Blaez The Beta Male - Book 2: Winter

Author : Kaynight

Date sent : April 16, 2007

Rating : G (Everyone)

Category : Epic

Description : Winter has fallen over the lands which bring a whole new bag of problems that will face Blaez and the others. Can he overcome the Shangkai pack and the new threats to survive through the harsh Winter?

Length : Average -

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Blaez The Beta Male - Book 2: Winter

By Kaynight

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Brown Wolf	April 18, 2007
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Hey, there! I just read Books 1 & 2 for your Blaez, The Beta
Male series. Not bad. Very well done! I look forward for
Book 3: Spring! Keep 'em comin'!


Guest	April 17, 2007

How you find so many things to write on those?


MayaHusk ee	April 17, 2007

	yer mum.

Not bad. But many mistakes. Lik when you have them talking.
You didn't put a period or comma at the end of their words.
You did this : 'Hi Maya' When it should be 'Hi Maya.' or 'Hi
Maya,' Kaynight said. Something like that. Also, that after
they'd say somethng, sometimes you'd put WHO said it on a
new line. Such as this :

"Hey Kaynight. Awesome
fic,"

Said Maya to Kaynight.

When
it should be "Hey Kaynight. Awesome fic," Said Maya to
Kaynight.

Work on that. ;] But still good.

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