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rockyjet~ginga
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Post subject: Posted: Thu Jun 29, 2006 9:41 am |
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Olivia_loves_Link wrote: Maybe I shouldn't continue...Dark_Wolf said "My 5 year old cousin writes better than you do." So yeah, I feel low self-esteemed now.
I can't beleive Dark Wolf! You're one of the best writers I've ever seen on BS!!!!!! I'm gonna pm her and tell her to reaspect other RIGHT NOW! Please continue.
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rockyjet~ginga
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Post subject: Posted: Thu Jun 29, 2006 1:41 pm |
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Olivia_loves_Link wrote: Oh, um...that wasn't necessary, rockyjet...I'm afraid of his/her reaction now....Dark_Wolf gonna think I went cryin' to everyone and...I'm scared...
Don't worry; I talked nicely and explained Dark Wolf SHOULD understand. And since more people use that name now, I didn't know which one -.- But I never said anything bad or stupid. I talked respectively and said, "I'm just trying to be a good friend to her". So she shouldn't think you went crying 
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Olivia_the_Harper
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Post subject: Posted: Thu Jun 29, 2006 2:18 pm |
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Alrighty, I've completed the next part!
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Daddy and I followed my "siblings". As I was running, I had a sudden free-feeling sensation. I felt like an eagle flying through the sky with the wind beneath my wings.
We ran until we came to a spacious meadow. The wolf clan was gathered around a dead buffalo of which they were eating. Their muzzles were dyed red with blood. My "siblings" ran to the buffalo and started eating.
Aniu raised her head with a dyed red muzzle and looked at the brown pup with a sprained leg. Her ears and eyebrows raised in surprise and she said, "Bear! What ever happened to your leg?!"
"I was running and I fell and sprained my leg," said Bear pitifully.
"Oh, don't worry. It'll be fine in a few days," Aniu said as she licked Bear's paw tenderly and lovingly. She continued to eat.
I was very hungry, so I decided to try buffalo. I'd have to eat living things if I was going to live in the forest, anyway.
I wiggled through the crowd and latched my teeth on the buffalo. I pulled at the hide but it wouldn't tear off. I continued to pull and twist, growling and gnawing until it came off with a snap. I started to chew. It tasted strange and unfamiliar at first, much unlike the familiar dog food, but after a few seconds, the taste was undescribably delicious. The taste aroused my taste buds, and I couldn't help but to chew faster until I finally swollowed. It had a wonderful taste even as it slithered down my throat. By golly, it was as good as mother's milk!
I rushed back to the buffalo and ate eagerly until I was full. It was WAY better than dog food!
We went back to the cave. I decided I'd like this new place, and in celebration of my joy, I decided to play with the siblings I never had. I trotted over to Tala and said, "Um, Tala?"
"Yeah?" she asked.
"Will you wrestle with me?" I asked sheepishly.
"Put 'em up!" Tala shouted as she smiled.
She was an excellent fighter. I'd never wrestled before, and of course, she won.
I played with the rest of my siblings until Aniu called, "Bedtime!"
I followed my siblings to Aniu's side. We snuggled next to her and looked up at her sweet face. She began to sing with a sweet voice a song called "Reach for the Light". There was one part in the song where my siblings and I sang along. It was a beautiful and inspiring song.
We put our heads down and closed our eyes. She wrapped her fluffy tail around us and I snuggled against her warm, bulged belly. She had a pleasant smell that comforted me, and I dozed off to sleep. She was as comforting as mother was.
When I woke up, something amazing happened!
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Olivia_the_Harper
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Post subject: Posted: Fri Jun 30, 2006 3:16 pm |
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Dark_Wolf wrote: Olivia_loves_Link wrote: Maybe I shouldn't continue...Dark_Wolf said "My 5 year old cousin writes better than you do." So yeah, I feel low self-esteemed now. What? I never meant your fics I meant by the way you are complaining. Geesh, even do I did an typo you take it too seriously. I have NEVER read your fanfics, so hy in the world would I critize something I never had read. Even thought rockyjet and DarkHusky think your fics are the best, because it's there opinion, others like many other writiers. Everyone has an certain technique that brings the reader hooked. It mainly is because of Word Choice, Voice, Sentence Fluency, and Organization. Word Choice, because the reader wants to know what type of words that you used to get the setting or idea. Voice because does it sound like you being yourself while writing the story. Sentence Fluency by making the story have an certain flow to it. Finally Organization, was everything planned out on an outline or did you keep it in your head. That what keeps an reader hook on the story. Even though you don't need to believe me because of my opinion. I never read your stories at all, so why would you think I would say something like that. If I was saying something about your stories then I would write, " My cousin can write better stories than you " Which I never did. If you think I'm mean, then go ahead and think that. But actually I am very nice, and if you think I'm disrepectful, then your wrong again. I give respect to every member but when someone goes barging into a topic complaining about something making someone embarrassed, then that is disrepect. That is all that I have to say. Have an very nice day now, and this is coming from me, Dark Wolf.
It was just a misunderstanding. And I've apologized to Cat through PM's, AND I've decided to not let curiosity get the better of me. And by the way, I like your signature.
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Arrowe
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Post subject: Posted: Tue Jul 04, 2006 8:51 pm |
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Yay! Please continue! I like how you describe things, like the buffalo meat and whatnot. 
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Olivia_the_Harper
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Post subject: Posted: Wed Jul 05, 2006 9:36 am |
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DarkHusky wrote: Olivia_loves_Link wrote: Arrowe wrote: Yay! Please continue! I like how you describe things, like the buffalo meat and whatnot.  Yeah, I was wanting to go into that. Ok enough! haha continue!!!!!!
Be patient, DarkHusky. I can't think of something that fast.
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WhiteLightning
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Post subject: Posted: Thu Jul 06, 2006 8:22 pm |
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Olivia_loves_Link wrote: It might be a while before I write the next part. I'm working on a fan fiction that is going to be my most efforted fanfic. okay but please make it soon. *edit*
you are very good at writing.
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