Author : Jake Razor
Date sent : December 11, 2008
Rating :
G (Everyone)Category : Relationship/Love
Description : Pete gets another girlfriend (no surprise there). But this one is different, really different. The problem is, she can't stand him, driving Pete to the ultimate extreme...
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Aleu --> To quote my girlfriend, I admit to nothing.
Densetsu
Aleu
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n23
and
was I will miss toby,and pete, and arrow, and luna,and rex, adn
especialy terry (she was also one of my favorite characters) hope the
new stories will be as good as these ones
spirit,
balto.
Medic
now, then it's on to that one.
Drifter
To Toby and Luna, with saddening
sigh
But here I am, and here I'll wait
For a new story to
appear, at the Dragon's gate.
Nice job Dragon.
a
spirit,
balto.
you know I'll be excited about you're next fanfic-whatever it's about.
Keep up the good work!
Drifter--> Nice poem!
Pete for the better without making it unrealistic (as in Pete suddenly
having a random dream and completely changing all at once). I'm
somewhat disappointed about the Toby Series ending and all, but I'm
also quite eager for your next series. The Toby Series definitely
ended on a fantastic note. Keep writing!
-Iditarod
Razor
wyvern --> Oh, not by a long
shot. Until high school, and through most of that, my technique was
ridiculous.
Drifter --> Your feedback is appreciated.
I
must say, I'm most elated.
For my friends who've yet to read
it,
Please be quick, I may delete it (JK).
SilverKia -->
Thak you, I aim to please.
wsb --> Yeah, it's hard to table the
series, but having reached the point where my speed of writing far
exceeds my inspiration, I thought it best to give Toby and the rest a
vacation while my ideas catch up.
Iditarod --> Thanks for your
support, but the series is far from over. As I said in the note, it's
only temporarily set aside. Still, I hope you enjoy what comes in the
meantime.
Thank you all for your responses, you've been
very kind.
ola
all blood-shot 'cause I stayed up till 11: 36 pm reading it. Good,
though. Worth it.
Razor
(although now I'll be needing a new baddie for all the "epic
failures."
Anyway, I hope you enjoy the one about Aniu as
well.
balto_fan23 --> Thank you, I'm glad you liked it. The next
series shouldn't be too slow in coming. Probably close to Christmas.
Razor
my presentation for more news of what's to come.
loved this one, for a little while I was almost fooled about... you
know. Heh, I was surprised you added Ewan in too, pleasent little
surprise to read! *snickers* I loved the part where Pete calls Ewan
'Ewok'. Too funny man.
It's a dissapointment that
you're hanging up the Toby Serise for now, but I understand if you
need a break from this story line in favor for a new one. I just hope
you don't stop writing for good!
Razor
you fooled about.
And don't worry. Toby, Luna, and all the rest
are far from finished.
075-cwp
part when Pete was angry at Toby with the failed attempt, and when he
was angry at the grave scene, I jumped out of my seat in joy,
literally! (I'm so messed up )
A good
feeling comes when you finish reading the story. Pete finally as a
major role, he was no background character in this one! For me much
more entertaining then Judge Toby. (You can tell him that is his new
name)
Something that did bother me, clicking the tong,
it started to annoy me, why was everyone doin' that? Especially in the
beginning. Why? (Who don't have to answer this at all, it's rather
pointless.)
"He hated everyone, and he was convinced
everyone hated him."- I blame Terry for this line.
(You already know DT, so let us just leave at this one line, we've
already discussed how I feel about Terry.) ((I'm in love! ))
Comedic relief, that's all that was...or is it?
But in
all honestly I loved this part, the ending, not so much, it seemed
well..hmmm..ahh...Well anyway I liked the guilt trip Toby went
through, in this finally had taste of what Pete has been going
through, for a while. Sorry but Luna was a side character, I don't
know why, she usually a bit fun to read. She seemed really different
in this one, like she was really happy and really depressed at the
same time. Weird eh?
Rex he seemed to go in 2D, 3D mode,
switching back and forth, I don't blame the story, but Rex has always
been 2D, then 3D and 2D again for me, I'm probably the only one on the
site who has that problem...with him. For a moment he looked kinda
evil for a moment in the story, in the part where he should up, if he
simply shouted 'you shall both die!' I would have walked away,
frightened. He could play a scary villain, Ooooo! He should star in a
cross over, 'The Shining', I could think of no one better then Rex to
cross play Jack Torrance! (I know 'what is wrong with you?) Oooo! I
need to ask him that....
Terry also seemed really happy,
and depressed in this one, not because of Pete either, almost went
something like 2D, or an ill omen of some kind, it kinda felt like
something really bad was about to befall her, but it hasn't happened
yet. (I'm certified krazy)
Alright sums it all in one
like KrazyArc075-cwp official opinion, "Toby Pt 13 Pete finally
demonstrates his courage, with interesting plot twists, but the story
seems to repeat the exact same grounds as the previous parts of the
series." 8/10 075 reviews.
l_772
Pete dying! I look forward to reading your future fanfics, and will
always be keeping an eye out for Toby and Luna to return!
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