 2008 5:31 pm 
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Well, if you mean how do you submit a fanfic, here's how:
1) At the BaltoSource homepage, just under your name ("Welcom, username") there are four links. The second from the left says "Send to the site." Click it.
2) When the options are displayed, click Fanfic.
3) Read the rules and click "Continue."
4) When the options are displayed, click "Send a new fanfic."
5) Fill out the information (title, summary, theme and rating) and click "continue"
6) All there is left to do is to use the browse tool to locate your story.

If you mean how do you create a fanfic, see the link below for a few helpful points from catwhohas14tails:
http://baltosource.timduru.org/board/viewtopic.php?f=7&t=9510

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