what you've done already. Your voice is incredible, your music sweeps the world off its feet, and you've given me the most amazing gift that no other dog could give. Don't be afraid to show me your face, Balto. I won't be afraid if you're not."

   "No!" He cried aloud, " I can't! I can't show you!"

   "But why? I'm not afraid."

   "You would be; I know you would. Everyone else has. Even my mother...my poor, unhappy wolf mother never wanted to see my face. Even my husky father never saw me. He left after I was born! I wear this mask to hide away this horror, to protect you from what lies beneath it. Please, can't you respect that?"

   "I do, Balto, but I told you don't have to be afraid anymore. I trust you more than any other dog in the world. I trust you as a teacher, and I trust you as a friend. Can't you trust me?"

   He then sighed, and looked at her, his face clearly showing pity.

   "Jenna, I trust you as well. You're the only friend I've ever had, and you're far more than just a mere student in my eyes. You've shown me compassion, and friendship and... and...love." He then took my paw, "I would do anything for you, I would jump into the Siene if you told me to, but please, I beg of you, don't make me do this."

   "Balto, I…" Jenna realized that the hybrid was clearly uncomfortable about this, and merely trying to take his mask off was somewhat disrespectful. Perhaps he really was that embarrassed of whatever was behind it. Jenna sighed, as she tried to control her curiosity. "I'm sorry I asked. I was just curious, that's all."

   Balto nodded, "Thank you, Jenna." He walked over to the piano, and slowly opened the folder of his composition, "Now then, shall we rehearse our song?"

   Jenna nodded, as she walked up to the piano. Balto turned to the very end of his piece, and much like she did with the song he sang to Jenna on that first day, he took a deep breath, and slowly lifted his wolf-like paws, creating a slow and gentle symphony, and began to sing.

   "You have come here…in pursuit of your deepest urge…" He sang in a deep, somewhat seductive tone, "In pursuit of that wish which till now has been silent…silent. I have brought you, that our passions may fuse and merge…in your mind, you've already succumbed to me, dropped all defenses, completely succumbed to me…now you are here with me…no second thoughts. You've decided…decided…" He then slowly made his way over to husky, and suddenly, Jenna began to see a change in the hybrid. It almost felt like he too was in a trance, but this time, he moved in a more entrancing way, far than he did when they first met.

   "Past the point of no return…" He continued, his body slowly swaying side to side, "No backward glances…The games we've played till now are at an end…Past all thought of if, or when…no use resisting! Abandon thought and let the dream descend! What raging fire will flood the soul? What rich desire unlocks its door? What sweet seduction lies, before us?" On saying that last line, a sly smile appeared on his lips, which made Jenna blush.

   "Past the point of return…the final threshold! What warm, unspoken secrets will we learn…? Beyond the point of no return…"

   Jenna hadn't noticed it, but this song was certainly romantic, almost 'sexy' in a way, and she felt like he was singing his heart out at this point. She knew she had to somehow upstage him, perhaps even try to match his skill. It was his piece after all, and she definitely wanted to make him proud.

   "You have brought me…" She began, as her crystal-clear voice flowed smoothly out of its throat, "To that moment where words run dry…to that moment where speech disappears into silence…silence. I have come here, hardly knowing the reason why. In my mind I've already imagined, our bodies entwining, defenseless and silent. And now I am here with you, no turning back, I've decided…decided…"

   The husky decided to lead the masked wolf-dog over to the guest room with the satin bed, for reasons she couldn't fully understand. However, as she sang, Jenna could feel something rile up in her body. At first it felt like some kind of chilling sensation. It felt different from whenever she sang on stage or during practice. It was a new kind of feeling, an incredible, but dark sort of feeling. She could feel it in her bones, her hairs standing on end, and her body trembled with ecstasy. She wasn't sure why she was feeling this way, but since she started singing it began, and there was no way she could stop it.

   "Past the point of return...," She continued, flashing an artful expression on her face, "No going back now, our passion play has now at last begun," As she sang, the husky slowly made her way across from Balto, playfully rubbing her bushy tail against his cheek. The hybrid shivered, as he wasn't expecting her character to somehow change, but he loved it either way.

   "Past all thoughts of right, or wrong," She then made her way over to the bed, and placed a paw on it, "One final question," She slowly rolled onto her back, her slender, furry body being displayed for the hybrid next to her, "How long should we to wait, before we're one? When will the blood begin to race, the sleeping bud burst in to bloom, when will the flames at last consume us?"

   She then laid down on her side, as Balto slowly caressed her face, smiling, his eyes glowing. He then slowly lifted her head with his paw, as they both sang, their voices almost matching in power and passion, "Past the point of no return…the final threshold!" They then drew their arms around other, as they held onto each other for dear life, "The bridge is crossed, so stand, and watch it burn!" They both trembled, almost like they couldn't control the emotions that were flowing through their bodies, their voices slowly down and becoming soft, "We've past the point...of no...return…"

   The song was complete, but neither dog made a sound. They continued to stare at each other, almost like they truly believed in each other, and the love they felt had encompassed them both.

   Suddenly, seemed to have a look of sadness come into his eyes, as he softly sang a line that was not present in the song they had written, "Say, you'll, share with me…one love…one lifetime…lead me, save me from my solitude…say you'll want me, with you, here, beside you!" His voice then became a loud cry, a sob of desperation almost, "Anywhere, you go, let me go too! Jenna, that's all I ask of…" In a swift motion, he grabbed the mask that lied the secret that Jenna had longed to see, and one that Balto finally decided to reveal, and tore it off from his face.

 

 

   "Then what?" Steele asked the husky, who seemed completely frozen in fear, "He tore of the mask, and then what happened?"

   Jenna was practically shaking with fear at this point, but she had no choice but to continue...

 

 

   Time seemed to stop, the entire lair became dark, with the candles barely illuminating the walls around the two dogs, who were almost frozen in their spots. Balto had suddenly broken that barrier between him and his face, for the first time in many a year, and he let the ebony mask drop to the floor, presenting the face before the husky, who was mere inches away.

   However, she realized at that very moment, as her expression turned from shock to complete and utter horror, as that terrifying visage stared at her with a kind of terrible, sick grin, she could feel a scream almost come out of her chest, but nothing came out.

   The face was a dull red, but it wasn't normal. By God, she wanted to, she had to look away! But she couldn't, there was no way she could look away from that monstrous face. The fur from the once enchanting hybrid's face was somehow not there, it simply was not there. All that was left was that redness, that dull blood tissue that had somehow incased over his face. She shook with fright as she saw that his nose was not present, but instead of a regular cartilage, there lay a large, black hole, from where she could see the inside of it clearly. As her gaze shifted to his mouth, the fur on his chin was still present, as it was on his ears, but that didn't exactly help much. She noticed with disgust that his lips were no longer present to shield that horrible grin on his face. It wasn't exactly a grin, it was more like the entirety of his canines were showing, up to the part where they ended on his cheeks. His yellow eyes continued to stare at her, as they seemed to be lodged inside large, black holes. His face truly was a skull head; the rumors had been proven. He truly had a face of death.

   Neither of the dogs made a sound, and they scarcely breathed. The rest of the world seemed to fade away, and all that was left was the husky, staring with complete shock at the gruesome image before her. Somehow, in some horrible way, the incredible dog that she once knew was now somehow replaced with this creature, his desperate gaze turning into that of pain and anger. Suddenly, Jenna's



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June 30, 2016
Usa Male
Thanks, it's no problem at all. I'm still working on the rest of the story, just been a while since i've been on here.

Ah yes, the Inspector is a character that I've created solely for this story, and perhaps I might continue to use him in some other stories (if not with animals than with humans, as creating detective characters is always fun.)

Also, his progression from naive detective to Inspector of Police is based off of Gaston Leroux's short story, The Case of the Yellow Room, just a little fun reference.

June 24, 2016
Usa Male
Pages 14-16
Quite gripping. You did the boxkeeper's description of her encounter very well.

June 23, 2016
Usa Male
Back after a long hiatus.

Page 13 (end of Chapter 3): Uh-huh; that's the Steele I remember, alright.

The detective character, Jean-Claude, intrigues - particularly as I've recently begun work on a couple of police-related stories.

My apologies for taking so long to get back to this.

April 30, 2016
Usa Male
Hopefully you'll enjoy them! :)

April 30, 2016
Usa Male
That all makes sense. btw, I've pasted the next several pages to a document for offline reading.

February 23, 2016
Usa Male
I totally know what you mean. Jenna and Steele just seem like a very unlikely couple. It's like Nala and Scar in the Lion King. You just don't do it!
But I can assure you, there will be some good Jenna and Balto scenes in this as well. ;)

Yeah, I've noticed that you're into mostly anthro Balto fanfics, and I just wanted to clear up that yes, they, and everyone else in the story, is a feral animal, not an anthro one (I said that even though they're anthropomorphic, I was mostly referring to the definition, not necessarily stating that they were anthro characters.)

I don't know, I just felt it was sort of appropriate. Somebody actually commented on that as some point, and was wondering as to why I did that. I mostly wanted to keep them in their original forms since everyone is mostly familiar with it, and it's also reminiscent with movies such as All Dogs Go To Heaven, where some scenes have characters doing what they do in my story (wearing clothing, holding objects, etc.) Yes, I know, dogs don't wear clothes, but I think it's a fun little addition, just for the sake of this fan fic.

Also, that's kind of the whole point of this part. Jenna and Steele haven't met in like 13 years or so (well, just for this story anyway) so it would make sense for her not to recognize him.

- Dante

February 23, 2016
Usa Male
Just chiming in here, since you and JC kind of lead into it; the first project on our collab list will not be anthro - just in case anyone was concerned about that.

Also, on to Page 12. Not bad, especially for a Jenna/Steele scene (which I usually detest, so getting a "not bad" out of me for one is pretty big). The description of them moving on all fours kind of threw me because when you describe them in clothes and so on my mind naturally drifts to a more "anthro" version of them. Also, I was kind of surprised at how long it took Jenna to connect the dots. Other than that, it's good.

February 21, 2016
Usa Male
I'm glad that you've enjoyed it. To tell you the truth, I'm also a purist for the original forms of the characters. And even though I stated that in the introduction, they are anthropomorphic, I was referring to that they have the same characteristics of the Balto film, they just have more human like qualities to them, such as wearing clothes and such. Of course anyone can interpret it in their own way, I hint in some of the chapters that they are still in their original feral forms.

Also, don't feel bad if you're not analyzing every aspect of the story. I'll take anything that I can get when it comes to comments or critiques. As long as someone enjoys it, it's good enough for me! :)

Yeah, it's a long one, since I wrote it in chapters, but I decided to just put the whole thing here. Might as well, but I didn't think it'd be as long as I originally thought.

Oh, I don't consider myself to be that advanced. I've just had years of experience, what with English always being my favorite subject in school. Always has. I may not write like the greats, but I know exactly what to put down, in order to give the reader something cool and interesting to read. And I'm glad you've enjoyed thus far! :)

February 20, 2016
Usa Male
O' Cap'n My Cap'n!
Okay, so, I have been pouring gradually through this, and I must admit, I am enjoying it! You have a keen writing style, which is pretty advanced (considering the relative writing skills of the average fan writer). A few thoughts:

1. I will continue to read the whole thing but, given that I have completed at least a few chapters, I feel that I have gotten the entire gist of this, enough to comment on it...

2. As I mentioned to DT with his recent submission, I am a purist when it comes to the characters. While I love seeing them in good and effective crossovers, I really am not a fan of anthro concepts. Now, that being said, you HAVE crafted an entertaining and engaging story line here, and it would be untrue to suggest that I am not enjoying it!

3. I guess the only anthro setting I ever have enjoyed (and continue to) is that created by Disney for the Robin Hood movie. For me, that worked. And I guess I have seen it that was because I viewed it years ago as a kid. It's another great crossover. And I SUSPECT that the "Zootopia" film will be likewise for me...I even have already made up my mind that it could work as a modern-day future of the Disney Robin Hood setting. Now that I can get behind! Not taking anything away from what you've crafted here of course.

4. While I am not a fan of the Phantom of the Opera epic (though I know the basics of the story, and went to read a full outline of it to get myself prepped for this read), I know it is a great work of literature, and I totally see why you chose it. Especially given the fact that you are a fan of that story.

5. I'm not much of a "Monday-morning quarterback", and I personally don't like to minutely analyze chapter and verse in comments. So you won't see that much from me (and I hope I'm not letting you down in that regard). The size of this work makes it very intimidating to try and flip back through and locate something to analyze in comments. I hope you don't mind!

All that aside, you really have crafted a very good story here so far, and I am impressed! It is a LOOOONG one (lol), perhaps the longest I've seen on Animation Source (as far as I can recall anyway), but I understand why it is as long as it is.

Best of luck with Part 2!

February 08, 2016
Usa Male
UPDATE: The 2nd part of this story is still being worked on, however, for those of you who don't wish to wait for the entire thing to be posted here, this story is also uploaded and updated on my DeviantArt account: HydeCorner, and on my Fanfiction account: Dante Frost.
Once I'm finished with the 2nd part, I will upload the entire thing here. Until then, feel free to follow along either my DeviantArt account, or on my Fanfiction account.

Also, for future stories, I am currently working with Dragon Tamer (Author of the Toby series and Balto's Treasure Island) or Omnitrix 12 on Fanfiction.net for a collab story. Be on the look out for that in the near future.

Peace!

- Dante Frost

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