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Should I continue my fanfic?
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 Post subject: Calling all Ginga Densestu Weed fans!
PostPosted: Mon Apr 02, 2007 7:22 pm 
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I have written a fanfiction about Weed's (From Ginga Densestu Weed) daughter. I plan on making it longer but, I want to know if you think I should continue it. Thank you enjoy my story!^^

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The Silver Fang Legend : Kaya

Rage built inside Kaya as she watched her father being tossed into the air by a snarling beast. She winced as his body hit the dirt. She was furious but, she couldn't move out of fear and pain. The beast, a bear, had wounded her back leg. She howled for help, no one answered. Kaya starred at the bear, terrified. It began to lumber its way over to her. She looked at her father. He staggered to his paws, blood trickled from his forehead and his neck was soaked in the red sticky substance. Despite his agony, his eyes shined with anger and stubborn hopes.
The brave akita whipped around and faced his panic stricken daughter, "Kaya" His deep voice rang out. "You are female but, are still a bear-dog! As my father once told me; show me the spirit and soul of a true tora-ge pelted bear-dog!"

Kaya gazed at her father in astonishment, Her father, Weed, the leader of the Ohu army wanted her help to defeat the bear! She felt proud and awed but, the bear's furious roar interrupted her thoughts. It now towered over Kaya ominously. It's dagger like fangs glistened with her blood and Weed's. Suddenly, her anger burned deeper in her heart, it surged with power and determination. She pushed her blooded body off the ground. She almost instantly flung herself at the bear with an infuriated snarl. Kaya felt herself slice through something with her fangs but, saw nothing through the blur of battle. Her body soared through the air and into a tree trunk. She began to see everything around her fade away and heard her father calling her, then, everything went black and silent.

Kaya's eyes blinked open tiredly but, were soon filled with alarm as she remembered the bear.
"What?" She asked, confused that she was no longer in the forest fighting off the bear. She was at the main camp, in Gajou.
"Kaya! You've awakened!" Weed exclaimed joyfully.
Kaya disregarded her father's words. "Where did the bear go?" She demanded, rising to her paws with her claws digging into the soft earth.
"Kaya, you killed that bear. You used the same method my father and I use when we are in an unbeatable battle." Her father replied, his blue eyes glimmering with pride.
"You mastered it perfectly, I was watching you fight. I came to help but, I saw that you hadn't needed it help after all." Added in an elderly white akita.
Kaya bowed her head respectfully at the praises, "Thank you father and Akame." She looked at her father, he seemed troubled but, before Kaya could ask he began to speak.
"We may have defeated this one but, I am sure there is another. That monster has a brother, I've seen them fighting over a deer carcass." Akame nodded in agreement.
"Do we need the rest of the pack?" Asked Kaya readying herself to tell the pack the news. Akame answered her, "No, we've no need to wound them for this. We can take down this last bear ourselves, if we plan correctly." Weed chuckled, "You never burn out do you Akame?" They all laughed.

The next day they woke up early and stalked their bear target. It had taken them three hours until they spotted the beast. The three akitas plotted that Akame would use his ninja skills to climb the tree above the bear and would ambush him with an aerial attack. While Weed and Kaya would attack it from the bushes. Akame would attack first and at his own will.

Soon, they were in position. Kaya shivered with the excitement of battle, she loved the feeling of closeness and timing between her comrades just before the battle. Suddenly, Akame lept from the tree and locked his jaws on the left eye of the bear. Kaya and Weed shot out of the bushes. Weed aimed for the right eye of the bear. It roared furiously and shook his massive head wildly but, the dogs held on tightly. Kaya launched herself at the bear's neck and tore. Soon, the bear fell backward and the akitas released their grips, the bear was dead. They howled their victory to the forest before them. That day, Kaya had defeated her two first bears, today she was a true Ohu soldier. Little did the akitas know that on a distant cliff an angered mother stood and glared at them with hatred...

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This story's excellent. I'd love to see where it goes. Hopefully the next chapter tells us who Kaya's mother is.

Just a quick nit-picky thing though, hopefully it doesn't come across wrong. I find it's easier to read the dialogue when a new paragraph is started every time someone speaks. A little less bunching up does wonders for the structure and flow of a story and makes it considerably easier to read.

And just for quick reference, Akame is a kishou, not an akita.

But please continue, I can't wait to see the rest!


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Sylver wrote:
This story's excellent. I'd love to see where it goes. Hopefully the next chapter tells us who Kaya's mother is.

Just a quick nit-picky thing though, hopefully it doesn't come across wrong. I find it's easier to read the dialogue when a new paragraph is started every time someone speaks. A little less bunching up does wonders for the structure and flow of a story and makes it considerably easier to read.

And just for quick reference, Akame is a kishou, not an akita.

But please continue, I can't wait to see the rest!



I am so sorry! :oops: I really thought he was an akita! I feel so stupid!XD

And sure I can do that for the next part of the story, thanks for the constructive critisim. :wink:

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yeah i like it keep up

i have downloaded all movies of weed

im consider to make a webside so wen its rdy u can download all episode,s

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Sylver wrote:
This story's excellent. I'd love to see where it goes. Hopefully the next chapter tells us who Kaya's mother is.

Just a quick nit-picky thing though, hopefully it doesn't come across wrong. I find it's easier to read the dialogue when a new paragraph is started every time someone speaks. A little less bunching up does wonders for the structure and flow of a story and makes it considerably easier to read.

And just for quick reference, Akame is a kishou, not an akita.

But please continue, I can't wait to see the rest!


i think its keira

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dutchfan wrote:
yeah i like it keep up

i have downloaded all movies of weed

im consider to make a webside so wen its rdy u can download all episode,s


Please do!^^ I would love to get them onto my computer!=P PM me when you do!8D I have watched the whole series! They are sooo good.

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