looked at his brother shocked

"but we cant leave...what would the elders say...i think we should confront them fir..."

"...if we dont leave today they will be nothing left of us and the elders will regret waiting so long to ask the acient dead surely you must realise this brother hord"

hord looked down and away from his brother in embarresment

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Cruelty (Twiggy)	May 28, 2009

thanks guys i will write more of the story as i go along no wai is this over with ha ha ha


Jake Razor	May 26, 2009

That was pretty intense. I don't know as I'm a fan of the spiritual aspect of it. But that aside, you could stand to improve the punctuation a bit. The ending was a good hanging point, though.


Guest	May 26, 2009

...i'm about to read it but ok!


Cruelty (Twiggy)	May 16, 2009

please feel free to comment and i will post more of the story as i go along :D

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