Dragon Tamer: Thanks! But now it's on the top 8 out of the top 10! I'm so excited!

I don't honestly know why there are so many extra pages. I've tried deleting them twice, and then gave up. I guess it'll remain that way. But I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Pretty good but why so many left over pages?

Congrats on making the Top 10!

*bows* My pleasure.

Thanks so much for the feedback! I'm not really the greatest when it comes to editing, so I really do appreciate the feedback.

Well, you need to break up the paragraphs more. The way it is makes it difficult to read. Try making a new paragraph each time you change the speaker, like this:
“I’m just bored.”
“With what?” She asked back. The others started to listen as they ate.
“Just bored with doing the same old thing every day.”
“Yeah, but now the plane does half of what we do for us.”
“Yeah,” Ralph agreed. “That ‘a-way we don’t have to wore ourselves out.” He finished licking his chops.
Kirby finished licking his, when he added, “Besides, getting the mail is what we do.”

And your word tenses are off too. Like when Ralph said “That ‘a-way we don’t have to wore ourselves out," "wore" should be "wear," because he's using a present tense and not a past tense.

That said, the story is very nice so far. I'm a Kodi and Dusty fan primarily, but I'm still open to seeing him with other girls (in ther fics, of course). My only complaint is that he seemed a bit too quick to propose in the mate context. It would have been better, I think, to see him do it in the "dating" context first, and then work from there (plus, an up-in-the-air relationship opens some good story possibilities).

All in all, I give it a 7 out of 10.

Also, I don't quite see how it got a PG rating. Everything seemed clean to me.

Thanks so much!

i actually kinda liked it haha. I love how everyone puts kodi and some girl together . Out of all the other kodi love stories id say yours is one of my favorites haha... so id rate it 8 out of 10

I hope you guys like this fan-fic, its' my first one on this site. I love to write, so hopefully there'll be more stories from me soon. Please let me know, how you think this fan-fic is, on a score from 1-10. Please be honest!
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