Descendant of the stars chapter 12: Trust

Author : JetxLucy

Date sent : October 26, 2012

Rating : PG (Parental guidance suggested)

Category : Epic

Description : After Luid is in the life or heaven situation, he only has one chance. Swift tail attempts to get Sanft and Chestnut to join his side, and betray thee friends and family, and its all down to Sanft's trust and loyalty to her parents and friends, after spending only 3 weeks in the forest, and only 1 week of it with the deer Swift tail wants her to betray. More strange things start happening, and Tumaini is not pleased to see Tricheur... Palugit also turns out to be a betrayer...

Length : Short -

Characters :
Poza
Poza
Cervola
Cervola
Sterk
Sterk
Ronno
Ronno
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Descendant of the stars chapter 12: Trust
By JetxLucy

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November 01, 2012
Uk
I understands and there's only one new character to come, but each character will serve a purpose.

November 01, 2012
I enjoyed this. My only complaints are these: I'd noticed the constantly shifting group of characters as well as the fact that the story jumps all over the place. Now, the jumping about may be helped if perhaps you spent more time introducing the scenario in which the character becomes important to the plot - it's very important that you don't add random characters for the heck of it - and make it clear when your switching perspective. It just gets confusing sometimes.

November 01, 2012
Uk
FV---- what do you think of this chapter?

October 29, 2012
Uk
Hi I'm glad you like this one

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October 28, 2012
Hi, I've been reading your chapters and this one Is AWSOME! I live the meeting between Kya and Luid, and the dramatic scene at the end!

October 28, 2012
Uk
Actually the rivalry of Trotzen and Swift tail was inspired from The Tygrine cat ( I live that book) but yeah

October 28, 2012
Uk
Glad you lIke it, I am Pleased with this one

Guest
Guest
October 28, 2012
*Listening to Circle of Life*. Sorry, it's just a little TLK-ish. With two rivalry brothers and two herds and Not one of us...(By the way, am I the only one who randomly started singing the song?)
The new chapter is nice, the pace is great and the story is getting more interesting by each chapter. And the meeting of Kya and Luid was cute. Too bad he's a ghost, they would make a nice couple.
I am excited to find out how the story continous.


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