performing?"

   Jenna didn't like where this was going. It almost sounded like she was being suspected of killing the Chief of the Flies.

   "I don't know," She repeated, getting a bit nervous "What are you getting at?"

   "I was just about to answer that." Jean-Claude crossed his arms, "What I'm getting at is that his ghost has constantly praised you, Mademoiselle, and from what the notes say that the managers have received from him, he clearly wants you in the lead role of every opera, including Faust. So, forgive me for asking, but, do you have something to do with this?"

   It was clear to the Shepard that Jenna was getting nervous, but who wouldn't if they were accused of murder?

   "No, why? Do you think I killed him?"

   "Well, no, but I think you're some kind of an accomplice. For instance, from what the ghost has said about you, it almost seems like he admires you, and would probably do anything for you, and punish those that would oppose that."

   "What?" Jenna was aghast that she would take part in a murder. "I didn't know that."

   "He seems to fancy you, Mademoiselle, but there's one thing that I don't understand. Why would he do this for you?"

   "I don't know, but wouldn't that be dangerous, Monsieur? To be in cahoots with a criminal?"

   Hmm, never thought of that, and she thought of that rather quickly. She's definitely more intelligent than I thought. Ok, if that's how she wants to play this game, that's fine. I've got something for her, something that I've been meaning to ask her about.

   "Mademoiselle, I have another question for you. I've noticed from what your two friends, Slyvie and Dixie, they've said they heard you speaking with a "voice" in your room, one that seemed to be singing alongside you. They said you were meeting with your "teacher"

   "And, forgive me asking, but how come you don't seem to know that he's doing this? If you are correct that this Angel of Music is your teacher and companion, and from the evidence that proves that the Opera Ghost is a phantom that disguises himself, and he can speak to others, well, that proves something to me. It proves that this Angel of Music is the Opera Ghost, and, if he really is a criminal, then this means you've been meeting with a criminal, not an Angel. Also, if this ghost would do something for you, then that means you probably told him to kill Buquet, or the ghost killed him to display a warning to all who would oppose his admiration for you."

   Jenna seemed completely stunned after Jean-Claude's assumption was told. She couldn't believe what she was hearing, as this all seemed to point to her being an accomplice with a murderer.

   "Do you think I'm a murderer?" Jenna asked, clearly upset by the Inspector accusation, "Monsieur, I had nothing to do with what happened. I was completely humiliated by Carlotta, I was made a laughingstock because of her, and all of a sudden you think I killed Buqeut because of it."

   "Madame, I never said you killed him directly. I assumed you did, but I also said the ghost did this, which makes more sense. Still, if you have something to do with this, then you will be suspected as an accomplice. It's not a 100% proof exactly, but it's close, very close."

   Jenna glowered, "Monsieur Inspector, I don't have anything to do with this. I don't know why, but it seems like everyone hates me now. The entire audience insulted me, and accused me of no formal training, almost like I didn't deserve to be here! Maybe you're one of them, maybe you're just one of them, trying to pull me down like the rest of them!"

   The Inspector could see the tears welling up in her eyes. Hmm, maybe I was too harsh. I guess I should keep my thoughts to myself, but this is the only way to see if they're right. But, in her current state, I don't think she was capable of murder. Her friends, and some of the staff said she was a nice dog, one that wouldn't hurt a fly. Still, I'm sure if I was humiliated like this in front of hundreds of dogs, then I'd want to do something about it, but murder does sound extreme. It's clear she has nothing to do with this, but there has to be something she's hiding, I just know it…still…

   "Mademoiselle," Jean-Claude began, "Maybe I was wrong. I still think you have something on your mind, but murder and revenge is not one of them. I apologize if I upset you."

   "Thank you Monsieur, but I'm just not in the mood right now."

   "I understand. I'll take my leave now." Jean-Claude got up from his seat, "Still, I think that something has to be on your mind." He then pulled out a small card, "So, if you have something to tell me, please, feel free to stop by my office at the Palais de Justice."

   "Thank you, Monsieur," She took the card in her paw, and laid her head back on the desk. Jean-Claude left the costume room, still pondering about this entire thing.

   I know she knows something. That was too obvious a move. I'm sorry, Mademoiselle, but your emotions don't move me. You know something about the Opera Ghost that no one in Paris does, and I'll figure it out soon enough. But, forcing her to tell me about him won't get me anywhere, seeing how she wants to keep it a secret. I'll have to find some other way to the truth.

   Monsieur Fantome, you're playing a dangerous game, you really are. I think Mademoiselle Daae has been taken under your spell, and I'll find out who you are, soon enough…

 

 

   Steele de Chagny had waited for about three weeks, but it felt like a lifetime for the young Vicomte. He had promised to his brother that he would let Jenna have some room to breathe, and until the time was right, he would try again to win her over.

   Now, on September 19th, a rather chilly Friday morning, Steele thought that this was a good day to try and get him and Jenna back together again.

   She has to say yes, Steele thought, as he clumsily tied a ribbon around the bouquet of red roses, I hope she's not too angry with me. The malamute then carefully took the flowers in his teeth, and walked over to the door, but upon opening it up, he saw their butler coming up to him.

   "Oh, there you are, Monsieur Vicomte, I have a letter for you." Steele took the letter in his paws, and saw that it was addressed to him. He opened it, and was shocked to read its contents:

   To Steele de Chagny,

   Steele, I know that we haven't really been great friends, and I know that you want to be with me, and I do too. I honestly, truly do, but I'm afraid we can't. My teacher has forbid me to do so, as he says being with "another dog" would distract me from my career.

   I'm sorry, Steele, but we can't be with each other. If you truly care for me, you'd respect me for my decision.

   Your childhood friend,

   Jenna

   "Monsieur Vicomte, is something the matter?" The butler asked the malamute, who seemed upset by what the letter had said. He felt the excitement in his heart drift away, almost crushed by the fact the Jenna didn't want to see him.

   I don't get it, what is she thinking? Steele thought, ripping the letter to shreds and throwing the roses on the ground. Maybe she really does hate me. He sat down on the ground, clearly upset, as he didn't even want to think about his once childhood friend.

   He then heard footsteps, and he saw his brother come out from one of the rooms wearing his morning robe, "Steele, what's the matter?" He ran over to him, as it looked like Steele was clearly troubled.

   "Why would you care?" Steele frowned, looking away from the black husky.

   "Stephen, what happened? Is it because of Mademoiselle Daae?"

   "How'd you know?" The malamute asked, looking at his brother.

   Philippe chuckled slightly, "I saw the roses, somewhat over doing it I think; I prefer yellow."

   "It's not for you, Philippe, it's for Jenna." Steele sighed. "That was until she gave me a certain letter in the mail." He pointed over to the ripped up pieces of paper on the carpet.

   "What did it say?"

   "She said she didn't want to see me ever again. Apparently, her 'teacher' thinks I would distract her from her career. What kind of nonsense is that?"

   "Ouch," Philippe grimaced, "Well, maybe it's for the best."

   "What?" Steele was shocked that his brother agreed with the singer's decision, "Why wouldn't she want to be with me?"

   "Maybe because you can be rather 'tough'." Philippe replied, "A jerk, overconfident, impatient, a bit of a hot-head---,"

   "I get it!" Steele groaned, "But, it doesn't make sense. I thought she would come running back to me. I mean, I was going to try again today, but maybe that's not

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June 30, 2016
Usa Male
Thanks, it's no problem at all. I'm still working on the rest of the story, just been a while since i've been on here.

Ah yes, the Inspector is a character that I've created solely for this story, and perhaps I might continue to use him in some other stories (if not with animals than with humans, as creating detective characters is always fun.)

Also, his progression from naive detective to Inspector of Police is based off of Gaston Leroux's short story, The Case of the Yellow Room, just a little fun reference.

June 24, 2016
Usa Male
Pages 14-16
Quite gripping. You did the boxkeeper's description of her encounter very well.

June 23, 2016
Usa Male
Back after a long hiatus.

Page 13 (end of Chapter 3): Uh-huh; that's the Steele I remember, alright.

The detective character, Jean-Claude, intrigues - particularly as I've recently begun work on a couple of police-related stories.

My apologies for taking so long to get back to this.

April 30, 2016
Usa Male
Hopefully you'll enjoy them! :)

April 30, 2016
Usa Male
That all makes sense. btw, I've pasted the next several pages to a document for offline reading.

February 23, 2016
Usa Male
I totally know what you mean. Jenna and Steele just seem like a very unlikely couple. It's like Nala and Scar in the Lion King. You just don't do it!
But I can assure you, there will be some good Jenna and Balto scenes in this as well. ;)

Yeah, I've noticed that you're into mostly anthro Balto fanfics, and I just wanted to clear up that yes, they, and everyone else in the story, is a feral animal, not an anthro one (I said that even though they're anthropomorphic, I was mostly referring to the definition, not necessarily stating that they were anthro characters.)

I don't know, I just felt it was sort of appropriate. Somebody actually commented on that as some point, and was wondering as to why I did that. I mostly wanted to keep them in their original forms since everyone is mostly familiar with it, and it's also reminiscent with movies such as All Dogs Go To Heaven, where some scenes have characters doing what they do in my story (wearing clothing, holding objects, etc.) Yes, I know, dogs don't wear clothes, but I think it's a fun little addition, just for the sake of this fan fic.

Also, that's kind of the whole point of this part. Jenna and Steele haven't met in like 13 years or so (well, just for this story anyway) so it would make sense for her not to recognize him.

- Dante

February 23, 2016
Usa Male
Just chiming in here, since you and JC kind of lead into it; the first project on our collab list will not be anthro - just in case anyone was concerned about that.

Also, on to Page 12. Not bad, especially for a Jenna/Steele scene (which I usually detest, so getting a "not bad" out of me for one is pretty big). The description of them moving on all fours kind of threw me because when you describe them in clothes and so on my mind naturally drifts to a more "anthro" version of them. Also, I was kind of surprised at how long it took Jenna to connect the dots. Other than that, it's good.

February 21, 2016
Usa Male
I'm glad that you've enjoyed it. To tell you the truth, I'm also a purist for the original forms of the characters. And even though I stated that in the introduction, they are anthropomorphic, I was referring to that they have the same characteristics of the Balto film, they just have more human like qualities to them, such as wearing clothes and such. Of course anyone can interpret it in their own way, I hint in some of the chapters that they are still in their original feral forms.

Also, don't feel bad if you're not analyzing every aspect of the story. I'll take anything that I can get when it comes to comments or critiques. As long as someone enjoys it, it's good enough for me! :)

Yeah, it's a long one, since I wrote it in chapters, but I decided to just put the whole thing here. Might as well, but I didn't think it'd be as long as I originally thought.

Oh, I don't consider myself to be that advanced. I've just had years of experience, what with English always being my favorite subject in school. Always has. I may not write like the greats, but I know exactly what to put down, in order to give the reader something cool and interesting to read. And I'm glad you've enjoyed thus far! :)

February 20, 2016
Usa Male
O' Cap'n My Cap'n!
Okay, so, I have been pouring gradually through this, and I must admit, I am enjoying it! You have a keen writing style, which is pretty advanced (considering the relative writing skills of the average fan writer). A few thoughts:

1. I will continue to read the whole thing but, given that I have completed at least a few chapters, I feel that I have gotten the entire gist of this, enough to comment on it...

2. As I mentioned to DT with his recent submission, I am a purist when it comes to the characters. While I love seeing them in good and effective crossovers, I really am not a fan of anthro concepts. Now, that being said, you HAVE crafted an entertaining and engaging story line here, and it would be untrue to suggest that I am not enjoying it!

3. I guess the only anthro setting I ever have enjoyed (and continue to) is that created by Disney for the Robin Hood movie. For me, that worked. And I guess I have seen it that was because I viewed it years ago as a kid. It's another great crossover. And I SUSPECT that the "Zootopia" film will be likewise for me...I even have already made up my mind that it could work as a modern-day future of the Disney Robin Hood setting. Now that I can get behind! Not taking anything away from what you've crafted here of course.

4. While I am not a fan of the Phantom of the Opera epic (though I know the basics of the story, and went to read a full outline of it to get myself prepped for this read), I know it is a great work of literature, and I totally see why you chose it. Especially given the fact that you are a fan of that story.

5. I'm not much of a "Monday-morning quarterback", and I personally don't like to minutely analyze chapter and verse in comments. So you won't see that much from me (and I hope I'm not letting you down in that regard). The size of this work makes it very intimidating to try and flip back through and locate something to analyze in comments. I hope you don't mind!

All that aside, you really have crafted a very good story here so far, and I am impressed! It is a LOOOONG one (lol), perhaps the longest I've seen on Animation Source (as far as I can recall anyway), but I understand why it is as long as it is.

Best of luck with Part 2!

February 08, 2016
Usa Male
UPDATE: The 2nd part of this story is still being worked on, however, for those of you who don't wish to wait for the entire thing to be posted here, this story is also uploaded and updated on my DeviantArt account: HydeCorner, and on my Fanfiction account: Dante Frost.
Once I'm finished with the 2nd part, I will upload the entire thing here. Until then, feel free to follow along either my DeviantArt account, or on my Fanfiction account.

Also, for future stories, I am currently working with Dragon Tamer (Author of the Toby series and Balto's Treasure Island) or Omnitrix 12 on Fanfiction.net for a collab story. Be on the look out for that in the near future.

Peace!

- Dante Frost

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