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So let’s look on the beginning of the end...

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XIV. To die, but to die hard

There is a place on the sky, that no living one could see. Scar was waiting there for Zira and Vitani. He knew they were about to come, as well he knew about many others matters of sky and earth. As the sky-arbiter he had to be well-informed.
“You already know...” he greeted mate and daughter. “I’m so sorry...”
“Dad... You knew?” asked crying Vitani. Although Ancient Ones rarely show earthly emotions, dead queen of Prideland was sobbing. Scar came to her and gentle nestled to her side.
“No, but I sensed that.” He replied. “Taka is the one who will fulfil the round of Circle. As Tanabi said: for every good we must pay dear.”
”Mom?” whispered blue-eyed Ancient. Golden-furred went to daughter and stood between her and sky-arbiter.
“I didn’t know, but I also sensed what could came from this.” Confessed Zira. “Forgive me.”
“I asked you for help myself.” Sobbed Vitani. “And what I would tell him, when he come to us? That he died because of incompetence of own mother?”
“You son is still alive.” Noticed Scar, looking on wounded Taka, who was lying on Golden Massif’s plateau.
“Is there still some chance for him?” asked at once both Zara and Vitani.
“Everybody dies, sooner or later.” Said sky-arbiter. “But he have to fulfil his duties before that. Duties to pride... to his future kingdom. He must defend it, as the real monarch. And if he has to die... he must die hard.” Finished Scar with calm voice, although he was barely repressing own emotions.
*
On next day both adversaries woke almost at the same time – both late. Sun was already high over horizon and warming wounded ones. Provident lionesses covered lions with improvised veil made of acacia brush. In normal weather it would give nothing against desert heat, but under clouds of heavy dust on the sky, it made a descent shade.
“Taka!” called Dhalimu, climbing on boulder.
“How nice you remember my name!” replied arbiter.
“You have galled me so much, I would never forget it.” Said king and laughed airily. “How the wedding night?”
“Definitely too short.” Confessed black-maned. “Dhalimu... Thank you.”
“Save it, usurper.” Snorted monarch, but he was still smiling with embarrassment. “I did you a good turn, but it doesn’t mean that I won’t kill you.”
“I know.” Replied Taka. „I’m thanking just for yesterday.”
When they heard returning lionesses, without waiting for bitter scolds of Raia and Kota, they went down to own beddings. Mean breakfast and few draughts of water tasted them as no other meal in life. Especially Taka praised the meat brought by Kota.
“Delicious... You know, since I can’t see the world, I could sense it better with the other senses. With taste also.” Golden-furred froze for a moment, touched by unpleasant remind of lion’s disability. But then she bended down to him and kidded him.
“This is also tasting better?”
“Much better.”
And when arbiter finished to eat and drink, lionesses looked around, as if she was afraid of presence of Raia and started to whisper with emotional voice.
“Taka, listen to me, there still is a hope. For you girls fixed some lianas and made a kind of harness. We will tie you and that way guide you down...”
“If I fall from path, that harness won’t save me, but I will drag you down with me.”
“I’ll ask Akra and Beluwa for assistance. I’m sure of theirs loyalty to you...”
“That is the transgressing of the Law of Challenge.” Whispered Taka.
“Understand!” yelled lioness. “The Law of Challenge is dead and cruelty custom, relict of old times. And you have to live!”
“For any price?”
“For any... NO!” suddenly cried Kota. “I know, I made you to challenge Dhalimu. That is my fault I have dragged you into this and you wounds hurt me more than you. Let me mend that...”
“No, Kota.” Sounded a voice from behind. „Taka is right.”
“Raia! You eavesdroped us!” gasped golden-furred.
“I was going here to ask if you want rest of meat, that Dhalimu didn’t eat.” Murmured irritated lioness, putting a adaks haunch on the ground. “But I see you don’t trust your friend... and maybe you have right.”
“I’m sorry, Raia, but what you heard is...” replied still angry Kota.
“Listen to Taka.” Interrupted her sandy-furred. “Dhalimu will never break the rules of duel and he counts that his adversary won’t do it too. Do you know, what he ordered to me? He wanted me to swear that I won’t avenge him if Taka somehow win.” Ashamed Kota turned her stare to the ground. “And I wished to say you that. But now, good day. I’m out of here.” She turned back and set off to the centre of massif.
“Raia! I’m sorry!” called golden-furred.”
“No offend taken. I understand your nervousness.” Replied dandy lioness with hollow voice. “But let me calm myself before I will accept your apologies.”
“Ow, what a lioness.” Murmured Taka. “She would be almost as good queen as you...”
“So You won’t go down with me?” asked Kota for the last time, without hope to convince him.
“I’m sorry, I can’t”
“Ow, reliable as always.” Murmured lioness with resignation. “I love you also for that.”
*
Mtanga was leading Amali on the Limestone Alley. Although princess wasn’t good wanderer and rouge also can’t say that about himself, they made the most of way without problems. They had a luck – during the sandstorm Mtanga found small pan where they waited until wind ceased. Also the storm was significantly weaker than in Golden Sands region.
“That is not so far.” Rouge assured his mate. “I have to leave the route to find my boys. Will you get there? It’s about five kilometers north.”
“I thought they are already in Golden Sands.” Amazed princess. “Mtanga, something strange is going here. Aren’t you hiding something from me?” Rouge replied even without slowing down.
“You will see there. Just... things are going very wrong in Golden Pride. And your brothers asked me to help that pride.”
“Is that dangerous?” asked scared lioness.
“No, I don’t think so. I hope we’ll reach your aims without real effort.” Said Mtanga. “But go now.”
So Amali went. Many questions were on her mind but she had no one to ask. Beside of that she trusted her mate, who had never given her a slightest reason to be suspicious. “Good luck, Mtanga, whatever you intend to.” Thought golden-furred and speeded her steps in way to cousin’s land.
She reached the Golden Massif about two hours before sunset. Instead of greeting she met a silent group of lionesses, returning from hunting. Golden Ones were tired and thirsted and heavily scared. Amali shivered seeing the grimaces of fear on theirs faces. Quickly she came close to one of them, grey-furred, who was leading the team.
“I’m Amali of Prideland. I came to ask my cousin Dhalimu for hospitality.” She announced uncertainly. “Where is the king?” Team-leader, not loosing her prey, pointed with stare on Massif’s top. “A... and my brother, Taka the Second also should be here. Where I can find him?” Lioness once again pointed a plateau above them. “I don’t understand... What is going on here?”
“Come inside, ma’am.” Invited her one of the younger lionesses. “We will explain you everything... that we understand.”
*
“That’s all we know for sure.” Baridi was finishing his report. “Dhalimu and Taka are still alive, however both severely wounded. One lays next to western end of massif, second in the middle. Lionesses are in cave, clearly confused. What will we do?”
Four of lions was waiting on dune, about kilometre from the Golden Cave. They were unseen from foot of massif, but they could observe the edge of plateau. Sharp eyes of rouges saw Taka, lying on western bluff.
“We’re going in.” instructed Mtanga. “Do you see? Lionesses don’t react.”
“That is the Law of Challenge...” threw Hofu.
“No!” gasped rouge-leader. “They are indifferent for tyrants fight. For them the is a little difference between reign of murderer of own mate or reign of power-thirsty usurper. We must rid off them both.”
“But... but...” yelled Udole. “Taka? Does Amali know what you are planning?”
“I’m sorry, my friends.” Replied Mtanga with voice so gentle and sympathetic, that rouges instinctively lowered their ears. “We have no choice. We must restore the peace and justice in that poor land. And we will do it today!” he hemmed and turned his stare on Golden Massif. “You are going on east path and finish Dhalimu. I will deal with Taka.”
“Are you sure?”
“Yes, I am.” Smiled Mtanga. “This war will end tonight.”
And muffling his triumphal laughter he started to run down from dune. Blood-red sun was setting and long shades of tyrannocides were seen on sand.
*
Taka sensed something bad in the air and instantly started to listen out. Kota and Raia went down to the cave for another portion of water, so he stayed alone with Dhalimu. In fact all of this wasn’t matter because arbiter knew about coming wind. That night a mighty sandstorm was about to come and finish what its successor had started. “Well... Dhalimu still has some chances.” Thought black-maned. “If he finds some real shelter and has a luck... This is not a bad ending – he has changed. With Raia at his side will be far better ruler that he was. And if she raise king’s cub for to be good successor, the kingdom will survive. But what would happen with Kota and our cub?” He raised his head higher and sniffed evening air. “No... there is something more to come.”
“Dhalimu!” he called with powerful voice. “We must speak.” And he started to carefully climb on stone nearby, to brown-maned was able see him.”
“I’m listening, you usurper.” Replied ruler. In his words the hostility was strangely mixed with tone of sympathy and respect towards enemy. Taka thought the he would never understand Dhalimu. “What do you want? You sense that wind?”
“Sandstorm is near.” Agreed arbiter. “We must convince girls to not stay with us, when that all will start. That is a great risk.” In reply Dhalimu laughed, almost friendly.
“Of course, Taka. When they will back I’ll try do send Raia off. But don’t count that I will able to order anything Kota.”
“I know, I know.” Said black-maned. He was silent for a while and then added. “So the kingdom could belong to Mtanga... Well, so it happens that he will be here soon. You know... He thinks that you have killed Niva. If you survive to his arrival, tell him all...”
“I won’t explain myself to some stray from...” growled king, but suddenly he gasped with amaze. “And how the hell he knew about Niva’s death?! He was never here and we haven’t sent any messengers with that news!”
“Ow, Stars!” yelled Taka. “So how he knew how she died? It’s...” He stood up heavily and looked with his dead eyes on king. “Dhalimu. We shouldn’t have fought.”
“Of course, we shouldn’t!” replied brwon-maned instantly. “But it is all because of your lust for power and...”
“No, you don’t understand.” Said arbiter. “We shouldn’t have fought EACH OTHER!” Growing wind enblew his mane. Dhalimu, looking on that from distance, had to admit that Taka was really looking like a king. Even there: wounded and weak he was sparkling with majesty and self-confidence. He turned his head to south and announced with firm voice. “Now I understand everything. Too bad, that now is long too late. Dhalimu, look south and tell me what you see.”
“The desert. Cute, but a bit monotonous...” said king. “I guess that its always looks like that, so you might imagine... No, wait! Four lions silhouettes, coming down from dune. They split... One is going more on west, three are still marching straight... To the massif.” He turned himself to Taka. “Those are the real enemies?”
“Dhalimu! Help me!” asked black-maned. “Guide me to the path. Only there, in narrow mouth, I could defend myself.”
“There still is the second path.” Noticed king grimly.
“You will guard there.” Explained arbiter. “And you will defend as long as you last.”
“Lionesses...”
“They won’t hear us in this wind.” Estimated Taka. „But maybe Raia and Kota manage to return to us and then alarm the pride. But I don’t think it would help. If rouges get here and place on paths, they would stand even thirty lionesses attack... Dhalimu, guide me!”
“Good... go down from this stone... Right... Now ahead, two meters. On bluff you will go faster... You are trusting me, usurper!” gasped with clear amaze, seeing how obediently Taka was following his orders. “Now I could lead you to your death behind the edge...”
“You could.” Agreed Taka. „But then I will die only for you, not for Golden Sands. I count on your reason.”
“Stop!” called Dhalimu. “You are on the brink. Now turn right... a bit more... Now straight ahead, until I tell you to stop. More... more... Stop!” shouted king, when black-maned reached the path. “Good look Taka. Don’t you dare to die before you get some of those rascals.”
“Now you must go to eastern path! Now!” hastened him arbiter, while he was placing himself in narrow mouth of way down. “And good luck, you too.” Asked with whisper. “I hope we won’t die in vain.”
So Dhalimu started to run on plateau, moving his paws with heavy effort. His front-right paw he had to hold high, not to irritate the recovering break. Unfortunately it was slowing him significantly, so lion was often looking on closing three silhouettes, who was marching to the massif.
“I must get there on time!” he thought with determination. “I’m king because of my blood... but just today I have an opportunity to became the real king, because I defend my pride. Raia, I’m doing it for you! Father! Mother! Give me your strength!” Recalling his royal parents he speeded up. He was jumping on three paws, risking the fall, just to get quicker to path. Suddenly he was struck by amazing thought. “I’m wounded, paw hurts me like hell... I’ll probably die soon. But I fell happy, as I felt never before. What could want more? I’m the king and I’m fighting for my land. Somewhere down there my queen is waiting... Stars! If every pleasure have to finish just a moment after it have started?”
*
“What you mean by: Mtanga? What rouges? What they are doing here?!” barracked Raia and Kota each other. Amali still didn’t understand whole situation, so she tried to tell what she knew. Princess was in the royal cave, surrounded by Golden Ones.
“My mate came to you to save you from Dhalimu.” Finally said Pridelandress. “He will avenge death of your queen and...”
“Dhalimu didn’t kill Niva!” a new voice in cave interrupted her. “The murderer issss now trying to kill again.” Added Kauli. “Forgive me, I understood it sssso late, but... Taia, Kota... they both are in danger.”
“Pride!” ordered sandy-maned with wilful roar. “All you have to search for those rouges. Kota and I will go up to guard king... and prince.” She finished with unexpected soft voice.
“Kauli is in charge!” added golden-furred. She raised python and put him on Akra’s neck. Then she run out of cave, following Raia.
“As usual.” Called sandy-furred. „You go on west, I’ll take the east path.”
They spilt and speeded to own patches. Because the wind was blowing hard, numerous globulins of dust were dramatically reducing the visibility. Suddenly Kota noticed a silhouette of lone lion, closing to way up. She caught him and pounced on him with extended claws.
“STOP!” she roared.
“There is no time!” called Mtanga. “Let’s go up, they are already there... Rouges! They want to kill them both!” Kota yelled, and lowered her paw, previously ready to strike. Plotter added. “I can’t see. Lead the way!”
Kota was afraid only about Taka. So she without hesitation passed the lion to get on path. Blow of Mtanga hit her in nape, instantly stunning her. Wanderer smiled and pushed away body of unconscious lioness.
“What why I always let the ladies to go as first!” murmured and run uphill.
Meanwhile Dhalimu got to the path in last moment, because the first silhouette of enemy appeared in cloud of dust. When he saw it, instantly took a defensive pose. Amazed Baridi stopped in front of ruler, wagging his tail to warn rouges coming behind him. Then he called with dreadful voice.
“Tyrant Dhalimu – your time is over. We are here to bring back the order and justice.”
“I have no idea who you are, but you are even more cheeky that Taka!” growled brown-maned and without a warning pounced on rouge.
Baridi jumped aside, almost falling from the patch. Dhalimu landed awkwardly on way, between enemy and stone-wall. With front-left paw he hit adversary’s side, three others paws put firmly on the ground. Baridi fell on the path and his rear paws helplessly hang over in the air behind the edge. King smiled, raised his left limb to the final blow, when in his back hit Hofu. Wrestling enemies rolled up the way, getting to the plain of plateau. Udole, coming as the last, quickly pull his friend on ledge and they both joined Hofu.
“You have no chances, despot!” cried Baridi. “Surrender and you will die quickly!”
“I don’t like to hurry.” Murmured brown-maned and unexpectedly pounced among rouges. He landed on three paws, almost falling down. Thanks to his impetus he knocked down Udole then attacked Hofu. He bite his side and fall with all mass on lion. Surprised wandered hit the ground and Dhalimu caught his paw in jaws. Furious stare of monarch was screaming: Now we will equalize our chances!
But before Dhalimus jaws crushed enemy’s limb, Baridi came with assistance. He his ruler’s side, on brown fur cutting four cuts with his claws. Lion also grabbed with jaws paw of king and started to mercilessly clenched his mouth.
Angry Dhalimu got Hofu loose and pulled bitten limb. Surprised Baridi fell down on rock then barely avoided monarch’s pounce. Crippled king still was fighting in royal way. Probably he would have reached Baridi’s throat, if not Udole’s charge.
Lion had steeped away from companions to aim his pounce better. He set himself on perfect windward from Dhalimu to use nature’s help in combat. He jumped when enemy shook Hofu off and started to third of adversaries. Udole hit with paws in Dhalimu’s nape. He grabbed victim’s fur on neck and thanks to impetus they both fell on the ground. So they both froze on the ground, wrestling hard. Rouge wanted just to stopped enemy until his friends do their job. So after few seconds over the king glimmered extended claws of two tyrannocides.
“Die, you brute!” gasped Baridi, and suddenly he was thrown to the ground.
Raia pounced on rouge, driving him over two meters back. In the same time she bounced on pushing body and jumped on Hofu. Confused and partially blinded by sand lion didn’t blocked that attack and fell on the rock with deep cuts of his front paws. But lionesses haven’t been continuing her charge. She jumped aside, looking for Baridi. Seeing that rouge was standing up, she charged on him.
Meanwhile Dhalimu stood up, in spite of Udole’s grab. He hit him with quick blow and rushed to two others intruders, who were just surrounding Raia. He overturned Hofu, but he landed awkwardly, basing on disabled paw. Knitting bone miraculously stood that trial, but brown-maned gasped with pain. Anyway – without slowing he lowered his head and Udole, pouncing on him, flew over and disappeared in clouds of dust.
“Raia!” called king. “Get out of here! Gather lionesses and finish them off, when they will be coming down.”
“My place is by your side, my lord.” Said lioness, nestling with right shoulder on right shoulder of lion. That way they were covering themselves from both sides. “My place is by your side, Dhalimu.” Added and roared on incoming Hofu.
Rouge noticed in eyes of sandy-maned something what forced him to lower his paws and stop. He was looking not on tyrannized and abused victim but on proud lioness, who was defending her beloved monarch. All what he had heard from Mtanga was covered by that stare, full of love and care. The anger that had been previously keeping rouge in steel grip, got loose and his mind asked a hundreds of questions that he hadn’t answered earlier.
“I won’t let you kill him!” cried Raia, looking on returning Udole.
“No, you won’t.” agreed Hofu. He looked on his companions and ordered. “Stop! Don’t kill!”
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Hofu, seeing Raia's great courage decides not to attack, tells his companions to stand down? Oh, boy Mtanga is not gonna like that! What about Amali? Will she find out what a scoundrel her mate is? *sighs* so many questions in need of an answer.

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So this is the final, with most of the answers. Bon apetit! But don’t leave that topic, because tomorrow there will be the epilogue, then credits and so on;)
Later I hope that there will be some reviews (and I hope that not only Baltoluver, but someone else reads that;).

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XV. The Royal Song

Taka saw just a pitch-blackness inside of his mind. The other senses were receiving perfectly the east wind, hardness of stone surface, tapping of sands grains hitting rock and the smell of incoming storm. Unfortunately, his sight was unable to show him the most important information: from were the enemy was laughing at him.
“I’m impressed, Taka.” Murmured Mtanga with poisonous irony. “Your acting was even more stupid than I expected... You challenged Dhalimu. Well, I’m not crying about that, because if you have wounded him, me and boys have easier work to do.”
Arbiter recognised that rouge was walking on the edge of plateau. He was marching slowly, but Taka knew that he was just careful. His brother–in-law set himself perfectly – blinded black-maned had no chances to get to him unseen and Mtanga could easily dodge the sudden charge. “And when he dodge me, I will fall beyond the brink.” Thought.
“So...” enemy continued. “As you probably know, I will be the new ruler of Golden Sands. You should have been happy – your sister is to become a queen.”
“You killed Niva!” gasped Taka in moment of dreadful clarity.
“Taka, Taka...” murmured Mtanga. „That is a past. Now we must think about the future.” Although black-maned couldn’t see it, he sensed that his brother-in-law stood up, turned to him and points a sneering stare on arbiter. “Soon you will die!”
Furious Taka pounced ahead, not thinking about consequences. He flew to the edge and stopped just before the brink. Of course, Mtanga was no there. He stepped aside of charge or he had never been there – due to wind Taka could be distracted.
Lion grabbed the rock with claws and jumped back. And there – unexpectedly – he hit the side of enemy. They both were surprised – laughter of rouge faded in second, but after all Mtanga reacted as a first. He hit brother-in-law with paw in nape. Arbiter was pushed back two meters, fortunately – away from the edge – and awkwardly fell on the rock.
“So you want to play a blind man’s buff?” murmured enemy. “Good, that actually might be quite funny.”
“You’ve killed the queen!” growled Taka. “You did it in person or by your sidekicks?”
“Sidekicks? You offend my boys.” Replied Mtanga with laughter. “Understand that they believe they are doing all of this to liberate Golden Pride from tyrant’s paws, not to gave me the throne.”
“Come on, say it louder!” hasped arbiter. “Maybe they will hear what you are planning.”
“No, they won’t.” said rouge. “Wind is howling too loud and we are on leeward. Actually...” he added, coming to Taka and hitting his side. “...it’s time to finish that farce. This blasted wind is even worse than all this sand all around. I hate sand!”
“You should have thought about it before you have chosen the kingdom to conquer.” Murmured Taka and in the same second another attack cut his right side.
Mtanga was everywhere, at least for black-maned. In whistle of wind he was able to move unheard easily sneaking to his victim from behind. He could see, although the omnipresent dust had to decreased that advantage it was still a great advantage. “If I stand a bit longer to the main sandstorm’s hit our chances will get equal.” Thought Taka but then a malicious voice in his head added. “Of course, that they will get equal, because you will both die!”
For a while arbiter was considering a possibility of withdrawing to Dhalimu, but then he left that idea. King could be dead then, and additionally the blind march through plateau (in the heat of storm!) wasn’t easy. And it would took much of time. Too much – the incoming storm was faster than arbiter.
“Why, Mtanga?” Taka decided to play for time. There still was a hope that lionesses would come with assistance. “That is my duty to guard the kingdom. I’m fulfilling it the best I can... although I know it still not enough.” He thought.
“You know nothing!” said rouge with unexpectedly soft voice. “You are the king’s son, raised in luxury and respect. How could you understand what feels an orphan and outcast?”
“The loneliness, humiliation and rank injustice.” Replied Taka, recalling to mind every feeling he experienced during his escape from home. “And what is the most important: the burning need for revenge! On anyone, doesn’t matter if she or he is guilty.” He heard that Mtanga stopped. He sensed some vague bolt of attention that enemy put on him. “And what now? You will avenge on me? The same outcast as you?”
“You know nothing!” gasped his brother-in-law. “That was just in beginning. Then I met Amali... and whole world has changed. She gave me the strength and will to live. Thanks to her I believed in myself and in my might.”
“If you are doing it for Amali, think: she would be quite displeased with death of her brother...” jeered Taka.
“Shut up!” called Mtanga. “Amali will be the queen not because she is princess but because I want that! Now I will be the king, I instead of you all will be setting the rules! I’m stronger that you all. I was starting from zero to reach the stars! I was lying in mud and now I’m standing where I’m standing.”
“Coordinates, please!” murmured Taka, raising his paw. “I can’t see you clearly, I could miss...”
Mtanga ran to brother-in-law and pushed him on the ground with blow in nape. Then he stopped over lying lion and with malicious smile on face started to slowly cut his back with claws. Pain deluged Taka’s senses, but it didn’t make him scream. One who has lost his eyes, survived the sandstorm in open air and many timed said goodbye to his life wasn’t able to scream nor beg for mercy. That part of arbiter was probably already dead.
“Don’t you get it?” growled furious Mtanga. “That is the end! I will be the king, not some aristocrat from high family. I, Mtanga of Cut Trunks Pride. Once I was no one, now I’m the everything! I am the future! The play is over, Taka!” lion plunged his claw in arbiter’s paw and started to drag him on edge of massif, farther away from path, on south-east. When he got almost to the centre of plateau he let his victim loose, panted heavily and looked on close brink of bluff. Stronger and stronger wind was blowing the chocking clouds of dust.

[„See it” song. Melody is fast and uneasy. Mtanga sings with high-pitched, ironical, theatrical voice.]
[Mtanga drags Taka almost to the edge to big, flat boulder. The stone looks almost as a stage, especially that dusty clouds dim almost everything else. Only Mtanga on the stone and Taka on the <auditorium> before it is seen. Black-maned with effort raised his head and turns his wounded face on brother-in-law, as if he was watching his <play>. From beyond the clouds shines a faint rays of moon. It enlightening the rouge, like a theatrical reflector.]

Mtanga:
I doubt if you see it – time to open eyes
Time to end this pitiful show that once joined us


[On words < I doubt if you see it> Mtanga maliciously cover his eyes with paw.]

You are leaving scene now, I will play intact
There is end of common part, cause you’ll die in this act


[On word <act> he leans out from scene to Taka. Black-maned tries to hit him, but he misses terribly.]

Those are our masques, those are our role
You this time so down, alone, I will rock this show

[On words <I will rock this show> Mtanga raised his paw and points the moon.]

You are king no more, now you’re playing fool
If you want applause at all, be my useful tool


[On words < you’re playing fool> Mtanga hit with his paw in wound on Taka’s eyes. He spreads blood on black-maned’s cheeks, making a round spots, similar to clown’s make-up. Arbiter hit Mtanga’s limb and rouge draws back in pain. With fury he hits powerfully Taka’s head. His claws cut a wound on his brother-in-law’s forehead.]

Chorus:
Voice is full of pain
Blind and helpless strain
Weak as cub and dumb as cub
But you won’t grow again


[Mtanga stands up then he jumps down to Taka, circle him with triumphal smile. He doesn’t notice that blood floating from arbiter’s wounds cakes hair of his mane – a bloody plica looks like a crown.]

Is that our lord?
Sharpest justice’s sword?
Ruler of those fertile land
Cannot raise his hand!


[Mtanga pushes Taka in side – black-maned falters but doesn’t fall. Rouge parodies the ceremonial bow and in that moment arbiter hits. His paw comes over bowed Mtanga’s head – rouge laughs with malicious laughter.]

Lo on sacred, shining throne
I think it is gone!


[He points on <scene-rock>, where a blood of prince splashed. Then he hits Taka in cheek – arbiter steps back few steps, awkwardly blocking with right paw.]

Second verse:
Years the last in backline fate made me to be
But I knew that will come time, it came, as you see


[Mtanga again climbs on rock, in the same time hitting with end of his tail in Taka’s cheek.]

I will play the bigger role, because I am big enough
You this time so down, alone, now I have the stuff!


[With triumph he jumps up, for a while stands on rear paws and front ones. He raises up a victory gesture. Scene is turning to Mtanga’s vision: rouge is standing in front of Golden Pride, who is giving him a bow.]

So bright shine of royal gowns is already mine
Smile of fortune, crowds of fan – all come in time


[Vision fades away, the reality of sandstorm returns. Taka with effort comes to <stage>, putting his front-paws on rock, trying to climb up. Mtanga steps on his limbs.]

All the pride will gather on my imperious paw
Die you fool, don’t dare to bother king whom all will bow


[Rouge bends down to brother-in-law and hit him with head. Taka fells back.]

Chorus:
Voice is full of pain
Blind and helpless strain
Weak as cub and dumb as cub
But you won’t grow again


[Mtanga stands on the rock and grabs sands, brought by the wind. He throws with pawful in Taka’s face, what clearly brings serious pain to prince, when dust gets to wounds.]

The leader of mine?
Blood of ancient line?
He is bleeding out to death
Cannot rule his breath!

[Mtanga thrown another pawful and freezes with outstretched paw, pointing on Taka. Arbiter sits on the ground, bleeding hard from face. When sand gets to his mouth he coughs and a new portion of blood comes out of his lips.]

Lo on sacred, heaven-sent
Reaching for his end!


[Mtanga ends with powerful call and hit arbiter’s face with clenched fist.]
[Music stops.]

“And what now, my prince?” asked Mtanga with poisonous voice. “I will be the king!”
“No, you won’t.” panted Taka and his brother-in-law narrowed his eyes. “You are playing ruler, but you won’t be the real one. Ever! Sitting on the throne doesn’t make a real monarch.”
“No.” agreed Mtanga, looking from rock on arbiter. “But my wit and reason do.” Only Taka’s laughter answered him. “And what you laughing at, you fool?”
„You are the fool!” growled prince, still chocking because of laughter. “You are only playing monarch. Do you know how to know the real king?”
“No, but you will tell me.”
In prince’s head many voices were calling. In darkness of his senses suddenly shone well known silhouettes of parents. They seemed to show him one direction, ahead of Taka. And lion understood that he was actually seeing – flat boulder before him and Mtanga on it. Clod determination gripped prince’s throat. “Yes!” whispered some voice in his mind, so similar to Zira’s. “You are the real king and you have a sacred duty.”
“We could know the real monarch when he gives his life for his land.” Replied Taka and slowly stood up on four paws.
“Well.” Smiled rouge. „It isn’t so easy to notice.”
“Always...” arbiter crouched on rear paws. “...it could...” he clenched his blooded eyelids and stretched his aching muscles.”... be...” He raised his tail to recognize the direction of wind. “...PROVED!” and he pounced in usurper’s direction.
Amazed Mtanga saw only that from sandy cloud appearing a silhouette of jumping lion. Face of Taka was bleeding but rouge was almost sure that in place of ripped eyes were gleaming two red stars. The stare of the king, who was administering the royal justice.
Arbiter hit the sitting lion with serious impetus. He inflicted no blow, just set his paws to final push. He picked brother-in-law from rock and they both flew further in sand clouds. In spite of omnipresent dust, gliding Mtanga with terror saw the brink of bluff, mercilessly receding from them.
And then they both fell down.
*
“No, you won’t.” repeated Hofu with hollow voice. “You love him.”
“That is quite obvious, usurper.” Said Raia, baring teethes. “He is my king. Mine!”
Rouges stepped back, as if they were hit by this statement. Hofu and Udole looked uncertain on Baridi. Lion was silent for a longer while, then he whispered to lioness.
“We wanted to save you from tyrant.”
“First you have to kill us, one by one.” Replied sandy-furred. “That the way you wish to save us?”
“But we...”
“You are getting the throne for Mtanga.” Gasped Raia. “I hope that. Because if you really believe that you may kill the king and reign all as the rulers – without laws and hierarchy... your minds have to be saved. You are mad.”
“Not Mtanga killed your queen.” Yelled Baridi. “That was Dhalimu.”
“Liar!” growled lioness. “I trust my king... and Baka, who was with him that evening.” Rouges stepped back even further to path, turning theirs stares into the ground.
“But if not him... who did it?” whispered Udole. “No...”
“We are *****, brothers!” sobbed Udole, and all three turned back and started to run the path down.
And on plateau was just Dhalimu, supported by Raia. Pair was for longer while looking in sandy darkness, after escaping intruders. But then lionesses understood what they have to do. She hugged her beloved tighter and whispered.
“We must go, my love. That storm will kill us.”
*
Pride gathered before main entrance to Golden Cave on the Acacia Alley. Although storm was growing stronger and stronger, Golden Ones were waiting, looking on desert with hope.
“They are no here!” reported Simmi to Kauli, who was hanging on Akra’s neck. “The sandstorm is growing, so we can’t see any pawprint. But we found unconsciousness Kota, next to western path. She will be all right, but...”
“But they are already on the top.” Whispered Akra and started to run to way up.
“Ssssstop” called python. “Now issss too late! Dhalimu and Taka have to manage their own.”
Terrified lionesses froze, looking on massif’s top, dimmed with sand clouds. And then some dark shape fell from there, hitting the ground in before their paws.
“Mtanga?” yelled shocked Amali and rushed to twisted bodies.
“TAKA!” screamed Kota, barely opening her eyes. Two lionesses grabbed her and took to two lions.
Mtanga fell as the first one on sand of alley. Life instantly left the broken body in moment he reached the ground. Amali run to lions but froze, seeing that on her mate was lying her brother.
Taka was still alive, but even quick look on wounded one shows that arbiter is doomed anyway. Rouge a little amortized the fall of black-maned but prince was bleeding from numerous wounds and his paws and ribs were smashed. From mouth a stream of blood was floating and barely taking breach was mixed with bloody coughs.
“Stars!” yelled Amali.
“Forgive me, sister...” whispered Taka. “He wanted to hurt us all.”
Lionesses fell down and burst in laughter, nestling to both mate and brother. In the same moment lionesses noticed three silhouettes of lions, standing in clouds of dust and looking on events in alley. Akra set off, extending her claws to attack rouges, but Kauli stopped her with hiss.
“Taka... why? What happened?” cried Amali.
“I have to.” Replied Taka with weak voice. “Do you believe me?” his sister nodded his head. “Don’t judge him too hard...” he stopped to cough with blood. “He wanted to make you a queen.”
Kota came to beloved from the other side and with motherly care draught his body from dead rouge. Arbiter was lying on the sand and breating with effort. But he was smiling airily.
“Taka, you saved us...” cried Kota. “But you can’t die. Not now!”
“Not now, not yet.” Agreed lion. “Kings are dying hard. Where are... Ow, they are here.”
“King!” sounded a amazed roar.
Lionesses turned to east to see Raia and Dhalimu, running, or maybe better to say: hobbling to the pride. Brown-maned lion got to dying enemy, raised his paw and terrifying gathered ones, he lowered it on Taka. He stopped his limb over the forehead of wounded one.
“You won, Taka.” said Dhalimu. “According to the Law of Challenge you won the duel. As the first one you left the battlefield by your own.” Seeing amaze of Raia, he whispered her to ear. “Forgive me, my love. But I must be obedient to laws. And you will be my queen anyway.” To pride he roared louder. “Listen to me! I, Dhalimu of Golden Sands, profess that Taka the Second prevailed me in duel. I deposit my crown to him.”
“Right in time!” whispered Taka. “Well... actually you don’t like to hurry.” And he burst with laughter, what caused another wave of blood from his mouth.
“Save you strength, Taka.” Advised former king. “You have to announce that.”
“But Dhalimu...” yelled Kota. “He...”
“Female!” roared brown-maned. “You have stirred enough. Let the males to do what they have to do.”
Taka narrowed his dead eyes and pride gasped, thinking he was passing away. But he was just gathering strength, looking with eyes of his soul on Acacia Alley. The spirits of Ancestors were standing there, looking with pride on descendant and successor. Thanks to that the new king managed to swallow bloody and dusted saliva and roared with all his might – louder that growing storm. The sky helped him, giving a powerful thunder in the same moment.
“That’sssssss the king!” hissed Kauli and Golden Ones bowed theirs heads. All, except Raia.
“Right, you not.” Whispered Taka. “You have already your king and nothing would change that.” He turned his muzzle to Dhalimu. Although he couldn’t see brown-maned he was sensing his presence clearly. “Forgive me, my friend, but you can’t stay here.”
“I know.” Replied lion. „I lost this kingdom long ago. But I demand that you all will treat Raia as the queen. She became the queen yesterday on plateau.”
“Of course.” Said Taka. “I won’t see to it, but I’m sure...”
“NO!” interrupted lioness with decisive voice. “If Dhalimu leaves I will leave as well. I’m going wherever my king goes.” Brown-maned looked on her a bit surprised. His lips seem to whisper: you don’t have to. “I’m going with my mate. I must and I want.” She nestled in Dhalimu’s mane.
Kota was still lying next to her beloved, crying but also carefully looking on blooded face of Taka. He sensed that because he turned his muzzle to her.
“Are you sure, you are carrying our cub?” asked and when she nodded, he continued. “Are you ready to raise him to be Golden King?”
“Taka...” she yelled, but in her voice confirmation sounded.
“Listen to me... until my child will be mature, Kota will rule as the Golden Regent. Is that clear?” among gathered ones sounded murmurs of agreement.
“Taka, do something with those rouges.” Reminded Dhalimu.
“Ow, yes...” agreed king. “Are they still standing there?” he asked, pointing with muzzle on desert. Pride yelled from amaze, because blind ruler had no chance to see the trio. “Bring them here, until storm will bury them...” When rouges came in shameful silence to wounded monarch, he said to his sister. “Will you stay here or you will go with them?” hearing amazed gasps of lions, he added. “Why are you surprised? Do you think that I should have punished you for Mtanga’s crimes? Go your way, just never spread such a mayhem as you did today, right?” once again he looked on sister. “Amali?”
“I can’t stay here.” She replied with breaking voice. “Not after what happened to Mtanga. Forgive brother.”
“My lady, we will take care of you!” called Baridi with decisive voice. “Of course, if you want that...”
“Go, sis...” whispered king. “Start everything once more... And if you ever go home... tell Dahabu... that I will be watching him from the sky.”
“Farewell, brother.” Said Amali and stood up. She instinctively nestled to Baridi’s side.
“That’s all?” asked Taka quietly.
“I think so...” replied Dhalimu. “But I’m not sure. I wasn’t the best king...”
“Right... so it’s done.” Whispered Taka. “Listen to your queen, my subjects. She will guide you in hard times. Kota... I love you.”
Golden-furred closed her eyes and nestled harder in mate’s mane. She was remaining that way for long minutes, unless she was sure that in king’s chest any spark of life is burning. Then she stood up and pricked up her ears. Wind ceased in one moment and from beyond the cloud a new star appeared on the firmament.
“A gift, my love?” whispered Kota into darkness.
Slowly, lazy but also decisively, drops of rain started to fall from nightly sky to meet the earth. They were dropping on amazed lions and lionesses, making more furrows on faces. But this time there were happiest furrows than ones after tears. After three years of death to Lions Lands the life was returning. With death of king Taka the Second the Second Drought was finished.

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Nice!

I'm sure that Amali will forgive Mtanga, he was right but planned his righting in the worst way possible. At least Baridi is there for her.

Dhalimu resigned like a good King should.

Too bad that Taka's reign was only for a few minutes... at the Golden Sands will have a good future.

As always, good chapter! I can't wait for the Epilogue howl.gif


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So this is the end of whole story. Feel free to comment it, draw fanarts and so on;)
After general proof-reading TNR will be displayed in ff-gallery.

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XVI. Epilogue – The Brave Old World

Rain was hitting sand with unexpected might. So much water on the desert hadn’t been seen for years, so Golden Pride froze in amaze, in the same degree touched by death of their new king and the miracle that followed it that they were sensing on own furs. Finally Busu raised her muzzle to the sky and with cubbish joy started to swallow heavy drops.
“Water... how many...”
And previous cold sorrow of lionesses turned in one moment to burst of joy. Golden Ones, rouges, even Dhalimu – everybody gave a triumphal roars to rainy clouds. The younger females, who had never seen the real rain started a mad dance, with laughter stomping on fast growing pools of sky gift. Only Kolta and Amali were lying next to theirs dead, unable to leave bereavement even for so amazing event. Finally Raia left companions, jumping in dance and went to the new queen.
“I’m sure he didn’t want you to cry.” She whisper Kota on ear. “He died also for you to smile.”
“I know.” Replied golden-furred. „He gave us the rain.”
*
“Touching, isn’t it?” asked Sparthy polite. Ghost was holding in immaterial mouth a nape of Taka. They both were ascending over Golden Snads to rainy clouds. Of course desert patron was talking clearly in spite of clenched jaws. In the Sky World many of earthly laws matters not. “What a great song will be from that! Ow, I regret you won’t sing it. Just think: heroic death of the king that is restoring order in kingdom. Water falls to the ground, soul goes to the sky. They pass in half a way, what could be described in very poetical way.”
“E...e...” replied deceased. He didn’t understand a word what his grand-uncle was talking about, but just in case he tried to moan in confirmative way.
“Don’t care what I’m talking about.” Asked Sparthi. “I’m talking rots just to help you prevail faster a shock of passing. If you want, I could sing you a lullaby... but no, we are almost on the spot.”
“I... can see...” whispered Taka, looking down. As if the strangest thing he was experiencing was regained sight, not the fact he was flying to the sky, hundreds meters above the ground.
“How do you like it? Our home is real stunning, especially seen from this perspective...”
“I’m dead.” Understood black-maned. „Mom... Dad...”
„They are here. Look!” said Sparhi and got loose his relative from grasp.
They were standing on surface of heavy clouds, although it wasn’t matter. They were everywhere and nowhere, as all Ancient Ones. Ghosts surrounded newcomer with circle of curious stares. They touched him with paws, greeting without a word.
“Taka!” finally cried Vitani. “Son, forgive...”
“Mom, I became a king!” called lion with voice of cub, proud of his first bug-hunt. Shock on his new condition confused his senses and reason, but haven’t muffled a burning feeling of pride and good fulfilled duty. “Dad, I’ve made it!” Tanabi came to son and nested his head in Golden Sands king’s mane. Meanwhile Vitani was licking Taka’s cheek, crying quietly. “Mom, dad... it’s over. There is no reason to be sad... I hope.” He murmured, looking on Sparthi. Sandy-maned nodded his head. “I am here, with you. Don’t cry.”
“Taka, forgive us, we pulled you into this.” Said Tanabi seriously. “I can’t regret that, because thanks to your sacrifice Golden Ones survived... but I hurt so much, that we allowed on this.”
“Wait... there is no your fault in all events downthere.” Murmured black-maned.
“But our responsibility.” Threw Zira. Golden Lioness went closed to grandson and looked in his eyes. “My dear, please, tell you hold no grudge against your parents... and me. If you are not angry on us, help us. Forgive that we did. Your dead is more painful to us than to you.”
“Grandma... mom, dad...” said amazed lion. “If that were you who helped me on the way, I could be only grateful. I’m glad I could execute your plan... Help the Kings of the Past in their duties to living ones...” and than again bended down to Vitani’s ear and whispered with cubbish joy. “Mom... I’m the king!”
“And a classy king, I must say!” sounded a new, unknown voice. Scar stood next to Zira and looked on grandson. “Welcome, my namesake. I am Scar, Taka the First, present Star Arbiter over Lions Lands.” Dead one bowed his head and his parents went away few steps. Tears in Vitani eyes dried in one moment and on face came a proud smile. As you probably already know, your earthly way has ended today. You are among the Stars now, with us – your sky family. I as a family leader, I must say that again: the king and a classy king you are. Taka, some monarch are ruling over ten years. You were ruling about ten minutes...” in spite of serious expression, he smiled for a second. “...and showed more virtues that most of other monarchs. You defended the Circle. The drought ended thanks to you. Rains are back.”
“If Golden Sands...” asked black-maned with anxiety.
“Taka, that is no longer your concern.” Interrupted him Scar. “Trust the living ones, as we trusted you. They will manage. The brave old world is back.”
*
Dhalimu was saying goodbye to lionesses for a longer while. Mainly he was apologizing and they were thanking him. Every, even the most humiliated once by former king, female found something that she could be grateful to lion. Raia was silently praising pride-sisters for generosity. “Now I can admit it.” She thought. “My love was poor ruler. But they were great subjects. Thank you, girls.” In the same time she was listening to Kota.
“Forgive me, Raia, but it must be that way.” Said the new queen. “Dhalimu was ruling here and who once was the king, will save his majesty forever. So there is no room for him in this pride. But we will remember him... without anger.”
“I know it and I’m grateful for that.” Replied sandy-furred.
“Raia... I will miss you.” Suddenly new monarchess burst in tears. And cuddled to friends side.
“I will too, Kota.” Murmured lioness. “But I must follow my king, wherever the Circle will guide him. I will remember you... and Taka.” Nestled queen nodded her head. “But don’t make this farewell too long. We both have our duties to do.”
“I know... Farewell, my friend.” Said Kota, steeping few steps back from sandy-furred.
“Farewell, you rebel!” murmured lionesses and they both burst in laughter. “I love you.”
Then she went to Dhalimu, nudged his side and they both set off in rising sun’s direction. Hobbling lion was supported by side of mate – they were marching slowly. She didn’t hurry him, just with smile encouraging to further way.
“Look!” whispered brown-maned. “So many flowers... They have grown so quickly. As if they were waiting all that time to sprout in rain. They are so beautiful as you are.” He looked in Raia’s eyes.
“Yes, they were waiting.” Agreed lioness. “Maybe even for years in drought to blossom today. But let’s go. The world is waiting for us.”
She nudged her mate in side and started again due east. Although she was a monarchess of non-existent kingdom, she was as happy, as had been never before.

[Akheri]

[The ending song. We see the subtitles with credits, thanks list... etc. In background we see further, silent scenes of movie. <Vitani’s lullaby> has a merry tune and easy rhythm, making easier to remember lyrics.]
[We see scenes in fast-forward – a capture of Golden Sands and a fragment of desert from air-perspective. From soil a countless flowers grow and cover the area.]

The wise lions of Gold Sand
With the desert live in league
They keep own, beautiful land
Although it’s so hard to keep

[On flower-carpet walk lionesses, carrying a numerous preys.]

When they want a draught to drink
To clear throats from nasty dust
They sing song that we now sing
So it would spur them up so fast:


[Flowers wither, again a sand shows from below, but it is clear that Golden Sands has enough of water.]

For two paws quick make a hole
Put a bundle of fresh brush
Leave a gap it in (but small)
Then go sleep and go sleep hush


[Scenes at normal tempo. We see Akra, showing Baka how to dig dew-collecting holes.]

Just before sun rises up
Get your paws under the stone
Drink a tasty fresh dew's cup
Until sun would make it gone


[Zoom-in – both lionesses pull put the brush. There is some dew on it. Younger of lionesses looks on older with admire.]

Storm won’t find you unprepared
If you can read book of clouds
Red on evening sky is there?
Morning will come with a blows

[Then they both look on horizon, where some distant clouds are seen. Akra nudges Baka in side and both go to the cave.]

So don’t leave the cave, my child
Today much better is to sleep
Storms will cease like every night
For too long evil can’t keep


[Capture of Golden Sands, enblown with strong sandstorm. Zoom-in on entrance to cave, camera goes inside. We see Kota, licking a tiny cub. Face of cub is reminding face of Taka the Second.]

All will be as once it was
We must just to wait a while
Sleep in cave till end of those
Soon again we could to smile


[Kota raised her head and smiles, thoughtful. Capture turns to show Raia’s face. Sandy-furred was far away. Zoom-out – we see that she is caressing a cub too. Next to Dhalimu sleeps. Again, zoom-out, we see that family lives in trunk of giant baobab, that shields them from sandstorm.
In dust-clouds we see vague silhouettes of Taka the Second, Niva and Mtanga. Mtanga turns out his stare with shame, but Niva nudges his side and points son of Dhalimu and Raia. Then she smiled friendly. Rouge sighs with clear relief.
Screen fades to black, we see only the rest of lengthy credits;)]

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Ps.
Translation of this story was born thanks to BaltoLuver, who encouraged me to do this.
Who enjoyed that story should thanks her.
Cheering of Claymore was also very helpful.

The title of XIV chapter is taken after book of prof. Jacek Bartyzel [Umierać, ale powoli] (what I loosely translated into: To die, but to die hard]. Along with “The Lion King” that book made a monarchist ;)

Right now I plan no other stories from TLK universe, but when I get 10 favs in my Bff-gallery, I’m starting to write a TAoS sequel.

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allears.gif cool.gif howl.gif Nice, nice, very nice!

I just started reading 'The Age of Steele' I'll let you know what I think of it. Once I've done that, I'll be looking for the sequel!

Until then, take care! :)


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BaltoLuver:
Ow, You haven’t read TAoS? Sorry, actually I should have warned You before lecture of TDoF, that I used there a lot of elements and characters from my first story. Well, but now You will know what is all about with this Buckland-crew and Aleu and Steele ;)
Anyway – I’m looking forward to your review.

Ps. To all my Readers:

I’m totally lost recently – although I have very much work with my studies, I will probably won’t stand long without writing something;)
What do You think – I have some ideas to develop, but I’m not sure which one (if any) I should work on. I still going to write a long TAoS sequel, but probably not now, but I’ll start in about a month. Right now I’m thinking about:
- Alternative (completely different from TAoS) story of Steele (maybe not so experimental as TAoS – Steele would be there... old, good (sic!) Steele from B1). It would contain two stories (about 50 000 chars each).
- Short novel about TDoN characters, namely about puphood of Mackenzie Sisters (the main disadvantage of this project that is actually totally independent from Balto-series, because it’s about my apocryphal characters, a fanfic to fanfic, or something like that. But I don’t know... if You like that funny characters I would turn them into real protagonists ;)

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Is that a vote for postponing all the side-project and focus on TAoS sequel?

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I have to agree with Claymore on this one Taka... 'The Age of Steele' is an amazing story. One of the best I've ever read, expect to the 'Antagonist' series by DakotaWereWolf.


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So I have a question to You (You may answer here or in topic with pool): what do You think about songs in [The Age of Cris] (that is a working title of incoming story)?
That means: do You like songs (and choreographic scenes) in my previous fanfics, considering that they have some artistic value and are fitting to text? Or You think that they are just incomprehensible masses of words, that show author’s language incompetence?

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