morning. Bailey was walking beside Amber on their way up the hill to see the sunrise. They made it up and sat waiting.
Suddenly, a streak of orange could be seen along the horizon.
'Wow!' breathed Amber. Her fur shone orange-gold in the light and Bailey just stared at her.
'Your. So. Beauti-Wahh!' he cried. He was speaking aloud.
'You're right.' smiled Amber, 'It is beautiful!'
Sh turned towards Bailey.
'Something the matter?' she asked.
'Well..' Bailey said, blushing. Amber looked a little concerned.
'Amber.. I-I... I really like you, Amber!' he said and turned away. Amber gasped.
'You, do?' she said. She saw Bailey nod slightly.
'Uh-huh.' he said.
He didn't expect what came next. But he knew Amber liked him.
He woke the next morning still on the hilltop cuddled up to Amber. His paw over her, her head pressed against his chest and their tails curled round each other. He remembered the sunset and everything that had happened only a few hours ago.
bailey, candy, kenny, raven, mimi, amber, emily are all copyright to me
balto is copyright to universal studios (i think that's the one)
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Wonderful story! But I noticed a few glitches you might want to fix.
To start off, "Raven" is usually a girl's name from hat I know (at
least that's how it is according to Teen Titans). You're quotation
marks should be like "this" instead of 'this.' And near the bottom of
page 1 you used the word "him" in reference to a female. Please correct that one before someone mistakenly reports your story for improper content (beleive me, it can happen). Beyond that, you've got something good here. |
thanks for pointing out the mistakes. i've
changed the him to her (i was tired when i wrote this story)
but i'm not too bothered about raven being a girl's name or
a boy's name. it just kida popped into my head anyway. and i have never done my quotation marks like " only ever like this '.
well, thanks for reading the story