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Okay, this is my first really big fan fiction. I have been working really ahrd to get this ready, for I love the plot. Comments are Highly Welcomed!

Prologue


Somewhere in the distance, there is a pack. It is known as the Sitarian Pack. The Alpha, Bianca, has helped her newly promoted Beta, Bloodstreak, on how to control his rage that lives within himself. Of course, anything can cause a slight change in direction.

Bloodstreak’s past was not a normal past, it was a monster. His father rejected him, and his mother beat him. He was scared and ran off. Due to the vile treatment he received from his parents, he became a killer, monster, and a raper. He lived his life doing these horrible things, just because of what he received from his parents. It almost destroyed him, until one day he meet Lady Bianca. The two talked, and she accepted him into the pack. After months of proven loyalty, she accepted him as her new beta.

A young fae, known as Kumal is on her way to begin a new life. One she did not receive, when her parents were killed infront of her. She was gonna join the Sitarian Pack. She was on her way to become part of something she never had. Something she would hope to have. She was hoping to find Love, which she does. Of course, some love leads to Betrayal.



-So, this is the intro, I want to see what everyone thinks of it, before I post the first chapter.-

i dont know English very well ,but i think you sould post the first chapter,to me its very intresting story ))))))

WOW! I can't wait for you to finish it.

Sounds good You should always carry on if you, yourself, like the story. Good Luck!

Soundssoooooo good! Continue plz

Chapter 1: The Stranger Enters

Kumal slowly walked up to border of the Sitarian Pack. What she didn’t know, is she was walking right into the begining of a war between the Sitarian Pack and the Barbarian Pack. She felt the dirt between her paws as she entered the land, she should soon call home. Her brown and black pelt glistening from the rays of the sun. She looked around, but saw no one. So she took a deep breath, and let out a low howl to alert the wolves of her presence there. She sat on her hind legs, waiting for the wolf to show up.

Bloodstreak heard the long howl from his den. “So much for getting a break.” He rolled his eyes, and then took off in a speeding gallop towards the east side of the land. He ran and ran as fast as his legs could carry him. Then he stopped, when he saw the stranger directly infront of him. He scanned the wolf, instantly knowing she was a fae.”What brings you into the lands of Sitarian?” Kumal looked at the wolf, “In order for acceptance my lord.” Bloodstreak rolled his eyes, “First of all, my name is Bloodstreak, not my lord. Second, what thinks you can survive here?” Kumal just stood up, “Because of my loyalty, and my willingness to do anything told to do.” Bloodstreak nodded, “Your accepted, come with me, and I shall show you to your den.” Kumal got up as the big wolf told her to do.

As the heart of the land, Bloodstreak walked into a empty den. Kumal grabbed her den skin and laid it in there, and laid on it. Bloodstreak laid in the corner away from her. He looked at her, watching her shiver like crazy. “You want me to keep you warm?” He didn’t want to look stupid,.but atleast help her. Kumal looked at him, “Is it really my choice, sense you are the beta?” Bloodstreak felt sweat in his fur, “You shouldn’t tempt me that way you know.” Kumal was still watching him, “I’m not tempting.” Bloodstreak was pulling away the temptation, but when he could smell she was in season, he couldn’t help himself. He got up and laid beside her. Kumal looked at him and smiled slightly. Bloodstreak laid his head on her warm fur.

TBC.........

oooohhh soo good!