Toby Part Seven: Broken Memories

Author : Jake Razor

Date sent : July 06, 2007

Rating : G (Everyone)

Category : Relationship/Love

Description : When a blow to Luna's head wipes out here memory, Toby tries to help her get back in touch with who she is (not to mention who THEY are). But Pete smells an opportunity to break up the canine couple for good, and he's not about to let it slip through his paws. DOESN'T MAKE AS MUCH SENSE IF YOU HAVEN'T READ TOBY PARTS ONE THROUGH SIX.

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Toby Part Seven: Broken Memories
By Jake Razor

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October 15, 2008
Usa Male
Medic --> OK, I admit Part 4 was kind of predictable. But you can't
ignore the classics.
As for Part Seven, one problem: Punch with
what? He doesn't have any hands.

October 16, 2008
Usa Male
Medic --> Maybe.

November 24, 2008
Usa Female
Amazing! I can't wait to keep reading! Noticing your response to
balto_fan23's comment, I think that you should indeed go professional!

March 02, 2008
Usa Female
very good

March 02, 2008
Usa Male
Aleu --> Thank you!

July 20, 2007
Female
She probably felt the pain from her head.

July 20, 2007
Usa Female
If Luna can't remember anything, how come she remembered
that she was knocked on the head?

July 06, 2007
Sweden Male
Liked it good story when does part 8 come out can't wait to
read when it's comming out

July 06, 2007
Female
AAAH! I LOVED IT!! It was AWSOME! I think it's one of
your best!

July 06, 2007
Portugal Male
Not as good as the previous, but not bad at all!

July 08, 2007
Usa
Funny or not, I loved it! Also, the ham bone part is from
someone else...

July 08, 2007
Usa Male
Surprise! turns out the place I'm staying has internet
access, albeit limited. Thanks for all the comments.
Ahura --> Thanks! I'm glad to know you like my stories

harpier --> Yeah, Part Seven didn't come out as well
as the others because it was more of a rush job. *shrug*
Maybe at some point I'll be able to go over it again and
make some improvements.
break --> Thanks. I'll
probably post Part 8 not long after I get back home.
wolfcall --> Thanks, I'm glad you think so!

July 09, 2007
Canada Female
I don't get the last line. Where Luna says he could help her
memory, or something like that. I don't understand it.

July 10, 2007
Usa Male
Well, I don't want to give it away to people who haven't
read yet, but try thinking about it this way: He wouldn't
really be refreshing her memory so much as repeating a
certain event so she'd remember it the second "first" time.
Does that help?

July 10, 2007
It seemed a bit rushed, but it was still good! Pete jut
can't win, can he?

July 10, 2007
Usa Male
Kelev --> Yeah, it was a bit more rushed than I would have
liked. I wanted to get it up before I left on a missions
trip. The next one will be better, I promise. As for Pete,
let's hope he can't!

July 11, 2007
Canada Female
Ohhhh- Now I got it.

July 10, 2007
Uk Male
Very cool addition to the Toby storyline, looking very
forward to reading more on this fanfic

July 11, 2007
Usa Male
squival --> I'm glad you enjoy it. I hope to have the next
one up soon.
tala --> I thought you might.

July 14, 2007
Usa Female
That was excellent! Shorter than your other ones, but now I
know why, and it was still as good as ever! *confetti*

July 15, 2007
Usa Male
redwolf03 --> Thanks! I'm glad you liked it so much.
kaltag --> Oh, you haven't seen anything yet

July 20, 2007
Usa Male
Yeah, that's basically how it happened. She felt the pain,
she saw the branch, she put two and two together pretty much
automatically. Her memory may have been gone, but her brain
wasn't.

July 21, 2007
Usa Male
I felt sorry for Toby that sucks for the most part to him
Enjoyable read, I will say Pete was really cool when he
was taunting Toby! Silently rooting for him at that
part...but he was cool in that part! I like Pete when he
does things like that well seems like the first time he was
so cool! I want more of that Pete he rules! Toby was alright
but got me thinking he gettin' a bit protective there I R
thinking this might make problems later..I realy liked Pete
in this one! I want more of Pete that was taunting he
cool!^^ Toby I'm starting to question protection issue I
understand why though but..Luna not fully sure about the end
but cool still. I liked Pete best in this one bad guys rule!
I'm a bad person....

July 21, 2007
Usa Male
KrazyArc --> And a wierd one. I'm not sure I got what you
said about Toby and the "protection issue." Are you saying
that he was being too protective of Luna? If that's the
case, just look at it from Toby's angle. I guess I can
imagine something like that causing a problem if it happened
to some other couple, but not Toby and Luna.

July 22, 2007
Usa Female
Poor Luna! Good thing she has Toby at her side.

July 25, 2007
Usa Male
Dragontammer I thought I part of you would be happy that I
thought Pete was cool better then the other in this story I
know he was a bad and stuff but he was cool, I think a
writters aim should have villains people don't like and
think they are cool, well that's just me. Pete was cool Toby
was okay Luna was okay Pete was cool, about Toby from
readin' this for much far in up comming I think he'll press
the matter. My mind wonders and thinks a lot so I think he
has a problem but not yet I know you want me to
shut up..cause I'm annoying sorry but this for me question
Toby's acts in what he does is all what I'm saying me
cleaver you cleaver-er

July 25, 2007
Usa Male
KrazyArc --> Yeah, I did a lot more with Pete in this story
than I usually do. Normally I think of him as just a pest, a
bit on the dim side, but essentially a minor villain. This
story, however, allowed me to see him as a real,
fully-rounded character, conniving and always open for a
chance at revenge. And no, there's no need for you to shut
up. Interested readers like you keep me on my toes, which is
a good thing.

July 30, 2007
Usa Male
Great amnesia story. It reminds me of the time on Code
Lyoko when Ulrich was attacked by some nano robots XANA made
that killed memory cells. Did you ever see that episode?
And with Part Six, I think there might be a typo, page
three. Who's "Ranger"? That's the only time he's mentioned
in the story.

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