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"hi...." said charlotte to bella......
"c'mon angie....lets go" said lia to her sister "never,never,never,never...NEVER!!!" said angel
"*saw bella* hey there friends and....*saw charlotte* hey there.." said lia
"hi" said charlotte
"hey bella....where is tina....i saw her sad yesterday...but later she desapear" said lia
"eww...mud....mud...help" yelled jalia
"*singh* why i do have a dramatic sister" said angel
"sorry....jalia is a little dramatic" said lia

This is a message for all active L&TT roleplays.

Whether or not you have seen and/or read my PMs and RP Guide, it is obvious that you are not listening and understanding. Roleplays need plots and character biographies as a minimun. Also, the rules states that ALL posts must be four (4) sentences or two (2) lines long. This roleplay is breaking that rule, along with the lack of correct grammar, punctuation, spelling, and simple sentence/paragraph structure. This roleplay will be reported and locked if not improved within the week. This is my final warning and a sincere promise.

Thank you,

~ Black Rose

Bella ran at Sam. "What happened?" she asked him with a soft voice.

lone_wolf - You obviously have not been reading my messages. Two. Lines. How many times do I have to say this?

And the punctuation mistakes in these post need to be remedied. They are messy and hard to read.



This should be written as:

Bella ran at Sam. "What happened?" she asked him with a soft voice.



Sam moved his gaze to her. He wondered if he should tell her or not, analyzing the consequences. He decided to keep his thoughts to himself. "Nothing." He shook his head. "Nothing, Bella. Everything is all right," he said, moving his gaze back to the dark background.

I won't ignore these breaking of the rules, and you can't ignore me. ( And if you are wondering every one of your rp posts should be as long or longer than this short paragraph here. )

,,So....where is tina?,,
Lia looked at Bella a little conserned about Tina
,,don't tell me that you had a fight with her....,, said Lia....if bella was gonna attack her she was ready
(like this one black rose? i write good now?)

Grim - Your last post was acceptable compared to some of the other posts I've seen. At least it wasn't a three words sentence. Grammar and punctuation are tricky things to get perfect 100% of the time, but if you ever want someone to read over a post to check, I am always open to a PM.

fluttershyfan - The length is a lot better, yes, good job! The biggest thing seems to be punctuation.
- remember to use quotation marks ( " ) when a character is speaking
- capitalize the first word of every sentence and characters' names
- don't forget a period at the end of every sentence

IE. "So, where is Tina?" Lia looked at Bella, a little concerned about Tina. "Don't tell me that you had a fight with her," said Lia. If Bella was going to attack her, she was ready.

Bella looked disappointed at Lia.
,,I don't believe that you think that I'll attack you, Lia ...I became too monstrous, or what?,,
When Bella was ready to leave, she threw a last glance to Lia and then she said: ,,I don't know where Tina is ...maybe she is with her boyfriend ...Buster Jr, or something like that ...,,-then he looked at Sam and said:,,Please tell me if you will find out what happened to Kody ...,,
Bella ran away from that place.
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Black Rose:I'm so sorry! I promise that I'll be more careful next time!

"Stupid bella!!! how could you to this this to me!!."
Tina cried and looked at the sky
"you can't call me rat or that you will kill me!!! one day you will see that im not weak!!! one day!" yelled tina in the forest
(lone_wolf2011: if you dont know what happen in the page 104 in the comment 6 when bella gets angry)

At that moment, Bella was walking through the woods.She didn't knew that Tina was in that forest too.She hummed a song:
,,I don't care if the whole club is dead, Cus the party's in my head, the party's in my head!,,
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This is the song: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uk7X9dYDYcw

tina stared to sing a song too.
"Fate has been cruel and order unkind
How could you to did this to me?
I sit here and gaze into stillness alone."
(the song is here but i changed to tina's version...now is night in the story http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Hyj9_YJCMUw.)