wide, realizing he had spoken, and he dropped his frontlegs to the ground. "I-I mean... Ummm..."
Trar seemed surprised at his sudden outburst, appalled, yet impressed. "Okay, then..." He narrowed his eyes. "I will pass... today. But I still am watching her," he added sharply.
Ronno stared as the three bucks passed him. He flinched as Nacht shot him a cold look.
Nothing was safe now. Ronno was terrified that he would slip up and be next to die. But he couldn't talk like that, not now. Faline's brother, Gobo, walked over to him. "Terrifying," he bleated.
"You watched that?" He stared at the first-year buck.
"I'm Faline's brother," Gobo reminded him. "They didn't give me a choice, Ronno. They thought I'd try and get her away from them. They're trying to remind me who's in charge. And believe me, they have, and it's absolutely terrifying." He shuddered.
"Well," Ronno sighed. "You can stay with me tonight if you need to." He had always viewed Gobo as a little brother, and with good reason. Gobo had always looked at Ronno as a big brother. The two were very close.
"I'd like that," he grumbled. "Safety in numbers."
"Alright," Ronno nodded and turned. "Let's go home, then." The four-point buck followed Ronno back to his den.
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| September 03, 2012 | ||
Huh. Why thank you ^^ what a coincidence, that instead of 'night,' I
Accidentally call him 'power!' |
![]() | September 03, 2012 | |
First of all: I love this fanfic of yours. Your way of writing is
wonderful and the what-if thing is brilliant. I really enjoy reading
it. However, I saw a little spelling mistake in one of the last paragraphs on the first page. You wrote Macht instead of Nacht. (Here's the sentence "He turned away to walk down the meadow, followed by Macht and Huckleberry.") It's nothing, really, but it's kinda ironic that Macht happens to be the German word for power. (I should know, I am German.) Enough said, keep up the good work. |
| August 08, 2012 | ||
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Well, you're doing a wonderful job so far, laying everything out in a
professional fashion and not over-crowding the scene with new
characters I'm sure Lihua will make an interesting addition to the
story, adding a bit of Oriental flair and passion into the hearts of
the young bucks, especially Nacht ^_^ |
| August 07, 2012 | ||
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Oh my goodness! This is AWESOME! Poor Salvia, i hope Birch doesnt hurt
her... Loving the thing on Huckleberry and Yew, this story is getting
more intense. I cant wait for the next chapter ^-^ |
| August 07, 2012 | ||
Thanks! I promise Lihua will get in, I just don't wanna crowd
everything together. ![]() Yup, I added Gobo! Why? 'Cuz I felt like it. . |
| August 07, 2012 | ||
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So awesome Aside from the story getting more and more exciting (and
the fact that Nacht is just as bada$$ as ever), I must admit you are a
very good writer! I'm a sucker for cliffhangers, I do that all the
time with my story chapters, so I'm always impressed to see another
writer do it too Also, I LOVE that you added Gobo in there! He was
one of my favorite characters from the novel ^_^ |
No!!! If he can't win, heal, Bambi! Get your energy back! Don't be weak!
Trar is horrible and I miss the Great prince