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(I'll reply to the rp soon)

I can't find the posts, I saved them in M. word but now I can't find them

Heres my new designs:

Sorry for double post.

Heres angel:

(*Rolls eyes* Aww you keep changing Angel's design, that was why I changed Karba and Shar's designs to include her markings. Anywho it don't metter too much, and I changed the piccies on Brahma's charrie page to hand drawn ones. Looking at her new design I don't think I will have to change their new designs after all. And it is a BIG shame about the posts, but I suppose we will ahve to make do. What did you think of my version by the way.)

(Your version was awsome . But which one should we use?)

Dawn blocked out everything everyone else was saying, all she could thing about was her brother. "Nooooo! Nooooo!" She cried out in pitiful loud sobs. Filling the forest with her calls of sorrow, "Nooooo!" She could feel herself yell out once more. Her neck and face was covered with her brothers blood, "Why?! Not now...!" She cried out holding Trooper's body even closer.

Darla felt her silent cries get even louder, she walked over to Troopers body. Her tears dripped on his face as she looked down at him, she leaned over nuzzling his now cold face. She would never see his bright blue eyes again, or hear his funny laugh or hear him say her name. "Why did you leave us?" She whispered into his ear.

Trooper's bloody body lay on the ground, even though he was dead; there was a presence. A white silloute was there, but was not seen by the common wolf's eyes. The silloute was Trooper;his spirit. He looked sadly at his morning sisters. He reached out a pw too touch Dawn but that resulted in his paw going straight through her, he sighed. He let out a long whisper...hoping his sisters would hear him; "I will always be with you"

(I don't know, I can't really decide because yours was really good as well. I would feel bad choosing so I don't know what to do )

Jaka took a step back. Dawn's sobs had become almost hysterical and she was starting to scare him slightly. 'Dawn, it's ok, try to calm down' he said gently whilst trying to prise her and Trooper's body apart. He could understand her grief, this was her brother after all, but the others weren't so manic about it.

Shar lifted her head away as Dawn began to scream louder. Birds flew from nearby trees in fright and for a moment the sun was hidden by their terrified wings. She only just heard Jaka's words over the yells of her grief stricken sister but felt powerless to stop her sister. She side-stepped to Darla, nudging her to get her attention and saying 'do you think we should go, this is getting serious'.

Karba didn't move, the world moved around him with sickening speed. Twirling and swirling faster than he had ever gone before, the trees becoming a green blur that made his head spin. The sound of sobs and bird cries only added to his confusion, but through it all he could still see Trooper, lying, bleeding on the ground.

(I have an idea, lets use my version that you edited some parts. So that way both are writing are together)

Dawn sobbed and cried, her ears flicked as she heard a low whisper. "Trooper?" She asked looking down at him, he didn't move. But she knew she heard something...standing up the female looked up to the sky. "Goodbye...my brother...." She said a a tiny whine escaped her mouth. There was a cold and tight feeling in her chest, "When you left...you took my heart with you" She said in a whisper. She looked down at her black paws, which were red from Trooper's body. She walked over to a near by stream and dived uner. Letting the water wash away the blood and her tears.

Darla finished crying, she saw Dawn walked away. The young female sighed, then she had the urge to dig. She dug up a hole, a really deep one. Darla walked over to Trooper's body she drug him into the hole and waited for the others to get her message.

(Are we going to have Spice as well, or just Cleo/Ginger. It is a good idea, and if we have Ginger too then I could edit my big speaking part in the middle to fit around your storyline. And when Brahma comes in then could I have a bit more say in the story, so like I would type his bits and you would type Angel's, because we both know our charries better than anyone else.)

Shar helped Darla drag Trooper to the hole. It was good to bury him, it felt like it would help her remember him longer, although how she could forget him she didn't know. He was a very heavy wolf, something she hadn't realised while he had been alive, he had always been so light on his feet.

Karba slowly began to stop spinning. His world slowed to an almost standstill, but continued to tilt and sway as he moved. He wobbled towards Trooper's body, noticing that it had been moved, but had to sit down heavily to keep himself from falling over.

Jaka followed Dawn carefully, making sure she didn't start her hysterics again. He became a bit concerned as she wandered towards a river nearby. But when she threw herself in all Jaka could think about was that she was trying to kill herself. He let out a cry of worry and dived in after her, grabbing her scruff and trying to drag her to the surface.

(I think it would be a good idea to get rid of Spice and keep Cleo. Also, I want the fan-fic to seem as relastic as possible, so the part where Cleo(ginger) gets chased by wolves in the town makes no sense, so I wanna cut that out)

Dawn held her breath and looked around under water, after a few seconds she felt a sharp tug on her sruff and she found herself being pulled roughly to the surface. She turned to see it was Jaka, "What are you doing? I'm fine" She said shaking her fur so he would let go. She whinned, "Don't worry. I wasen't doing what you thought I was she said giving him a side glance.

Darla sighed, she peeked into the hole to see Trooper's body. She whinned then sighed. Kicking the dirt into the hole, covering his body forever. She let her tears hit the soil but she quickly shook her self to make them fly off her face.

(Mmm I thought that too, that's why I made her get attacked in the forest. But anyway I am going to take your version and just do a few more adjustments to it because I now have a head full of ideas )

Jaka didn't let Dawn finish. He hauled her to the bank and pushed her firmly away from the water. 'Don't scare me like that! I was worried about you and you're reaction to... well Trooper dieing, and then you went and threw yourself in the river. What were you thinking Dawn! Did he mean so much to you that you would throw your life away, without a second thought for the rest of your family' he snapped, worry written clearly on his face. He carried on nudging Dawn further away from the water and back towards the others.

Shar helped Darla fill in the hole, her face as blank as fresh snow on a field. She turned and sat beside her brother, focussing intently on keeping the tears from her eyes and her breathing steady. Karba didn't say a word, he didn't need to, just his company was enough for Shar.

(Sounds good)


Dawn stared up at Jaka, she gave almost a puppy dog eye glance then they filled with tears and she looked away. 'How could he think I would do that to myself' She thought as she walked away from him. Her heart was broken and now Jaka couldn't even trust her, she found a small patch of grass, she layed on it and cried softly.

writers block :[

(Sorry it is taking so long, I've been really busy)

Jaka felt his heart break at Dawn's look. He tried to speak but his throat was suddenly bone dry. As she began to walk away from him he just watched, wondering why he was letting her go. As Dawn disappeared into the forest Jaka managed to force himself to stand. I can't go and talk to her now, that will probably only make things worse. But I am NOT running away this time he thought with a fiery determination. He didn't know what else to do apart from meet back up with the others and wait for the right time to speak to Dawn.

Not even a bump...

NUDGE!

After a long cry, Dawn had returned to the others. "I want to leave" She said feeling selfish but she had to leave she couldn't bear to stay here any longer. Something nudged her, Dawn spun around to see Darla, her face seemed blank. "I want to leave too...." Darla sputtered out, this was the first time Darla had spoken since Trooper had passed on, Dawn nodded and walked over to Jaka, nuzzling his neck fur, she looked up at him, "I'm so sorry Jaka...can we leave now...I'm feeling slightly better" She said licking his cheek and giving his a sweet glance.

Darla walked over to Karba and Shar, first she nuzzled Karba then she nuzzled Shar. "We are ready to leave" She smiled ever so slightly, then sat down and looked over at Dawn and Jaka. "What are we gonna tell mom and dad..." She whispered.

(What birth order are the pups going to be in. I don't know who would be oldest, youngest etc)

'The truth, that's all we can tell them' Karba told Darla after nuzzling her gently in return. 'We will tell them how Trooper bravely risked his life to save all of us, what else could we tell them'. It felt strange to Karba to be speaking about Trooper as if he wasn't there any more. He isn't here though, and nothing is going to bring him back he growled in his head.

Jaka bent his head down to wrap it around Dawn as tightly as he could. He didn't want to ever let her go, not now and not ever. 'You don't have to be sorry...it was just me, I should be apologising' he whispered shakily into Dawn's ear. 'You scared me so much, I didn't know waht you were doing and...'. He trailed off, worried he was saying the wrong things that would only make her mad again.

Shar had been the only one talking the whole way through. Trooper had always felt like the leader to her, the older brother that always knew what he was doing. But he was gone now and that meant their small group didn't have a leader. 'Come on everyone' she said softly but trying to sound brighter than she felt, 'we should leave now in case the hunters and their dogs come back'.

(I'll make up a random order xD. This is from oldest to youngest)
Trooper->Karba->Shar->Darla->Dawn


Darla agreed with her brother Karba, “The truth” She repeated loudly, she looked over at the others “Let’s go” She said softly. She began to sniff the ground looking for the scent to their parents den. Dawn smiled slightly “I understand completely” She found her self kissing him then she looked up into his eyes, “I agree with Shar…let’s go before the humans return” She said walking over to Trooper’s grave. “I’ll miss you, Brother” She whispered before padding quickly to Darla’s side, she began to sniff the ground, “I think it’s this way” Dawn said walking slowly with her nose glued to the grass.