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 Post subject: Re: Story Ideas and Brainstorming
PostPosted: Fri Apr 30, 2010 8:29 pm 
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Thanks, I'm still working on it and I have a further modifed version that plays up the triangle angle.

Episode 1:

-H4H, after a period of booming business, decide to go on a group vacation, (likely a scene would occure were Baloo talks Rabecca into it with Molly's help), going to an island resort. However, on the way there, the Sea Duck is nearly knocked out of the sky by a seemingly reckless pilot in full black.
-Not taking it personally, they arrive on the resort, only to discover that the manager is Sora, who Baloo is shocked to see, once again due to a falling out they had years ago. While at first she seems to still be mad, his attempts to make up, with Kit's help, begin to work.
-While Baloo attempts to make up with Sora, Rebecca comes across Griffith, who is apparently reformed, as well as seemingly working contently as the resort's groundskeeper. After a rather hostile encounter, mostly on Rebecca's part, Griffith appologizes for his past actions, even offering his paycheck to her to repay.
-Rebecca doesn't know what to make of it, but half heartedly forgives Griffith. Meanwhile, Baloo has dinner with Sora, sorting things out between each other, unknowing that the Black Pilot is watching their every move and reporting to an offscreen character.
-Sora, wanting to make up, offers Baloo a very well paying job as the tour plane pilot for the island, a job she presently does. Baloo, holding a possible romantic intrest in her, is having a hard time turning her down despite his want to remain with H4H.
-Baloo talks to Kit about the offer, who doesn't like the idea but accuses Baloo of having feelings for Sora, which he denies.
-Sora, both out of kindness for Baloo and trying to sway him, takes the crew up in the tour plane to show them the island, even letting him take over the controls.
-Rebecca gets annoyed at how the two are getting along, and is further annoyed when Sora reveals the offer, which she hadn't heard about.
-Rebecca, Sora, and Baloo argue about this but are interupted when the Black Pilot attacks them again. While he nearly takes them down in a simular way to Jarrett, Griffith uses one of the resort's tennis machines to distract him, letting them escape.
-Sora reveals the Black Pilot was banned from the resort's races for cheating and sense then had been terrorizing the tours. Baloo decides to help her, causing Rebecca to storm off in a huff.
-Baloo and Kit split up to try to find out more about the Black Pilot, unknowing that he's watching them. His employer praises his work in their 'con' earlier and tells him to move to the next part of their plan.
-Kit is kidnapped by a maskless Black Pilot whose face the audence doesn't see but Kit reconizes. When Baloo returns to meet up with Kit, he finds him missing. He goes looking for him, only to be kidnapped himself by the Black Pilot. With the two chained up, he reveals himself as Jarrett, who is heavily scarred from the explosion before. He reveals that he and his 'employer' have big plans in store.
-Episode ends with an unseen figure approaching Rebecca and Molly's room.

Episode 2

-Griffith knocks on Rebecca's door and once again apologizes, wanting to come in and talk to her. Rebecca is suspescious, but let's him in but shortly there after, Griffith pulls a gun on Rebecca and reverts back to his 'evil' look once again. He has the other groundsworkers, who are really hired henchmen for Griffith. He has them take Molly and tells Rebecca that if she doesn't pay an extremely large sum of money to get her back, 'something unpleasent will happen to the girl' and leaves.
-As Rebecca tries to come up with the money, Griffith goes to Jarrett, revealing his plan to Baloo and Kit, to make Rebecca have no choice but to sell H4H to meet the ransom. Baloo asks if he plans to kill them now, but Griffith tells him he needs him alive as 'collateral', in case Rebecca get's enough money to pay the ransom for Molly without selling H4H.
-Rebecca realizes the only way to pay the ransom would be to sell H4H but Sora convinces her of another idea, feeling rather guilty for the earlier arguement on the plane. Sora gives Rebecca the money for Molly's ransom, due to owning the resort she's wealthy, and while Griffith is occupide with the money exchange, she sneaks into Griffith's hideout to free Molly, aware Griffith probably wouldn't play fair.
-After Griffith leaves, Baloo explains to Kit that he and Sora used to be partners in a bush plane business years ago but Baloo made a bad choice and overloaded Sora's plane, causing her to crash and be hospitalized. Sora was angry and Baloo blaimed himself, and they hadn't spoke until he met her again. This scene would alternate with Sora telling the same story to Rebecca on the way there, explaining she felt very guilty afterwards for being so angry with Baloo.
-While the plan happens, Sora finds and frees Baloo and Kit and Molly manages to get away from the thugs herself ('Danger woman' again, since that is a recurring theme with Molly if memory serves) and all of them manage to sucessfully escape, rescuing Rebecca in the process.
-Fed up with them, Griffith sends Jarrett and his henchmen to kill Baloo and the others as they try to escape in the Sea Duck. Due to the danger, Rebecca and Molly remain on the ground while Baloo, Kit, and Sora try to stop Jarrett and the menions, Sora using the resorts tourplane (she, like Baloo, was once a cargo plane pilot, that's how they met originally), .
-The two planes manage to trick Jarrett into taking out his other planes and engage him in a dogfight, but just when it seems they'll take down Jarrett, Griffith catches Molly and Rebecca and holds them at gunpoint at his hideout, telling Baloo to let the Sea Duck be destroyed or he'll kill them, refering to that ether way he'll have his revenge. However, Molly and Rebecca manage to escape Griffith at the last second thanks to a misfire by Jarrett (caused by his recklessness).
-Sora and Baloo manage to trick Jarrett into disabling his own plane, which crashing into Griffith's hideout, seemingly killing them both when it explodes, lighting the building on fire.
-The next day, the police reveal that no sign of Griffith or Jarrett but both are presumed dead. Sora offers H4H a free stay at the resort to make up for all the trouble, but they decline, deciding they miss Cape Suzette and want to head home. She also offers Baloo his position one last time, but he turns her down and she understands how much he cares for H4H. Sora says goodbye to Baloo (somewhat suggesting a romantic hope to see him again), which angers Rebecca as the episode ends.

That better? I'd also like Sora to maybe return in future episodes if possible.

As for the idea, sounds good but needs more devolpement.


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 Post subject: Re: Story Ideas and Brainstorming
PostPosted: Sun May 02, 2010 10:41 pm 
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Lookin' good so far! About bringing Sora back in future episodes, yeah, that's a possibility. As long as she doesn't take too much screen time away from the main H4H gang.

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PostPosted: Mon May 03, 2010 4:20 am 
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Thanks. Think I've got enough to make a thread to discuss this storyarch?

As for Sora, I was thinking she may be useful for exploring Baloo's history.


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PostPosted: Sat May 08, 2010 12:18 am 
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Godzillawolf wrote:
Thanks. Think I've got enough to make a thread to discuss this storyarch?

It looks like it to me, so sure you can make a thread for it. Of course, I won't be able to discuss it in earnest until the stories already queued are finished, or at least close to being finished. (If I try to do too much at once, my buffer might overflow! :shock: ) But don't let that stop you from developing the story further!

Also, @everyone:

I need to bump my post from Fri Apr 30, 2010 4:24 pm on the first page of this thread to try to get an answer to give JerRocks2day someday soon. Thanks!

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PostPosted: Sun May 09, 2010 8:21 am 
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I thought that we were trying to not add new characters to the VS series. Although I do like the idea of the "Golden Goose" adaption. Should make for a good fight between Baloo and Becky.

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Hmm, I forgot about this post and I'm the one that bumped it... :roll: :P Well, that's the kind of month it's been.

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I thought that we were trying to not add new characters to the VS series. Although I do like the idea of the "Golden Goose" adaption. Should make for a good fight between Baloo and Becky.


Yeah, we are trying to avoid adding new character not in the original show, so I'm definitely leaning toward "no" on this one. If Jymn and Mark wanted to do an adaptation, that's one thing, but I just wouldn't feel right about doing it myself. We can always write an original episode that has a good Baloo/Becky fight.

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Just a thought, would it possible for Griffith to become a more major reccuring villain as a personal nemesis of Rebecca herself? Baloo's got quite a few nemsisies, but Rebecca, to my knowledge, doesn't really have a personal nemesis. I mean Khan may be out to drive H4H out of business at times but at least he has some honor and respect for them and isn't a personal enemy.


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PostPosted: Fri Mar 11, 2011 1:56 am 
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This may be weird but how about a episode that's basically Molly's dream
The dream will be Martians left behind a strange ray gun
-Kit discovers the mystrious ray gun
- Kit accidently pulls trigger at Rebecca
- Ray gun regresses Rebecca (physically) to her daughter's age with her clothes not loose, oversized and a tad baggy
- Becky doesn't mind
- Molly surprised at Rebecca's sudden regression
- Molly and regressed Becky plays

um, that's all i got
you're welcome to use it and insert some of your own material for it if you like


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