at her. His eyes were gold-green, the color of old bronze. Those eyes weighed heavily upon her as he absently rubbed the blanket with one paw.
Jenna gulped, and she could feel her cheeks stain pink. She had forgotten how physically attractive she still was, even after two litters and ten pups. Was he simply trying to figure out where he was, or was there more going on behind his strange eyes?
He cleared his throat and lifted his head. “It worked? I’m…inside a house?” He swiveled his head from one side to the other, and then sank back down in relief. “Thank god…” His eyes found her again, and he seemed to grow embarrassed. “I’m Tumak. I…I didn’t really think you would take me in. I though you would throw me back out on the street. But you were my last chance, and I was so cold…” He burrowed deeper under the blanket and rested his chin on the ground. “Anyway, thanks.”
Jenna shook herself. “Um…no problem. How long have you been out on the street?” She quickly covered her mouth with her paw, in case her question was too forward.
He shrugged. “I don’t know. A few months? Only it seems like forever.” His face suddenly took on a tired look that made Jenna feel the pain of the cold and the loneliness right along with him. “Who knows where I’m going after this.”
The sudden silence and the defeated look on his face pressed Jenna to stay quiet, but curiosity was tugging at her. She had to ask. “Tumak,” she asked softly, keeping her eyes lowered, “Who’s Khara?”
His head jerked up, and for a moment a bolt of pure pain slashed across his face. Then he narrowed his eyes and masked it with suspicion. “Where did you hear that name?” His eyes were glittering so fiercely she was a little afraid.
“You said it,” she whispered, “When we brought you in you were…delirious, I guess. You called my mate Soenor and you kept saying Khara. Who is Khara, Tumak?”
Tumak sighed. “You mean, who was,” he said bitterly.
Jenna waited.
Tumak locked his eyes on her and said with almost no emotion: “Khara was my mate. We found each other on the streets, or rather Soenor found her for me. It could only have been a match made in heaven, and considering that the streets were hell, that’s something you don’t see every day.” He smiled faintly. “Then we found out we were going to have pups. I’d never seen her so happy…” His voice trailed off.
Jenna hated to cause him more pain, but she blurted out, “What happened?”
He paused. “She was giving birth. The pups got stuck inside her. She died.”
The announcement made Jenna catch her breath. She had never imagined such a thing happening to anyone. It was too awful.
Tumak gave a grating, humorless laugh. “After that, who knows what I did? Who knows what happened to me? I blacked it all out for awhile, and only really came back a couple days ago. I don’t know how long I was gone; that felt like forever, too. But it still hurts like it happened yesterday.” He blinked, coming out of his reverie, and his gaze slowly focused on her. He blinked again, and then gave her a brittle smile. “She was beautiful, and sweet. You remind me of her.”
Once more Jenna felt herself blushing furiously. She looked up only to see Tumak squirming uncomfortably.
“Nothing’s meant by it, Jenna,” he murmured, “I’m just saying, whoever your mate is, he’s very lucky.”
Jenna bowed her head so he couldn’t see her face. “Well…thank you,” she muttered uncertainly.
Right on cue, the doggy door slapped open and shut and Balto’s voice called out, “Jenna! I’m home!”
Relief swept through her in huge waves. For the first time she realized just how rigid and tense she had become. Tumak wasn’t exactly threatening, but still, it was reassuring to have someone else with her.
“In here!” she called back.
Balto shook the snow and cold out of his fur and padded into the kitchen and to her side. Jenna felt an absurd satisfaction in seeing Tumak’s startled expression as she said, “Tumak, this is my mate, Balto.”
Over the next few days Jenna felt Tumak’s eyes on her constantly. He didn’t do or say anything suggestive, but she noticed him staring affectionately at her whenever she came into his range of vision. She reasoned he just missed Khara, and was transferring all his adoration from his former mate to her. She tried to counter it by having Balto with her as much as possible. She talked to Balto about it, too, and explained her reasoning for his behavior. Balto understood, but he let it be known that if Tumak put even one paw on Jenna, he would be out for the count in three seconds flat. Jenna appreciated the protection; she was beginning to get vexed by the distant idolatry. But it would only be a matter of time before Balto became not as understanding.
“Are you sure you’re all right?” Jenna asked.
Tumak raised his shaggy head from his blankets and smiled gratefully. “Yes, I’m sure. Thank you, Jenna.”
“Well, if you need anything, I’m right out here,” she said, turning away reluctantly. As she exited the kitchen, a sigh from her lips both surprised and mellowed her. Her concern for Tumak was more out of friendliness than attractiveness, though she was wondering if he was beginning to take her doting the wrong way. Well, he would have to leave eventually; and though she did like him, she had to admit that when he did go, most of her problems would go with him.
She padded slowly towards the living room, only to come face to face with Balto. “Oh!” Jenna said in surprise. “Balto. I’m sorry, I didn’t see–” She saw his face. “What?”
Balto was apparently having trouble finding the right words to explain. “Jenna, I–” He cleared his throat. “Look, about…Tumak.”
“Balto,” Jenna said patiently, “We’ve been over this.”
Balto nodded quickly. “Yeah, I know, I know. It’s just…you going into his room so much. And having another male dog here, well…dogs are talking, Jen. About you. And him. And…this empty house.”
“What?” Jenna sputtered. Her brown eyes flashed. “Of all the stupidest…! Balto, I love you! Everyone knows that! Why would they spread those lies? It’s Sylvie and Dixie, isn’t it? Oh, I’m going to give those two a piece of my mind!” Shaking with anger, she turned and started marching towards the front door.
Balto said in a low voice, “You don’t have to. I already did.”
Jenna froze, and then whipped around so fast the tip of her tail brushed her cheek. “You? You talked to Sylvie and Dixie?” The two gossip hounds, while being Jenna’s friends, were usually the source of Balto’s amusement, with their wild rumors and tall tales of the town dogs’ romances.
Balto lifted his shoulders defensively. “Well, more like they talked to me. They came after me, asking if it was true that there was another male dog staying in this house.” He shook his head. “I don’t like where this is going, Jenna. You know I love you, and I trust you. But could you not spend so much time with him in there? Please? I’m on edge as it is, what with Gossips Gals 1 and 2 yakking away about us out there.”
Jenna gave him a tired smile. “That’s why you leave gossiping to the girls, Balto.”
He grinned a little. “Right. Remind me again how they became your friends?”
The front door flew open with a blast of cold wind and a whirl of dancing white flakes. Rosy’s mother stumbled in with her arms full of letters and packages, and leaned her back against the door in an attempt to close it. It finally shut with a sharp slam, and the bedraggled woman heaved a sigh of relief. “What a day. Dear, the mail’s here!” she called to her husband.
Rosy’s father
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| January 31, 2009 | ||
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If this was your last fic then it was your greatest, goodbye Balto
source's friend and the best fanfic writer it has ever had. |
| December 26, 2008 | ||
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It was awesome! I'm sorry you have to go! But is their some way to convise you to stay? Your work is wonderful! Will your work be on another site? If not it was a pleasure reading them! |
| October 31, 2008 | ||
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| The MCR-my! |
It's so sad to hear that this is our last work. I love your style
of writing, and I will definitely come back to read your other fanfictions. Goodbye redwolf03. |
| October 06, 2008 | ||
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| Belle's Ice River pack |
This was a simply wonderful fic and was very enjoyable to read. All the conflicts seemed well planned, not just thrown out there, and they all tied together nicely. Though, adding Balto's little speech at the end helped clarify any confusion, and that was helpful to me! I'm very sorry to see you go, redwolf03, but I understand that you have places to go and people to see. You're on to bigger and better things, but that doesn't mean we won't miss you around here. I certainly hope you continue writing, wherever you go, and never give it up! You have a true talent with a pen, and I believe it can take you anywhere. I want to thank you one last time for all of the comments and reviews you ever left for me. Yours were almost invariably the longest and most helpful, and I really appreciate that. If you're really leaving Balto Source for good, then I salute you. Write on! |
| October 06, 2008 | ||
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| Say wut? |
Excellent! Very good...though I was a little surprised at what
Jenna did at the end. (Trying not to spoil the story, ) I'm so sad you're not going to write anymore! But the fanfiction you DID write was superb. |
| October 04, 2008 | ||
It is with great reluctance I write this review, knowing that once
I post this it will most likely be my last review for your stories. I'm very sorry to see you set your pen aside, your fics were well crafted and they were a super read! Hopefully, you will still pop in now and again... I enjoyed talking to you on the occassions you commented or vice versa. On Masquerade, I was disgusted at Tumak's audacity, and I was a little scared for Jenna when she began to act a wee bit too forward with him. It was a nice plot twist to see Talon and Tumak work together, though it felt a little rushed as a whole. I think the only thing that made me grimace a little was when Jenna unleashed her fury. It seemed a little... almost out of character for her to be THAT vicious. I can see her doing it, but the circumstances didn't seem like it should have prompted the level of rage she displayed. Either that, or I'm just being too critical. *laughs* All in all, it was an enjoyable read! Well done. Hopefully, you won't quit writing for good. Perhaps you can go to fanfiction.net and post some stories there, if you wish. Either way, I'll keep a lookout for you elsewhere online. *salutes* Bye! |
| October 04, 2008 | ||
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wow so sad to hear this is your final work mate, you've been
sitting in my select favourites for fanfic authors for so long and to see you out with a new one only to end your time here But hey a great last fanfic mate, really good read. Very deep and moving and a fitting end, nice one mate and hope you decide to keep Balto with you |
| October 02, 2008 | ||
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It is with a heavy heart that I see you hang up your pen,
redwolf03. You were my first friend here, and I hope it may continue to be so even now that you have stopped writing. But please don't leave altogether, or this site will be the worse off without you. As for the story, I found it unique among your works; truly a memorable end. |
| October 30, 2008 | ||
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| WQ > Balto > WoC |
Well, you outdid yourself, Redwolf. This was quite an interesting story with twists, drama, and great dialogue. That's one of your strengths - dialogue, whether aloud or in thought. I didn't expect most of the things that eventually took place, and you made it so suspenseful until the final line. Well done! Overall, I enjoyed this and I'm heartbroken that this is your last here. *bows* I am not worthy. Seriously. - Juuchan17 |