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Jeff was so sucked into the deep passion of the kiss that he realized, it felt better than he had thought it would have. He pulled away softly and stared into Jake's deep, ocean blue eyes, wondering if there would be anymore. Jake smiled warmly at him aand pulled him back down to his chest and held him, carresing his ear. Jeff tried not to murr and make a puppy out of himself. But he couldn't help it.

"Great way to start off the morning, huh?" Jake joked. He grinned as Jeff looked up, blushing. His cheeks were bright red with immberassment. Jake gave him another peck on the cheek, and went back to holding Jeff close. They seemed almost conjoined, considering how close they had gotten. "Happy birthday..." Jake Whispered.

"Thanks....." Jeff replied. His voice creaked. He was obviously in need of something to drink.

This story has lost its interest for many of my viewers so I will stop here.....

No! It was soo good!

no dont stop my comp's been actin up i hadda reinstall windows its annoying when it crashes but i lost everything! I just found this site again you can keepon postin please!

Oh Okay...

Jason watched from the hallway. He smirked at the two obviously confused lovers. He could always sense some kind of strong connection between Jake and Jeff. It was something he was hoping wouldn't happen. It made him feel bad for feeling that way. But he wanted that special bond to be between himself and Jeff. Jeff was the only one who had shown him love and affection. He felt jealous, somehow, of Jake. How could he get that attention from Jeff? How could he make Jeff fall so easily for him. Jason jst smiled and watched the two hold each other close. He couldn't stop two determined lovers from doing what they felt was right.

what happens next?

Just This.
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Jeff Snuggled closer to Jake. He liked being held in those strong, loving arms. It was so snug. The warm feeling it gave him sent his mind reeling. He hadn't felt this good since the day that he met Jason.

He remembered it like it was yesterday. His parents had left him two days before. He had been wandering the city for anyone who knew him and would be willing to take him in. But none would take in the poor soul, either because they didn't have room for him or they just couldn't. no explination given, they simply couldn't. Jeff Had run out of options, he simply sat down on the corner of the apartment complex and waited for nothing. he was hoping that his parents would come back, but they never did. and then Came the fateful day that he met jason

Thunder pounded in the gray sky. The small fox yelped with every loud clap of thunder. he felt the harsh rain slam against his feeble body. Jeff had gone almost three days without eating. He was barely alive, and sickness was beggining to settle in. Things lookd grim.

Jeff felt weary. He could feel his body begin to weaken. Was this the end? Was all of his pain going to be over now? Jeff whimpered as he slumped foreward, onto his belly. Tears ran down his face. The world would be better off without him. His vision began to blur, but in the distance he could see an orange figure speeding toward him. Jeff knew that, like everyone else, the furson would simply pass him by and pay no mind. Jeff felt his last bit of conciousness slip away from him. Everything went pitch black.

Jason Had spotted a small, red orange figure from a Distance. He could feel in his gut immediatly that something was wrong. He had taken a full sprint towards the figure. As he got closer, a rock settled in his stomach. It was a fox, young, thin and pale, now unconcious. He gasped and slowly Took the fox in his arms. He could feel the fox trembling in his arms as his small chest rose and fell weakly. He whispered softly into the fox ear, holding him tight as he did so. "Just hold on little buddy...I'll get you some help,".

At that moment Jeff didn't know if it was merely a dream, but he could hear a soft voice. It was strong and gentle at the same time, but it was filled with worry and concern.


After that day, Jason had taken Jeff in as his own. He paid for the medicine needed, paid for the adoption paper and evyerthing. Jeff had been lucky, very lucky to meet someone like Jason. And now, someone like Jake.
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I Just wanted to clear some obscurity in Jeff's past. Jake will be next!

wow this really good poor kit hadda terrible past glade he ound jason

Time for some more romance!
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Jake allowed the fox snuggle closer to him. There was nothing better than being with that one special person. He could feel a certain liberation, a new feeling that opened his eyes and made him feel completely at ease. He looked down at the clam fox, he was so cute! Jake held him more firmly, not to the point of squeezing him but just enough so that their bodies almost melted together. Jeff's fur was so soft, jake was hoping that his own fur would be just as comforting. He became nervous now, what if jeff didn't like him in that sense what if he too realized that their ages could be a bit of a problem. Then it hit him, what if Jason didn;t like the idea of them being together, what he rejected it and never wanted to see jeff with him again!

'I'm thinking way too far ahead' Jake thought. 'I don't even know if Jeff is okay with this'. All he could do was hold the fox until.....well, he didn't want to think of letting the fox go...not yet.

Jeff's muzzle plowed into jake's snowey white chest. It was so soft, so defined. He was loving this so much. He never thought that he would experience anything like this before. Jeff began to wonder about how this would turn out. 'What if he thinks I'm too young, or maybe I'm not his type or...' his mind went on and on reeling. But the smell and feel of Jake helped him to get rid of those thoughts. He should think more of what was happening now. It was all in due time.

Minutes seemed like hours, the sun was still just barely rising. this was the begining of a perfect day.

sweet

I don't normally come on this section to read stuff in particular, but this is actually quite interesting. Your ideas seem all fleshed out, now try moving your plot along a little; it's time to introduce a central conflict before you loose your readers with the small subplots. Aside from that, there are also a few erroneous grammatical and spelling errors I needn't remind you to go back and fix on your revision stage.

Keep up the work!!

Well uts has been a long time since I last came to this page. I have a few fresh ideas that I would like to add to keep the story moving. Sorry for the long wait... for all of you who have actually been keeping up with the story. And thank you for the tremendous feedback on how to make the story better! ^^

Time to get this moving!

The tall, muscular wolf jogged along. It was early and warm, perfect for his morning jog. His dark, grey coat shimmered in the morning sun. He wore a pair of tight running shorts and a blue underarmor shirt, exposing his gorgeously defined body.

Along the way he passed a few female bunnies who were awed by his tremendous build, they gawked and blew kisses. Owen just winked as he continued his morning jog, the girls giggles in reply. Owen wasn;t the slightest interested in the females, he couldn't stop thinking about that one fox. 'What was his name...Oh God what was his name...' he thought. His mind wandered back to his experience in the locker room. Seeing the fox, his smooth, red orange fur with a white underbelly. The fox color was creamy and soothing. Owen couldn't stop thinking about what he had seen that day. Then again what hadn't he seen, it was an hour after school had ended and the locker rooms were completely empty. Save for the fox and Owen, who's presence had remained undeteced. It made him feel slightly guilty, just hiding behind the door watching the fox's every move, but he wasn't completely sorry. Just because he felt guilty didn;t mean that he necessarily regreted doing it. Maybe it was time he sought out the fox and get to know him a little better. Just a little.
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Well This isn't all I came up with. But I hope you guys can get the foreshadow in this section I feel that I defined it pretty well, but any critiquing is welcome.