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haha yeah lol...You should become a poet! lol

Thankies. ^,^ I write poetry, but I is just a beginner. I need lots and lots and lots of practice...'Cause my words don't flow write.

Dudeness, those songs rock hybrid! Do you practice writing 'em?

here is another one.

none of the people know who I am for they never... seen me before but they do now for they seen me just last night at a party.

no one talked to me not even when when I talked to them they only egnored me all throught the night at the last minut I puled out my guitar and started to rock out and now they know me.

I'v been on the raod and it's been rauph but I take as it is at a concert singing the same old song( you will never catch me to night never) they always ask for more but are never saticfide.

So here is my story it's not a lie like I'v seen in my past all the days all the nights life is hard so take it head on! all together not just one person everbody has to help.


back in my home town my friend was geting picked on so I steped in to help her in her needs they never step of they never know how so i have to teach them so i did now everythings fine and good and normal thats of my story.



some of the parts run again

the song sucks but o well.

I also like "Holding Out For A Hero"
Listen to GreyKitty's music video.

http://www.zippyvideos.com/365317366325 ... *greykitty

This one is quite cool... I wrote my own 95% ORIGINAL verison for this one titled "Take Away My Pain" for my band witch I am going to post below!

ENJOY!

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( 15."Take Away My Pain" )

( Visions By: Evo-X )
( Dreams By: Evo-X )
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Take It
Just Take It
Just Take It
Just Take It

Take Away my pain
Take Away My Pain

Whenever You Go!!

Please End The Storm
This Storm From Hell
I've Lost Everything
That Has Ever Meant
Anything To Me

You Lie
So Many Cold Lies
Have Taken You
Far Away From My Redemption!


Now The Truth...
The Truth Has Been Burried
Deep Within This cold World

Tell me
what's This Life Worth?
I Feel I'm In Danger
Of Going Under
And Now There's Nothing
Here To See

There's Nothing
Nothing
Nothing
Nothing

Now Just a Lost Cause
Battered And Bruised
Scarred And Worthless
Lost and Useless
Weathered and Broken
Now I'm The Monster You've Created

Just Take It Away
Just Take It Away
Take It Away
Take Away My Pain

Just Please
Just Please
End This Constant Torment
I Can't Take It Anymore
And Now I Think
The Last Bit Of Innocennce
Has Faded Into The Deep Red Skies

Now You Just Try
To Pull Me Under

And Take It Away
Just Take It Away
Just Take It Away
Just Take It Away

Take Away my Pain
Take Away My Pain

Whenever You Go!!!


Take Away This Endless Sacrifice!
The Impetious Broken Feelings
That Have Haunted Me To No Return

I've Made Many Mistakes
Along This Deep Dark Path
And I Can't Take The Pressure
so Now In Return
I Guess I Got What I Deserved
My Life Has Been Taken From Me

And So Now
Nothing Remains
But A Savage Memory
Deep Emptyness
And a Constant Void

Now You Just Try
To Pull Me Under

And Take It Away
Just Take It Away
Just Take It Away
Just Take It Away

Take Away My pain
Take Away My Pain

Whenever You Go!!!

EDIT: I left out this interesting little bit for the DT fans I know because I rushed when I intially posted this here...

I would also like to point out the fact that I have included several Dream Theater Song and Lyric references in this song including

Lie
Panic Attack
Inocennce Faded
Just Let Me Breathe
Pull Me Under
Endless Sacrifice
Take Away My Pain
Peruvian Skies
Burning My Soul

and The entire Scenes From A Memory album

WOW!! That was alot better than mine! Looking back at mine, it's easy to see I've made over a million mistakes in it! (that sentence just gave me an idea!) AWSOME! ^.^

(I guess I'll write this in paragraph form since I don't know yet how to make it in the song writing form...)

All of my life, I've made mistake after mistake. Falling, falling out of place. Look at me I have no grace. I am such an insignifigance. I am very unworthy. Well I'm not your slave anymore!! And forever and forever I have been confined in this cage, in this dungeon I have to wait! But now, yes now for my own sake! I escape! I escape! It's been so long it feels like an eternity! That I have been cut off from the outside untill I die in old age. That I've been used as a punching bag, when, you, were, enraged! Now burning embers inside me rage. I seek revenge, and now I have taken my refuge! No longer am I endangered. And every memory brings back pain. And I will never speak, of, you, again!

This fiery ember burning bright, burns with all my rages might! And forever I must fight, back the memories!

Because, Of, You! This ember burns for all of eternity...

"Revenge" By BlackwolfWSP with Phrasing edits by Lowes4803

Song Reformating By Lowes4803

All of my life
I've made mistake after mistake
Falling
falling out of place

Look at me
I have no grace
I am such an insignifigance.
I am very unworthy
Well I'm not your slave anymore....

And Now forever
Forever
Forever
Forever............

I have been confined to this cage
in this dark dungeon I wait
But now for my own sake

I escape
I escape

It's been so long it feels like an eternity!
That I have been cut off from the outside
untill I die in old age
That I've been used as a punching bag

when you were enraged!
Always Burning My Soul
Now embers burn inside me like a raging Wildfire.

( CHORUS X2 )

Because Of You!
This ember burns for all of eternity...
Because Of You
Now I seek revenge
Because Of You!
This ember burns for all of eternity...

Now I seek revenge
and now I have taken my refuge!
No longer In danger
And With every memory brings back pain.

And I will never speak of you again!

Never
Never
Never
And I will never speak of you again!

These fiery embers
burning bright Within
burn with all my might
And forever I must fight
back these dark memories!

Because Of You!
This ember burns for all of eternity...
Because Of You
Now I seek revenge
Because Of You!
This ember burns for all of eternity...


( NOTE and a few encouraging words: I have made a few minor phrasing edits and have aslo added a chorus to bring some life to the song! aslo hope you liked the title I given to it "Revenge"

And with pleasure from one musician to a fellow musician I just would like to say you've been a HUGE inspiration to my group's music and sound.. keep it up dude! )

ENJOY and tell me what you think about the edits! PEACE OUT!

-Adriondack

Thanks so much! I LOVE your phrase editing! You totally fixed it up! ^.^ And I am honored to be somewhat of an inspiration, and I'm actually glad you took my song and edited it. ^.^ Sorry that my songs are always set up pretty cruddy. Plus, the extra words you add in their give me better ideas for words to use each day! Thank you again! ^.^

(And I'm a 'dudette')

i turned away
only to hear you scream
i wanted to return
only to find i was locked out of your heart
my love a vengeance
trapped inside my heart
and all i could do was hear you cry
not a d*** thing i could do
to reverse it all

I want to turn back the clock
Turn it back and have my life back
Give you the words I meant to say
I kept on screaming 'don't leave me'
But you never did hear me
My wings broken and tarnished
Unable to fly
The rock I wear weighing me down
A promise made in faith
A life broken by love
Why did the latter prevail?
Why did the love I have for you separate us?
At least let me say the words I saved for you
At least give me my life back

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I'm sorry that was super crappy.

no double posting, and nice song

"A World of Despartion"
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( Images By: Evolution X )
( Words By: Evolution X )
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welcome to
a lifelong nightmare
Where I feel
I'm losing my mind
have I lost
The will to live again

What will this
new millenium
have in store
For the misunderstood
For the hopeless
For the deseparate

have we lost all
of our trust in the
world surrounding us

Listening to the city
Whispering its violence
I set out watching from above
The new millenium
brings many dark questions
hopeful solutions to be found
I hoped It was
just a lifelong nightmare
only to be let down
when I learned the truth

now when
I look at the world
where there's
no understanding
I'm trying to find some sense
of strength

I was told
there'd be no one to
count on when I feel alone and
afraid

I was told
there's a new love
that's born
for each one that
has died

I was told
if you dream of the
next world
You'll find yourself swimming
in a lake of fire

now I'm here
and I'm learning how to live again
just trying to find some sense
of strength
and never willing
to give up
until I have
nothing more
to give back
cold surrounding world
all around me

this isn't the
way I remember
looking at the world
Before it had understanding
and the truth was never
so cold
Now I'm so afraid

that
I'm learning how to live
here again
trying to find some sense
of strength
and never willing
to give up
until I have
nothing more
to give back
cold surrounding world
all around me

What will this
new millenium
have in store
For the misunderstood
For the hopeless
For the deseparate

What will this
new millenium
hold for us
What will this new life
bring into the world

What will this
new millenium
have in store
For the misunderstood
For the hopeless
For the deseparate

What will this
new millenium
hold for us
What will this new life
bring into the world
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Comments Highly Appreciated!

American woman stay away from me-
American woman mama let me be
Now woman stay from me-
Don't come knocking aroung my door I don't wanna see ur face no mare
Now woman stay away from me-(that's all I know)

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Dark Storm,no double-posting please........They stab it with their steely knives,but they just can't kill the beast.