Toby Part Five: Date with Disaster

Author : Jake Razor

Date sent : May 17, 2007

Rating : G (Everyone)

Category : Relationship/Love

Description : Toby and Luna are getting ready for their first date. But Pete wants to ruin their night out, and he's using every trick in the book to do it.

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Toby Part Five: Date with Disaster
By Jake Razor

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August 05, 2009
Usa Male
Just --> Guilty as charged.

July 29, 2009
Usa Male
when I was reading this, it seemed like a mixture of "The lion king 1 1/2" and "The lady and the tramp".

April 22, 2008
Brazil Male
even better one. i even started to think it'd end up bad.

November 09, 2008
Usa Male
wyvern --> Thank you. :D

June 09, 2007
Sweden Male
I did notic a thing that I didn't notich first time I read
it.
You got a little insperionson(?) from lion king 1
too.
Can't the continue come now I want
too now what happen next.

May 18, 2007
Sweden Male
I did too notic that with Lady and the Tramp but I did not
notic that witch the lion king 1½ (maybe it's becouse I not
have seen it ) Can't wait for a continue! this stories
are just so d*** good

May 17, 2007
Usa Female
Awesome story as always, Dragon Tamer! It reminded me a
little of The Lion King 1 and 1/2, where Timon and Pumbaa
keep trying to mess up Simba and Nala's "date" but their
tricks keep backfiring on them. I also noticed the little
"Lady and the Tramp" touch,too. Great story! How long is
the Toby series going to be?...Not that I want it to end!

May 18, 2007
Wonderful! I loved it, and it was nice and squeeky clean
too, which is a huge bonus in the romantic sort of fanfics.
Keep it up!

May 18, 2007
Usa Male
redwolf03 --> Ah, you noticed. Yes, I got the idea for this whole story
from TLK 1 1/2, and the Lady and the Tramp reference was
deliberate as well (I have done so many parodies of that
movie, it's not even funny). As for how long the Toby series
will be, I have plans as far as number eight right now. But
I may come up with more, and I'm open to suggestions if
anyone has 'em.

Kelev --> Yeah. It's too bad more romances aren't clean these days, but if you ask me it just makes the ones that are all the better. Anyone can be crude, but it takes real discipline to be funny, romantic, AND clean. Fortunately, as long as there are peple like usround who appreciate clean entertainment, there's hope yet for the internet.

May 18, 2007
Usa Male
Thanks, Break. If you're a little confused about the TLK 1
1/2 reference, read redwolf 03's comment. It pretty much
sums up where I got the whole idea. Of course if you haven't
seen the movie, you might want to avoid reading the comment
so you don't ruin the surprise for yourself.

May 18, 2007
Female
GREAT STORY! WRITE MORE PLEASE!

May 19, 2007
Usa Male
wolfcall--> More underway as we speak- er, type.

May 19, 2007
Usa Male
Tis cool, romance with disaster.

May 21, 2007
Usa Male
Thanks again!

Guest
Guest
May 20, 2007
AWSOME!!!

May 27, 2007
Usa Male
Thanks!

June 13, 2007
Usa Female
none
Wow, that was a really good story. And went along very clean
lines, but still was very good, in my view. If you ever
decide to take being an author as your carrrier, I think you
would make a very good one. And thats something I usually don't admit to people, so thats something coming from me.

June 26, 2007
Usa Female
are u goin to rite a toby part 7?

June 28, 2007
Female
Poor Pete! NOT!! He's really mean! Well, I LOVED it!! Keep
writing!!

October 18, 2007
Usa Male
Break --> Thanks, but I never heard of Johnny English. I
think I picked that line up from an episode of Smallville.

October 18, 2007
Sweden Male
This story is just great! It's the second time I read it and
I note a thing that I haven't seen before. I don't know if
anyone have said this but I found a line from Johnny
English.
"If I told I'm afraid I have to kill you"
Great story

September 16, 2007
Usa Male
Rannoch --> Very observant. Yes, both of those scenes do
have their similarities. In fact, I first got the idea for
"Date With Disaster" from a scene in "The Lion King 1 1/2."
The ice cave, though, was more based on the crystal caverns
mentioned in one of the Dinotopia books. But it is similar
to the Northern Lights too. Thank you for your interest. And
BTW, I noticed your spoiler warning. If you ever have a
question and don't want to give away part of a story, you
can always PM me or ask it in my forum topic, "Toby series:
Chat With The Cast."

February 12, 2008
Usa Female
hehe I though you were talking about a real disaster! haha very good
can't wait to see the next!

February 12, 2008
Usa Male
Thank you.

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