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Post subject: Re: SPLIT Posted: Mon Sep 10, 2007 9:32 pm |
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Part Five... Enjoy.
Jenna was walking along the beach at dusk to get some fresh air before going to sleep. She was about to turn back and head home, when she suddenly spotted Dingo lying down on his back completely still. She then ran towards her son, she looked very concerned. “Dingo, are you okay honey?” she asked. “Oh... Hi mom... would you be so kind and drag me home.” Said Dingo. “What on earth did you do?” “I threw my back out... I can’t get up” he replied in agony. “Oh my goodness, How?” she asked. “I was trying to catch my... you know what? I don’t wanna talk about it; it’s a rather dull story anyhow.” “Well I’m not dragging you back to the house... I’m gonna roll you over and hit on your back hard... it might hurt a little sweet heart” she said whilst rolling him onto his side. “Umm mom, I’m not sure that’s a... Arrgghhhhh!” howled Dingo. His back cracked and he was able to move again... “Owww... thanks mom. “Your welcome sweetie... Have you seen your Father?” “Actually, yeah. This morning, why?” “He was supposed to meet me for lunch, he never showed up” she explained. Dingo began to giggle; Jenna looked puzzled at her son’s reaction. “What’s so funny?” she asked. “He must have really taken my advice on board, good for him and yay me for the sound advice” he smiled. “What advice?” she now said extremely worried, she knew this wasn’t Dingo’s strong point. “I told him to go enjoy himself, to forget about the whys and the hows and the...” Jenna looked very annoyed and Dingo suddenly became very uneasy. “Did I do wrong?” he asked lightly. “You told him to go off and enjoy himself after he’d suffered a traumatic event, something that needs to be answered first” “Don’t you think you’re overreacting...?” “Don’t you overreact me young man, it’s not just his physical appearance that’s undergone a dramatic change... you must have realised his personality is... well different too. What if this change starts to affect his mind even more?” “Oh come on mom, he’s still Balto... that’s all what matters. You love him and I love him, it shouldn’t make a difference. And you’re right, he has changed I’ve never seen happier in his life. I mean what’s the worse that could happen...”
On the other side of town there was the sound of laughter as Balto, Star, Kaltag and Nikki had just had an extremely fun day causing mischief around Nome... and getting away with since the old Balto wasn’t there as a scapegoat. The four of them where about to head off to Balto’s boat home, to do that they had to go through a dark alley. “I’ve had such fun today guys, it’s been a blast!” said Balto excitedly. “It sure has been fun today” said Kaltag, “I mean that trick you played on the butcher that was just fantastic, wonderful it was...” “REALLY REALLY INSPIRED!” interrupted Nikki. Kaltag than hit him over the head, Nikki fell unconscious. “It was nothing, it was something Boris and I tried a while back. Works even better looking like this” he said Balto with no shame. “I take it you like being this way then?” asked Star. “Like it? It’s wonderful! No it’s better than wonderful, it’s... you know I can’t even describe it in words” said Balto. “Well keep it up big guy; we’re all in favour of this change. Haven’t had this much fin in like... ever” said Kaltag. Suddenly a deep growl was heard coming from the dark end of the ally. The happy mood changed in an instant to fear and dread. A large figure was walking towards them from the shadows and this ‘shadow’ began to speak. “Well well well if it isn’t the half-bree... oh that’s right I forgot you got rid of you’re wolf side didn’t you. Just as well, it’s gonna make it that little bit easier to kill you...” The figure started to come into the light; it was a large black wolf... Niju. Kaltag and Star began to back away with fear, Nikki was still lying unconscious, while Balto stood his ground. “Niju...” “What’s the matter, no hug?” said Niju sarcastically. “What do you want?” asked Balto. Niju circled around Balto. Although he had stood his ground Balto felt the fear in extremes, he wasn’t accustomed to it, a few days back Niju looked smaller but now, he seemed a whole lot bigger. “Just one thing, satisfaction... the satisfaction of watching you die slowly at my hand... is that fear I see in your eyes? You look even more worthless than before” said Niju. Balto turned to Kaltag and Star. “Guys run for it!” shouted Balto. “What about you?!” replied Star. “JUST GO! I’ll take care of it!” Star and Kaltag started to drag Nikki away as fast as they could, pretty soon it was just Niju and Balto alone in the alley. “Oh how heroic of you... look at you, you’re starting to shake. I’ll tell you what, I’ll give you a ten second head start... run... I SAID RUN!” Balto then charged at Niju knocking him to the ground. But Niju had the upper hand, he flipped Balto over with just one kick. Balto went to hit back but was then bitten by Niju on the back of the neck and then thrown at a solid brick wall. Balto staggered up and realised his mouth was bleeding, he then saw Niju simply laughing at him. Balto’s fear had now taken over and began to limp away as fast as he could out of the town and into the wild. Niju just watched and began to count to ten in a joking manner.... “One, two, three, four... ah forget it! Coming ready or not!” Niju then ran after Balto...
To be continued...
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Post subject: Re: SPLIT Posted: Tue Sep 11, 2007 5:13 pm |
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LOL, I can't believe what happened to Dingo!
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Post subject: Re: SPLIT Posted: Tue Sep 11, 2007 10:43 pm |
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Part Six... again enjoy.
The sky was as dark as it was going to get over the woods, the air stank of fear. Niju was following Balto’s sent; he was taking his time in a very leisurely manner. As he entered the woods he found some blood spots on a rock, he simply smiled at the thrill of the chase. Niju sniffed the air... “I have you’re sent locked in Husky dog, I could track you for miles if I had to... you used to be able to do that, not anymore though” There was just silence for a few moments... not a sound... then... “Why did you really come back? Simple vengeance doesn’t strike me as you’re style... it’s more than that.” Said Balto, who was nowhere to be seen. “Just come out Balto, I’ll make it quick it won’t hurt a bit... well not too much anyway” “You’re afraid... you’re afraid just like me aren’t you. You where scared of change and now you’re just scared in general.” “It’s not gonna work...” “You’re right...maybe losing my wolf half has made me weak, less than what I was... but it’s a whole lot better than being what you are... a coward who can’t cope with change even if it’s for the better” said Balto. Niju was starting to shake with anger... “You call me the coward! You’re the one who’s hiding!” shouted Niju, who was about to lose control over everything. Then suddenly, Balto landed on him from a branch of a tree and Niju fell to the floor, before he could compose himself Balto hit him across the face. Niju was dazed on the floor, Balto then began to limp off again as fast as he could deeper into the woods. After a few moments Niju composed himself and went in pursuit. Balto was hurt badly and was frightened for his life, he’d been frightened before but never like this, he was afraid that he would die... something that never crossed his mind even when he was risking his life to get the serum to Nome. Balto Limped around the back of a large boulder and leaned against it in order to hide again, knowing that he was too injured to win in a straight fight. “That hurt. Maybe you haven’t completely lost the wild in you...” said Niju. Balto found his choice of word odd, even in this situation. “The wild? You mean my wolf half?” asked Balto. “You shouldn’t have gone near that cave... you would have at least stood a chance.” “You’ve been following me... do you know what happened to me?” “Of course I do...” said Niju. Then it went quiet, too quiet. Balto crept slowly to see around the boulder, but Niju wasn’t to be seen. He then crept back and turned only to see a set of teeth and a paw hitting him on the face... “... I’m just not gonna tell you” he finished off as Balto was punched down. Balto was now in real trouble; he tried to crawl away but was then pinned to the floor. “Now who is this? Who is this? I came here to fight Balto, the hero of sicken Nome, the famous wolf dog who always saves the day, who never used to be afraid of standing up to a whole pack of wolves, let alone just one. I must say I’m very disappointed, in you... maybe I should have stopped you entering that cave, and after all I wouldn’t want her to keep me imprisoned forever.” Niju was about to strike a final blow at Balto to finish him off, in a last ditch effort Balto spat bloody saliva in his eye and Niju jolted back with disgust. Balto made one final dash into the woods, or at least as fast as he could. He limped and limped and then stopped abruptly as he ran into a cliff that was shrouded by trees... there was nowhere left to run... Balto had to think fast, his final chance would have to happen here... Moments later Niju came to the cliff where Balto’s sent trail had ended, he looked over the edge. Niju began to laugh a little... “You jumped? Well that’s not fair...” said Niju. Niju was about to walk away thinking that he had won... “Guess again!” shouted a voice. Balto was holding onto a thick tree branch, which he then let go. The branch whacked Niju across the body that knocked back over the cliff... Balto then approached to the cliff edge to find Niju trying to hold onto the edge, but he was slipping. Part of Balto wanted him to drop to his death, while the other part... well who knows it had gone. But Balto needed answers... “I can help you up! But I need answers and I want them now! What happened to me?! What did you mean by ‘the wild’? And who is ‘she’, is this ‘she’ responsible for this...? ANSWER ME!!” he demanded. But Niju would not answer... he simply smiled... and let go of the cliff side. Niju was dead as soon as he hit the bottom. Balto then lay down on the floor with despair, his face and body covered in cuts and bruises. He just lay there, on the grass... completely motion-less.
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Post subject: Re: SPLIT Posted: Wed Sep 12, 2007 4:21 am |
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Part Seven... (Italics are a dream sequence)
Balto was now back at the boat lying under his blanket and staring into space. He could hear the voices of Jenna, Boris and Dingo talking outside. He was just listening to what they had to say. “Boris is he alright?” asked Dingo. “He just needs some rest... he has been beat up pretty badly, but he’ll recover in time. Well his physical injuries... his pride may take a lot longer.” Said Boris. “I’m gonna talk to him” said Dingo. “No” interrupted Jenna “He doesn’t want to see anyone, at least not yet.” “It’s best we leave him for tonight, see how he feels tomorrow” said Boris. “Oh come on! We can’t just leave him like this, he needs to know that we’re there for him... it’s dad for crying out loud, how can I just stand by and do nothing?” said Dingo. “I love him too Dingo and I’ve known him a lot longer, if he wants to be left alone then that’s what we should do” replied Jenna. Balto then turned onto his side and closed his eyes for a moment, but opened them slightly more when he still heard Dingo talking. “I always used to think that nothing could beat dad, like he was indestructible you know, maybe you where right mom. Maybe whatever happened did change him in more ways than one.” A tear then dropped from Balto’s eye, he had now sunk to an all time low. What he had always dreamed of had now become something horrible, he hated who he had become, he soon drifted off to sleep.
Balto woke up back on the icy plain, his wounds where still showing here. He then staggered forward to take a look around, again like before it was all silent. He walked on and on for what seemed like hours, still there was nothing. He was about to give up when he noticed a shadow walking towards him, in the shape of a wolf. “Just get it over with alright! Kill me!” shouted Balto. “Why would want to do that?” said a friendly and familiar voice. The shadow came into focus, much to Balto’s surprise it was Nava. “Nava?” Nava stood in front of Balto and waved his paw, suddenly Balto’s wounds began to heal quickly, until they disappeared completely. “Now now Balto haven’t we been careless, losing your wolf side and getting cut up like this in the space of two days. Certainly a change from your previous track record” “Yeah...” said Balto looking at himself, “That’s a neat trick” “It’s just for the dream, you’ll still be in pain when you wake up” “What are you doing here?”Asked Balto. “When one of my own fellow wolves is in trouble, I like to help out and yes I can see what you look like... you’re still one of us and always will be.” Explained Nava. “So... I take it you know what happened too, seems like everyone I’ve met knows the details... I’m expecting Steele to show up any minute now threatening to kill me and claiming he knows all... or did he already do that before?” Balto sat down, looking at his reflection on the ice floor. “You don’t like what you see?” Asked Nava. “I assumed I would... I’d always hated being, half wolf... no offence. I’m gonna tell you something, something I’ve never even told Jenna in detail. When I was a pup I briefly lived with my Father in the village of Unalakleet, a pure bred Husky Sled dog, a champion by all rights. I don’t know how but he just knew I was his son, same eyes I suppose... heck now I’m a spitting image. He didn’t want to take me in but he kinda felt obligated, I was over the moon that I finally had some family in my life. I wasn’t the easiest kid to care for, always getting into trouble, into fights with other kids... the name calling soon started after that. My dad just couldn’t cope, he was getting his own fair share of cruel names for being with my mother... so one day he took me out of the village and told me I had to go... he said some real nasty things to me, told me to get lost. I hated him for a while, but mostly I hated myself for being what I was and I knew no one would accept me as a wolf, so I tried to be the best Husky dog there was. I remember wishing so hard that the wolf in me would go away forever... and now that it has... I’ve become less, Niju never frightened me when I first met him, and I’ve never been so frightened and weak in my life.” Said Balto. Nava then sat down next to Balto. “I want to be like I was before, I want the wolf in me to come back... I need him. Otherwise I’m incomplete.” Continued Balto. “What happened to me Nava?”. Nava then began to circle Balto. “Her name is Shadow. A wolf shaman like me who lives in the cave you found. She is known as the keeper of the wild, usually only wild animals, those that have not been tamed by man can enter her presence and those she usually keeps forever. She’s twisted and evil. Her ‘will’ reaches out from that cave and she lures her victims in, she traps the poor souls for her own amusement. But you being only half, she had to extract that half from you... and throw what was left away.” Nava explained. “How do I get it back?” asked Balto. “You’ll have to walk into the cave, you being a full husky she won’t like that. In order to get back someone you know who she has trapped or in your case ‘you’, you’ll have to take the trials... challenges set by her and under her conditions.” Continued Nava. “Well... what am I waiting for?” said Balto Balto began to walk away from Nava. “Balto. Don’t accept this likely, very few have survived her challenges. She won’t hesitate to kill you.” Said Nava. “And I won’t hesitate to do what is necessary... I’m ready” said Balto.
Things suddenly went black... the dream was over.
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Post subject: Re: SPLIT Posted: Thu Sep 13, 2007 5:16 pm |
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Part Eight
Dingo decided to sneak into the boat as he was too worried about his father’s well being. He made sure that neither his mother nor Boris where around before he entered. He walked in quietly in case his father was asleep, however when he entered all he found was his father’s blanket on the floor. Dingo looked worried and began to pace up and down the deck, he then stood still for a moment and began to think what to do. He looked back towards the blanket and then walked towards it; Dingo then began to sniff the blanket... shortly after that he closed his eyes and began to concentrate for a few moments. Dingo then exited the boat and started to walk on towards the forest.
Balto was walking back to the cave as quick as he could; he was still in a lot of physical pain but was ignoring it because he knew what had to be done. But as he was walking he felt like he was being watched... he then stood still for a moment and turned around to see Dingo standing there behind him. Balto was surprised to see his son standing there but could only say one thing to him. “Go home son.” Said Balto, but Dingo just stood there. “Go home right now I mean it!” “I’m coming with you Dad...”replied Dingo. “Son this is no time for...” “I’m coming with you Dad!” interrupted Dingo “Your hurt and extremely tired I’m not letting you do whatever it is you’re about to do alone” he continued. “Dingo...” “No buts Dad! I mean it this time!” Balto knew his son would not abandon him, there was nothing he could do but smile. “I don’t understand, how did you find me?” asked Balto. “Well... let’s just say Aleu wasn’t the only one to inherit some wolf traits. It’s just that mine don’t show on the outside.” Explained Dingo. Dingo and Balto began to walk together to the cave. Balto then asked... “How long have you been able to track?” “Ever since I was puppy... Aleu and I used to make a game of it, Kodiak would go and hide somewhere in town and we’d track him until we found him, its how we practised. Didn’t think I would ever use it again.” “Why haven’t you mentioned this before?” asked Balto. “I dunno... I figured you wouldn’t want to know, you’ve never been very pro-wolf in the past, didn’t think you would approve... to be honest as I got a bit older, I’m not sure I approved.” Balto then stopped in front of Dingo. “Of course I would have approved, it’s a good survival technique for one thing. If there’s one thing I’ve learned, ever since this happened, is that you should never be ashamed about who you are... or in my case who you where.” “Dad what is this all about? Why are you out here?” Balto turned away and looked up to the sky... “A friend... well at least I think he is anyway... told me how to get my wild back...” Dingo looked slightly frightened...? “Say what...? Did you hit your head or something?” “Come on, I’ll explain on the way.” Said Balto walking away. Dingo stood there for a moment and replied... “Oh no... I’m gonna pull my back again aren’t I?”
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Post subject: Re: SPLIT Posted: Thu Sep 13, 2007 8:36 pm |
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Part Nine...
The mid-night sun was once more in the sky as it was when Balto first came to the cave. Balto and Dingo came to the beach and saw the hole of blackness that was dug into the rock. Balto felt nothing from it, like it just wasn’t there. “It’s different... I don’t feel anything anymore” said Balto. There was no reply from Dingo; he turned to look at his son to see him staring in an almost hypnotic way at the cave. “Dingo...?” There was still no response; Dingo could hear whispers in his head, like Balto did. Dingo began to move closer. Balto then realised, Dingo was one quarter wolf and could be drawn into the cave by the shaman named Shadow. Balto then stood in front of Dingo and grabbed hold of him, he was still in a trance. “Dingo!” shouted Balto, he then slapped his son on the face “Snap out of it” Dingo reacted, in pain of course, and had snapped out of the trance. “Owww! What... Wh... What happened? I thought I heard... where you whispering to me just now?” “Your part wolf, she was trying to draw you in. Stay here...” Balto walked off to the cave, determined to get back what was rightfully his. Dingo just stood there. “Yeah sure I’ll...” the whispering then reappeared in Dingo’s head “... stay...” Balto walked into the cave and into that darkness, he couldn’t see where he was going, the passage started to get narrower and narrower. He was about to turn back but then saw a small light ahead and the passage began to widen again. He then came to what appeared to be a large chamber with a purple light illuminating the room slightly. Suddenly he felt a tap on his shoulder, but turned to find no one was there, and again another tap on his shoulder and no one there when he turned. ‘Okay that was creepy’ he thought to himself. A figure appeared in the light, Balto reacted... “You! Come out! You have something that belongs to me!” shouted Balto. The figure then got closer and closer and went into the light for Balto to see. He couldn’t believe what he was seeing, it was impossible... “...Dad...?” said Balto. “Hello son, long time no see. My haven’t you grown.” “This is impossible.” “I’ve heard all about you, being the local hero. Not to mention the lead dog on a sled team. That’s quite a feather in your cap son.” “I don’t understand... What are you doing here?” “I wanna make up for lost time, get back the years I should have spent with you... I love you son” Balto shed a tear as he was staring at what appeared to be his father, Ranger. Who looked like an older version of how Balto looked in his pure Husky form. They even had the same eyes. “Come on, why don’t we go for a walk. You can tell me all about Jenna and my grandchildren, I’d really like to meet them.” It then occurred to Balto, that something really wasn’t right. “Sure Dad... in fact my son... ‘Steele’ is waiting outside the cave, let’s go talk to him dad.” “Ahhh Steele, I’ve heard so much about him.” “And Kaltag, don’t forget little Kaltag” “Of course little Kaltag” “Who are you!” “What do you mean son?” “Stop it! This is some lame trick to get me to leave! The hero stories, of course you may know about them... but how would you know about Jenna or my kids for that matter?” “Son... I” “I’ll give you one chance, what’s my daughters name...? Huh! WHAT IS HER NAME!” Balto’s father then vanished from the chamber. “Go home lower being. You don’t belong here” whispered a female voice. “I want what belongs to me” said Balto. “I know who you are... he belongs to me now, so go home lower being before I do something un-kind” “No! I’m not leaving without him, he’s a part of me. I’ll challenge you for him if that’s what you want!” “Oh I like challenges... particularly from males, their hearts and souls break so easily. Very well lower being, you wish for your true self back. But the stakes have to be high...” “You mean my life if I loose” “If you loose you’ll die anyway, but the stakes have to be much higher... so high that you’ll have to fight a thousand times harder... Ahhh perfect. Come in child...” Balto looks towards the passage he entered through, to see Dingo in a trance just standing there. “NO! YOU CAN’T NOT HIM!” shouted Balto. “THOSE ARE MY CONDITIONS LOWER BEING! The challenge has been made! If you should win, you become what you where once again and you and the child can go... but if you should loose... not only will you die, but your son will be mine forever... eternal torment... worse than death for him.” “I SAID NO!” shouted Balto again. Suddenly Dingo began to choke, he couldn’t breathe. Balto ran towards him but couldn’t do anything to help him. Balto was now panicking... “STOP! STOP THIS NOW!” There was no answer, Dingo then fell to the floor and was starting to loose consciousness. “ALRIGHT! ALRIGHT! I accept the terms!” Dingo was now able to breathe again, but was still unconscious. “Very well lower being, shall we begin...?” said Shadow, who had now materialised right in front of Balto...
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Post subject: Re: SPLIT Posted: Fri Sep 14, 2007 11:17 am |
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breeze starbuck wrote: WOW! That's all I have to say after reading this last bit! You are an excellent writer! I love how you made Dingo have a larger role, and I think your idea about the cave is awesome! Nice job! I can't wait to read your next parts!  Thank you for the kind words  I've always intended to have Dingo in this story, Balto II had a lot of Aleu and Balto III had a lot of Kodiak... but poor old Dingo doesn't get much. I've tried to make him different from Aleu and Kodiak, perhaps a little more interesting as a character. One thing is certain, I really like writing dailogue for him, so much that I'm doing a fan-fic purely about him after I've finished SPLIT.
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Post subject: Re: SPLIT Posted: Fri Sep 14, 2007 9:41 pm |
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Chickawaii*canine wrote: Question: Is the eternal torment gonna be making Dingo chase his tail and throw his back out, but never be able to catch it? XD (THAT would be funny)  lol alas... no 
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Post subject: Re: SPLIT Posted: Fri Sep 14, 2007 9:45 pm |
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Awww... I was sure I got it this time. 
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