Couper however, was not as fortuante. She was able to feel every drop of rain as it hit her, and with the negative bounus of her ingured leg, she was in no better situation as she was in the lab.Corection, she was in a worse situation here. A hard, heavy raidrop landed on her wound, opening it, and allowing her blood to cover the streams again. Eventually the blood and rain got to her, and she fainted in the river. Strangley, she thought she saw he ex-best friend Luid running towards her.
She woke up. Her indigo eyes scanned the small space she was in. It was dark and musty, and cobwebs hung from the roof of the den. Coupers nose crinkled at the smell, and at the cobwebs. She had never been much of a fan of spiders, big or small. Looking at the entrance, she saw the transparent fawn identical to Luid. Perhaps...
She scuffled around, looking for food. The fawn turned and smiled. He was happy to see his friend awake. Couper's eyes were also healing,as well as her leg, although her left eye would be a bother.
" Couper it's me" Luid smiled, waiting for his friend to speak. But the sheeoat had not used her voice for weeks now, and it had all but gone. More to the point, she was mute, and now unable to speak. She swallowed the lump in her throat. Her friend was back, dead, but back. She smiled, her being a mute would have to take care of it's self. Luid realized she was mute. Now she would have to have help from better deer, ones who would know what to do.
" Come with me, we'll find some other deer that can help" By the next week, the journey seemed pointless. No deer were willing to take in a strange muted mutant and a ghost. Couper and Luid decided just to be travellers. But the meeting with some other travellers gave them two last potential herds. At night, in the part of the forest they were in, every night the sky was lit up by thousands of bright stars.
" There beautiful arn't they!" A happy voice came from near by, and a strange doe emergred from the thickit. She was light creamish, and had brownish hair. Part of it was swept forwards. She had socks that went down in a zig zag pattern, each layer in a diffrent colour. She had creamish-whiteish undersides. She had bright green eyes. She was not like anyother deer These two had seen. She had fallow deer spots, so Luid thought she might be a fallow deer. Couper looked at Luid, hoping he would take over.
" What type of deer are you?" She bounced infront of Couper.
" Hey, leave her alone, she's not a deer she's a sheeoat , a sheep crossed with a goat, and shes mute, so stop all this hyperactivness!" Luid sighed. The fawn stopped.
" Sorry, mabye that was a bit off. I'm Kya, nice to meet you!" Kya smiled, he dazziling emerled eyes refelcting the stars above.
" I'm Luid, and this is Couper" Luid blushed, for up close, and now she was calm, Kya was actually quite pretty.
" I'm a fallow deer she's a sheeoat"
" You already told me about the sheeoat " Kya was now fully calm, but her chest was rising with all the exess energy that had not gone away.
" I'm ... a ghost, and no I do not want to talk about it" Luid turned away.
" Your a nice ghost" Kya smiled. Luid blushed futher.
" I'm a Vita deer, there half red deer, half fallow deer, although I'm just two Vita deer, I never knew my father" Kya thoughtback.
" Good job really" An adult doe stepped out of the Thickit. She looked quite similer to Kya in the socks, hair and spots. Her fur was light orangey, but darker than Kya's. Her eyes were blue.
" Mom, these are my new friends Luid, who's a ghost, and Couper who's a mute sheeoat, sorry if I offened you by mentioning the mute part Couper"
Couper shook her head, she was not offended.
" Hi Luid, hi Couper, I'm Kya's mother, but you can call me Asante." Asante said.
" And I'm Tumaini!" Another Vita deer came out. He was much darker than Kya or Asante, but not to dark. He had a very dark brown head and tail. He had no spots, but Luid and Couper both thought he was more Red deer. His Tumaini's antlers were lager than any antlers Luid had seen.
" May I ask what you are doing here?" Tumaini inquired.
" Looking for a herd to stay in, hopefully fallow deer" Luid told the three vita deer.
" I dont know of any Fallow deer, but there are two white tail deer herds just over that hill " Asante told them.
"Oh, ok" Luid was dissapointed, but did not show it.
" Bye!" he called.
" Bye!" Asante and Tumaini walked back into the thickit, anc Couper started on her way to the hill, leaving Luid and Kya to say good bye.
" Bye Kya"
" Bye Luid"
The ghost fawn looked into Kya's eyes, still reflected by the stars, so full of life. Luid went into a trance, wondering what being alive would feel like again, and looking into Kya's star lit eyes.

" Kya!" Asante's words focerd Luid from his trance.
" See you round" Kya smiled, then followed her bother and uncle.
" See you" Luid sighed, before remembering his promise to help his best friend Couper.
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Palugit slowly opened her bright blue eyes. She gasped as natures wonderful sunrise refelcted in her eyes, sending them into all the right colours of nature. Tiny hints of extravagant shades of orange and pink appeared in the sky. Shortly after, The sun peaked over the hills. came out over the horizon. The sky was now no longer the dark shadowy colours of night, but lit with bright colours that made Palugit feel warm and comfortable. The sun was only half way over the distant hills, sending the earth and grass into bright colours, but leaving the sky going up in pinks and oranges, until it reached a layer were there was still night, and the sky was purple and blue.
Palugit smiled. She was happy here, but she felt guilty, guilty because she knew something the other memberes of the herd did not. And if she had to kill every single deer in both herds, and others, she would make her way to the top. She felt guilty about this, but she mostly felt guilty about Trotzen. How can I? She asked herself. She stood up and made her way to the entrance. She would make a new plan, a slightly less violent one, if only there was a buck she could use to help her in a nice way, someone she owed a dept to. She came forwards out of the den. A surprise met her. A buck, worn and cut was standing there. His antlers had been dameged, and only one of them still remained, but the other was a splint. The buck had many scars.
" Who are you?" Palugit nervously asked.
" It's me ... Ronno" The buck, Ronno claimed.
" What happened?" Palugit felt relif wash through her. Ronno shook his head.
"It's a long story, Swift tail is to blame"
Palugit nodded. She understood, well she wanted to know what had happened, but still... Mabye this was it. She could help Ronno, Ronno would side with Trotzen, and if Trotzen trusted him, he would ask for Ronno's advice on does, after all, even Trotzen needed a doe. But
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I understands and there's only one new character to come, but each
character will serve a purpose. |
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I enjoyed this. My only complaints are these: I'd noticed the
constantly shifting group of characters as well as the fact that the
story jumps all over the place. Now, the jumping about may be helped
if perhaps you spent more time introducing the scenario in which the
character becomes important to the plot - it's very important that you
don't add random characters for the heck of it - and make it clear
when your switching perspective. It just gets confusing sometimes. |
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Hi, I've been reading your chapters and this one Is AWSOME! I live the
meeting between Kya and Luid, and the dramatic scene at the end! |
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Actually the rivalry of Trotzen and Swift tail was inspired from The
Tygrine cat ( I live that book) but yeah |
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*Listening to Circle of Life*. Sorry, it's just a little TLK-ish. With
two rivalry brothers and two herds and Not one of us...(By the way, am
I the only one who randomly started singing the song?) The new chapter is nice, the pace is great and the story is getting more interesting by each chapter. And the meeting of Kya and Luid was cute. Too bad he's a ghost, they would make a nice couple. I am excited to find out how the story continous. |