wide, realizing he had spoken, and he dropped his frontlegs to the ground. "I-I mean... Ummm..."

Trar seemed surprised at his sudden outburst, appalled, yet impressed. "Okay, then..." He narrowed his eyes. "I will pass... today. But I still am watching her," he added sharply.

Ronno stared as the three bucks passed him. He flinched as Nacht shot him a cold look.

Nothing was safe now. Ronno was terrified that he would slip up and be next to die. But he couldn't talk like that, not now. Faline's brother, Gobo, walked over to him. "Terrifying," he bleated.

"You watched that?" He stared at the first-year buck.

"I'm Faline's brother," Gobo reminded him. "They didn't give me a choice, Ronno. They thought I'd try and get her away from them. They're trying to remind me who's in charge. And believe me, they have, and it's absolutely terrifying." He shuddered.

"Well," Ronno sighed. "You can stay with me tonight if you need to." He had always viewed Gobo as a little brother, and with good reason. Gobo had always looked at Ronno as a big brother. The two were very close.

"I'd like that," he grumbled. "Safety in numbers."

"Alright," Ronno nodded and turned. "Let's go home, then." The four-point buck followed Ronno back to his den.



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May 17, 2013
i only read to "Bambi had lost, and failed to protect Saliva."
No!!! If he can't win, heal, Bambi! Get your energy back! Don't be weak!
Trar is horrible and I miss the Great prince :cry: :cry:

September 03, 2012
Huh. Why thank you ^^ what a coincidence, that instead of 'night,' I Accidentally call him 'power!'

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September 03, 2012
First of all: I love this fanfic of yours. Your way of writing is wonderful and the what-if thing is brilliant. I really enjoy reading it.
However, I saw a little spelling mistake in one of the last paragraphs on the first page. You wrote Macht instead of Nacht. (Here's the sentence "He turned away to walk down the meadow, followed by Macht and Huckleberry.") It's nothing, really, but it's kinda ironic that Macht happens to be the German word for power. (I should know, I am German.)
Enough said, keep up the good work.

August 08, 2012
Usa Female
Well, you're doing a wonderful job so far, laying everything out in a professional fashion and not over-crowding the scene with new characters ;) I'm sure Lihua will make an interesting addition to the story, adding a bit of Oriental flair and passion into the hearts of the young bucks, especially Nacht ^_^

August 07, 2012
Uk Female
Oh my goodness! This is AWESOME! Poor Salvia, i hope Birch doesnt hurt her... Loving the thing on Huckleberry and Yew, this story is getting more intense. I cant wait for the next chapter ^-^

August 07, 2012
Thanks! I promise Lihua will get in, I just don't wanna crowd everything together. ;)
Yup, I added Gobo! Why? 'Cuz I felt like it. :P lol.

August 07, 2012
Usa Female
So awesome :P Aside from the story getting more and more exciting (and the fact that Nacht is just as bada$$ as ever), I must admit you are a very good writer! I'm a sucker for cliffhangers, I do that all the time with my story chapters, so I'm always impressed to see another writer do it too ;) Also, I LOVE that you added Gobo in there! He was one of my favorite characters from the novel ^_^

August 07, 2012
And here's Chapter Four! Introducing Huckleberry in more detail as well as Yew.




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