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ok, my rp that needs people is called lost on paridise island

pice of the plot:
some people get lost in the jungle of paridise island. will they survive?

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Well, I have this idea that has to do with Dire wolves. I just want to know if the plot is ok and not confusing. Feel free to add some things into the plot if it will help.

Here's the plot;

Hamish, a young dire wolf was exiled from her clan for a crime she didn't comit. After days of wandering around to find a home, she finds a male wolf who is willing to help her. She creates a strong friendship with him and she lives hapily, her ribs no longer showing.
Untill one day, one of her father's luitenants (Sp?) named Fengo tracks her down. He tells her that her father has gone crazy and is out of control. His rage episode has killed one pup and hurt three other wolves, he says. Hamish can't believe what she is hearing but that's not all. Fengo tells her he has always loved her from the day she was born. But that is still not all! To make things worse, once a large clan of dire wolves has seperated into two packs because of her father's abuse.
Dunleavy MacHeath, the leader of the now new pack sets up a plan to take down Duncan MacDuncan's part of the pack to take over the intire Beyond the Beyond territory!
Having to leave her friend who had helped her, Hamish and Fengo will have to travel a great distance to get back to the Beyond. But will the wolves forget Hamish's exile long enough for her to help in the war? Will she become Fengo's mate? And which side will win? You deside...

Hi! I have a RP that needs people! It's a Harry Potter RP that takes place in Harry's grandkid's time.

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Please join!

The Beyond the Beyond thing kinda confuses me because it isn't menionted before then, other than that it seems good. Oh and here I spell checked it for you.

Hamish, a young dire wolf was exiled from her clan for a crime she didn't commit. After days of wandering around to find a home, she finds a male wolf who is willing to help her. She creates a strong friendship with him and she lives happily, her ribs no longer showing.
Until one day, one of her father's lieutenants named Fengo tracks her down. He tells her that her father has gone crazy and is out of control. His rage episode has killed one pup and hurt three other wolves, he says. Hamish can't believe what she is hearing but that's not all. Fengo tells her he has always loved her from the day she was born. But that is still not all! To make things worse, once a large clan of dire wolves has separated into two packs because of her father's abuse.
Dunleavy MacHeath, the leader of the now new pack sets up a plan to take down Duncan MacDuncan's part of the pack to take over the entire Beyond the Beyond territory!
Having to leave her friend who had helped her, Hamish and Fengo will have to travel a great distance to get back to the Beyond. But will the wolves forget Hamish's exile long enough for her to help in the war? Will she become Fengo's mate? And which side will win? You decide...

Now for the first time, I'm asking for help. I want to do an RP were a female dog escapes a dog fighting ring but is captured by a dog catcher. She ends up meeting the dog catcher's dog, who up to this point had a disliking of stray dogs but the two fall in love. Meanwhile, the female was unable to help her friends back at the dog fighting ring escape and promised she'd find a way to help them escape their sadistic owner. The female's new love helps her and some new friends escape the pound and come up with a plan to free her old friends and get justice done to her old owner, all the while trying to avoid the dog catcher, who is discovered to be working with the ring owner to bring him dogs.

So any one have any ideas?

Tovah - That sounds like a good rp to me. I wasn't confused at all.

Godzilla - That sounds like a pretty well-developed idea. To me, that could be a plot. What kind of ideas are you looking for exactly?

Mostly just ideas for sub plots and how to extend it more, because at the moment, it seems like it'll be short. Something I'm considering is having the ring owner move his ring to another city so they have to chase after him. That's all I can think of and it seems...cliche to me.

Hmmm. Well you could have two sub-plots. Like what is going on with the 'rescue party' from the pound. And then have whats going on in the fighting ring. Like some of the dogs have given up hope in the female escapee and are trying different ecapes of their own and some have given up hope of an escape at all and some that are still waiting for the female to return. And then some of the dogs do escape after the fighting ring moves. They meet up with the dogs of the pound to rescue the dogs still in the fighting rings. After that, they go back to town (avoiding both the fighting dog owner and dog catcher) to rescue the rest of the dogs from the pound, along with some new captives.

It's really long, but thats just how a brain storm. Take what you want from that mess of ideas.

Thanks. Considering the dog catcher is working for the ring owner, its kinda saving dogs from the dog fighting ring by rescueing them from his pound. Thanks. Alright, title ideas?

A Chance For Freedom
Two Circles of Hell
Savior Among Dogs
Fight, Cage, or Run

None of these are very good.

They're ok but not exactly what I'd like....Maybe Deception, Love, and Rescue? I don't know, can you think of anything along that lines?

How about 'A Rescue From A Trap' if that makes sense to anyone but me.
Or 'Caught'. One word titles seem more... titely. (making up words here!) Or "Rescue".
Something like that, I think.

How's 'For My Friends' sound? I'm asking if that's catchy enough.

Sounds better than anything I could come up with. But, anyways, I really like it. It's catchy.