his sister was something that Raiden knew he had to do for his sister.
‘She’d be proud of you to…’ She didn’t finish because Raiden laughed and turned around.
‘Be proud of what? Look at what I have become, I was to co-rule this pack with you, the greatest pack in the world, and yet here I stand a broken wolf, with broken dreams and a heart according to the elders so cold that I will destroy them.’ Looking down at the ground Raiden knew he couldn’t cry because when he was young he was so sure he had cried a river that he could no longer cry any anymore.
Aniu slowly walked up and sat beside her brother knowing how lonely and sad he tried was and so she tried comfort him but failed to find the right words.
‘I may not be able to find the right words to help you Raiden but I believe I have discovered something that will return your reputation…’ Raiden looked up looking shocked and not understanding.
‘I thought that was impossible Aniu we’ve tried everything all I can do is wait here until the elders see that I am not evil and I pose no threat.’
Aniu turned to Raiden and whispered in to his ear and as soon as she had finished Raiden smile widens and his eyes flashed like the lightning just above them. He turned to his sister and stood back up and looked out the den.
‘Time is indeed flying away Aniu…’ Raiden smiled as Aniu walked up beside he brother and together they watched the lightning show in the sky.
Part 3
Raiden waited patiently in some trees as he watched his sister approach Revalis her uncle and the Alpha of the Spirit Pack who had ruled with an iron paw, a tyrant whom the elders thought was really the wolf who would bring their destruction.
‘Revalis, it has been over a year now and I am now old enough to take my mothers place in ruling the Spirit pack.’ Aniu said looking at her uncle who glared down at her with his brown eyes.
‘No Aniu you are not ready.’ He said simply and turned around and began to walk away but Aniu saw him and quickly ran up and stood in front of him.
‘Ask the elders, I have completed my training I am more then ready.’ As she finished Revalis growled slightly it was obvious he did want to give up his position.
‘Listen to me Aniu you are not ready.’ He growled looking right down at her. Raiden from the trees couldn’t hear what they were saying but didn’t want to risk walking forward and being seen so he remained where he was. Revalis was about to walk away again but Aniu quickly stood back in front of him making him snarl and in an instant he raised his paw and hit the side of her face causing her to stumble the ground. ‘Do not disobey my orders I am the Alpha of this pack and you’ll to best to remember that my niece.’
Raiden who was watching from the side gasped as he watched his sister being hurt and instantly he stood up and his eyes flashed blue and he growled showing his sharp white teeth as he walked forward towards Revalis who instantly turned around.
‘Raiden…’ He snarled ‘leave my land!’ he ordered but Raiden ignored him as he walked forward. Revalis took a step back as he watched Raiden, ‘Listen to me!’ He yelled but again Raiden ignored him and as soon as Raiden was close enough he leapt at Revalis with such speed and agility that Revalis didn’t have to react.
‘Raiden!’ Aniu yelled as she watched the two fight only seeing flashes of black and brown. Hearing his sisters voice Raiden’s eyes slowly went back to normal as he looked down to see a petrified Revalis pinned beneath him covered in blood. Gasping Raiden quickly jumped away from Revalis who slowly stood up looking scared.
‘Revalis I…I…’ Raiden tried to explain as he took a step forward but Revalis suddenly stepped back away from him looking scared as his mouth opened but nothing seemed to come out. ‘The elders are right!’ Revalis yelled as he slowly started to back up away from Raiden as Aniu walked up beside her brother watching as Revalis quickly ran away with his tail between his legs.
‘Aniu I’m sorry I don’t know what came over me.’ Raiden said looking down at the ground the taste of blood on his muzzle making him shiver. Nuzzling her brother Aniu looked at him with her deep brown eyes and sighed.
‘You have never known Revalis my brother…he will not be back…’ Aniu said looking after him.
‘What will you tell the others?’ Raiden said looking up at Aniu knowing that their plan had failed and now he’d never be accepted back in to the pack.
‘Revalis is a coward and will not return he knows that if the Spirit Pack ever found out he’d hit me…the future alpha of the spirit pack he’d be exiled anyway.’ Aniu sighed and smiled a little looking up at her brother. ‘It’s time for you my brother to take your place by my side and we will both rule the Spirit Pack just as out parents did before us.’
Raiden smiled and for the first time in a long time was truly happy as both wolves walked deeper in to the Spirit Packs lands to find the elders.
As he walked the familiar sites and smells of his old lands hit him, it was as though he had never left he remember certain trees and paths, their hunting grounds and they even walked past the Alpha den which no longer smelt of his parents but rather of the brute Revalis who had abused his power. Holding his head up high Raiden knew that he had done good for the pack. How could they even kick him out of the pack now? He has shown he will not bring their destruction, how could he if just got rid of the tyrant pack leader senting the wolves free and letting his sister Aniu become the new Alpha?
Meanwhile at a clearing Jahar the main elder was sitting down in the sun shocking up its warm rays as a younger wolf ran up beside him puffing and panting.
‘Jahar I just saw Aniu and Raiden coming this way!’ The wolf seemed in a panic and looked as though he had just seen a ghost.
‘Calm down young pup I will deal with the destroyer.’ He turned to the wolf beside him ‘Now leave quickly they can’t see you talking to me.’ Nodding the brown wolf quickly jumped around and began to run away.
From the trees Aniu suddenly appeared standing tall with her brother beside her looking worried as Jahar slowly turned around. ‘Aniu I…’
‘Speak not to me until I have told you why elder…’ Aniu started and when she was sure he was listening she started again, ‘Revalis the Alpha Male has been chased away by my brother. When I told my uncle that it was time for me to take over as the Alpha he refused and attacked me, if it wasn’t for Raiden he may have killed me.’ Finishing Aniu looked over at Jahar who didn’t seem that interested.
‘Listen to me Alpha your brother has already had his destiny planned out as have you and nothing will change that.’ Growling low in the background Raiden was about to say something when another black and white wolf burst from the trees and stopped in front of Aniu.
‘Aniu the Orion pack have just invaded our lands!’ Aniu looked shocked as she turned around looking at Raiden who just looked more confused.
Part 4
‘I thought we were at peace with the Orion Pack?’ Raiden asked as he watched his sister pace in front of him.
‘I thought we were to. What would give them a right to invade my land we have never broken our words we’ve never ventured on to their land.’ Finally sitting down Aniu sighed she was unsure what to do and deep down inside she had a horrible feeling that maybe making her the Alpha to help her brother wasn’t a good idea after all.
Meanwhile the elder Jahar was growling as he paced around in circles in front of a group of a few wolves. ‘How can Aniu let that thing back in to the pack? He will kill us all!’ He spluttered.
‘But elder if Raiden brought down Revalis and scared him away without even a scratch can’t that be used to our advantage?’ Another wolf smiling and stepping forward as Jahar stopped and turned to them.
‘Explain.’ Muttered Jahara
‘If these Orion wolves intend on invading our land maybe Raiden can help us, he can kill so many wolves so then we won’t be risking our necks and maybe if we’re lucky the Orion Pack will do the job of taking care of him without the Alpha Aniu finding out.’ The wolf smiled as Jahar turned to him; it sounded like a good plan to him.
‘Alpha Aniu we must attack these wolves before they kill anymore of the Spirit Pack.’ Jahar said standing tall in front of Aniu who had called a meeting of all the wolves in the Spirit Pack together to try and think of an idea.
‘I don’t want to risk any ones lives.’ Aniu said looking down at the ground.
‘We must have an attack and it should be lead by Raiden…’ Jahar said as everyone turned to look at Raiden who looked shocked, only a day ago Jahar was pulling every excuse out of the book to try and get him banished again and yet suddenly he wanted him to lead an attack?
‘Why this sudden change of heart?’ Raiden sneered stepped forward towards Jahar who instinctively took a step back away from him.
‘If you were to prove yourself then I will have no quarrel in letting you back into the Spirit Pack.’ Aniu growled as she stepped forward beside her brother.
‘Don’t forget I am the Alpha and my brother Raiden has already been accepted back into my pack.’
‘No Aniu wait, he speaks the truth if I prove myself in battle no one here will have reason to fear me.’ Raiden said turning to Aniu who still looked unsure as she whispered.
‘Raiden you have nothing to prove!’
‘Yes I do please let me do this.’ Raiden said looking up at his sister
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- Critiquing because I'm a rebel . . . LOL I liked it! It's very well written, but not perfect. I found it to be an enjoyable read . . . even if you wrote it a year ago (trust me, I have stories I've started a year ago . . . that aren't even finished yet!)! Raiden's character is interesting and yet it's sad that everyone's afraid of him. So much sadness and heartache, yet he's stuck in his sister's shadow . . . wah. Nice work - I can't wait to read the next part for Dusty: The True Story! - Juuchan17 |
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