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here it is, please rate ?/10


http://baltosource.timduru.org/fanfic-n ... ite-1.html

I'da say 9.8/10.

Hm on second thought: 8/10.

6/10

4/10

Allow me to explain...first, check your grammar. I don't think you made some of those mistakes for effect, and such things are critical - especially in poetry. There is no capitalization/puntuation in any of Joala's font, and some of it is also wrong in Yupik's. Second...it might be new to add RPs in a poem, but I don't exactly find it appealing. Third...there's no logical sequence. Your small character seems to be asking a bunch of pretty random questions. A little more background information would be nice, rather than vague one-liners.

...Just a few thoughts.

sigh,

...I hope you didn't take that the wrong way. You asked me to rate your poem, and I did nothing less, if not more.

I also hope you didn't misinterprit my less than stellar 6/10. Honestly I had many of the problems that Suka had. First, I had no idea who these people (wolves?) were, so I couldn't relate. Secondly, the questions were random and disconnected so that it seemed a bit disjointed. Now, granted, I have no idea how much poetry you've written and I don't want to discourage you from writing if you want to. Nothing major was wrong, just some small things that you can brush up on.

well i think i forgot to add, that it was finished and i needed a rate, not a 'whats wrong with it'

dont worry, its not the first time my art, ect has been sadly rated

Well, constructive criticism is always good, even if you were "finished" with the poem. I think that Suka and I had some legit ideas for you, and I hope you don't think we're just trying to beat your work down, because we're not. I expect to see more writing from you in the future!

Yesh, but still i only asked for a ?/10 rating. I never asked for whats wrong with it. i get my feelings hurt easily. Its not your nor suka fault. Its just who i am, no one can change that.

Well, you kinda have to take the good with the bad...

huh?

He means, that people are going to tell you good things. But they also are gonna tell you things that dont please you. They were just trying to help. You may get your feelings hurt easily, but that doesn't mean people are going to care. As Suka said, "You have to take the good with the bad".