because you were a costume girl, and I never thought that you were anything but a costume girl. But, when I heard you take the role of Marguerite, I was astounded by what they said about you. I am truly impressed."

   "But, I heard you were upset me replacing at the Gala."

   "Oh, I overreacted, the bronchitis made me a bit cranky. I think you deserved it. In fact, I think you should take my place as Marguerite from now on."

   Jenna came to a stop, "You're not serious, are you?" She had always dreamed to be accepted by the singers of the Opera House, including La Carlotta, and now that dream might actually come true.

   "Dead serious, Jenna dear, I'll tell my friends to come tonight and cheer you on."

   "Wow, thank you." Jenna smiled, "But, why are you being so nice to me? Last I checked you were scolding me for not making your dress perfect."

   "That's all in the past, Jenna." La Carlotta smiled, "Now run along, you have an opera to perform, Mademoiselle."

   As the poodle opened the door to Dressing Room 1 for the husky, her mouth turned into a devilish smile, seeing how she easily fell for her façade.

   Step 1 is complete. Now, for Step 2…

 

 

   Later that evening, the second performance of Faust was to be performed, and instead of Carlotta, Jenna was going to be playing Marguerite again, and whilst she was getting ready for her small scene in Act 2, La Carlotta had done some planning. As you can see, the poodle's plan to ruin Jenna's career was coming into bloom, and even though she seemed to have gained Jenna's trust, she knew that Jenna would have any second doubts about this sudden recognition. Monsieur Harris had also done his part. She would generously reward him for his efforts, but there was still more to be done.

   She had called up all of her friends and supporters in Paris to come see her newest "camarade", and she boasted and bragged that she was going to completely stun them with her voice.

   The only thing she said was wait for the "signal" to give her what she deserved.

   Oh, they'll be stunned alright, she thought, as she knocked on the door to Jenna's dressing room again, carrying a bag in her teeth.

   Jenna gasped, almost dropping her powder when she saw her door suddenly open, "Oh, um hello Carlotta, what are you doing here?" She asked the poodle.

   "Sorry about the sudden appearance, but I wanted to give you this." She then pulled out what looked like a bottle of champagne that looked unmarked.

   "Oh, um thanks…again." Jenna replied.

   "No need to thank me, Jenna, but I just wanted to give you something special, and by special, I mean, a little good luck." She then pulled out two small glasses, popped the top of the bottle, and poured the clear liquid into the glasses

   "Here, drink this, I always have a little sip of champagne before a performance."

   Jenna took the glass, "But, it's already Act Two."

   Carlotta frowned, "Well, it doesn't matter, you'll do great anyway." Jenna seemed like Carlotta was serious about all of this, and the two singers drank down their glass.

   "Now, go out there and show them up, Jennifer." La Carlotta smiled, "I'll be cheering you on."

   Jenna smiled awkwardly, as Carlotta closed the door on her way out. The husky got back to powdering herself, despite feeling a bit odd from the champagne, but she shrugged it off as nothing.

   Act Two started up, and the stage was filled with songs filled with cheer as a crowd of town's people, students, and soldiers. After their ensemble finally ended, and the soldier Valentin had declared to his companion Siebel to look after Marguerite whilst he was away at war, who also fails to defeat Mephistopheles, Faust tries to woo the young peasant girl (Jenna).

   "Ne permettrez-vous pas, ma belle demoiselle, qu'on vous offre le bras, pour faire le chemin?" Faust sang, as he offered to escort Marguerite to wherever she pleased, out of adoration.

   "Non, monsieur! Je ne suis demoiselle ni belle, demoiselle, ni belle, et je n'ai pas…" Marguerite replied defiantly, rejecting his offer, but seemingly out of nowhere, Jenna felt something off about her voice. Her voice suddenly became dry, and she was unsure as to why she was feeling odd. She was forced to stop, which caused the audience to stare in confusion.

   Come on, keep singing, it's probably nothing, just clear your throat, Jenna thought to herself quickly, and after immediately taking a few quick seconds to clear her voice, she tried the verse again.

   "Non, monsieur! Je ne suis demoiselle…ni…belle…" Jenna had to stop midway, as her voice grew weak and hoarse, as the notes from her mouth became small and wheezy. She covered her mouth, as she wasn't sure as to what she was wrong with her.

   However, this was just part of this terrible ordeal. The dogs that took up most of the front of the bottom rows were Carlotta's fans and friends, who were ordered to wait for the "signal" to in fact the poodle's horrible scheme.

   And as soon as she fumbled her words, they knew exactly what to do.

   "She really does sound like a crock!" One of Carlotta's close friends rang out, causing the other dogs around her to laugh. Somehow, the other audience members weren't sure what was happening, and even though some of them kind of thought that this was rather odd that their once loved singer had messed up, terribly, and with the previous accusation by Monsieur Harris, they eventually started laughing as well. In fact, some of those fools actually believed that critic's lie, and they started jarring the poor husky as well.

   "What is this?" "I knew she couldn't sing!" and "Go back to Alaska!" Were just some of the horrible insults that were thrown at the husky onstage, who was covering her face with embarrassment with her paws. The other opera singers that were around her didn't like what was going on, and immediately crowded around her, and started yelling at the audience members for unfairly bashing the young singer.

   As this terrible scene went on, and whilst the Managers tried to calm everyone down, Monsieur Belmont, Dixie, and Slyvie took the now weeping husky back to her dressing room.

   "Don't listen to them, Jenna." Dixie assured the husky, handing her a tissue, whilst she lied on the couch, "What happened anyway?"

   "I…I don't know…" Jenna stammered, as she wiped the tears from her eyes, "I was doing fine…I guess I messed up. This is all my fault!" She then covered her face again with her paws.

   "Maybe we should leave her right now," Monsieur Belmont requested, "Come along ladies." Dixie and Slyvie were somewhat upset with what had just occurred, but who would do something so cruel?

   Well, why don't we go backstage, and ask a certain giggling poodle diva?

   I did it! She thought, as wanted to jump for joy, that costume dog will be no more after this! Now then, for the final step…

   After a few minutes of searching, she managed to find Monsieur Belmont, who was a bit worried about the husky singer.

   "Oh, don't worry about her, I'm sure she'll be fine." Monsieur Belmont told her.

   "The poor dear…but, who's going to play the role of Marguerite?" Carlotta asked over dramatically.

   Monsieur Belmont thought for a moment, and he came to the conclusion, "Why don't you, Madame, and try and save this performance?"

   "Oh, I couldn't," The poodle blushed, "But…if you insist,"

   "I do, and-," La Carlotta then took hold of Monsieur Belmont, and they rushed off to Dressing Room 1.

   La Carlotta entered the dressing room, and found Jenna moping on the couch.

   "Oh, you poor thing," She cooed, putting a paw on her back, "I'm so sorry Jenna,"

   "You don't have to apologize," Jenna replied sadly, "It's my fault."

   "Oh, that's not true."

   "How do you know? That was the most horrible experience on my life! I don't think I'll ever sing again."

   "Jenny, honey, look at me," The husky looked at the poodle straight in the eye, "Listen, I'm going to be honest with you…" She then paused, and suddenly smiled, "I think that's a good idea, a very good idea. So, maybe you should get going, costume dog."

   Jenna fell silent as she let what Carlotta just said sink in. Carlotta then got up from her spot, and went over to the vanity mirror, "You don't belong here in, costume dog, not with the elite that the Canine deserves, such as myself. Now, if you don't mind, a certain prima donna needs to get ready for her spotlight."

   The husky walked over to the door, feeling completely ashamed and terrible at the fact that she was the victim of the



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June 30, 2016
Usa Male
Thanks, it's no problem at all. I'm still working on the rest of the story, just been a while since i've been on here.

Ah yes, the Inspector is a character that I've created solely for this story, and perhaps I might continue to use him in some other stories (if not with animals than with humans, as creating detective characters is always fun.)

Also, his progression from naive detective to Inspector of Police is based off of Gaston Leroux's short story, The Case of the Yellow Room, just a little fun reference.

June 24, 2016
Usa Male
Pages 14-16
Quite gripping. You did the boxkeeper's description of her encounter very well.

June 23, 2016
Usa Male
Back after a long hiatus.

Page 13 (end of Chapter 3): Uh-huh; that's the Steele I remember, alright.

The detective character, Jean-Claude, intrigues - particularly as I've recently begun work on a couple of police-related stories.

My apologies for taking so long to get back to this.

April 30, 2016
Usa Male
Hopefully you'll enjoy them! :)

April 30, 2016
Usa Male
That all makes sense. btw, I've pasted the next several pages to a document for offline reading.

February 23, 2016
Usa Male
I totally know what you mean. Jenna and Steele just seem like a very unlikely couple. It's like Nala and Scar in the Lion King. You just don't do it!
But I can assure you, there will be some good Jenna and Balto scenes in this as well. ;)

Yeah, I've noticed that you're into mostly anthro Balto fanfics, and I just wanted to clear up that yes, they, and everyone else in the story, is a feral animal, not an anthro one (I said that even though they're anthropomorphic, I was mostly referring to the definition, not necessarily stating that they were anthro characters.)

I don't know, I just felt it was sort of appropriate. Somebody actually commented on that as some point, and was wondering as to why I did that. I mostly wanted to keep them in their original forms since everyone is mostly familiar with it, and it's also reminiscent with movies such as All Dogs Go To Heaven, where some scenes have characters doing what they do in my story (wearing clothing, holding objects, etc.) Yes, I know, dogs don't wear clothes, but I think it's a fun little addition, just for the sake of this fan fic.

Also, that's kind of the whole point of this part. Jenna and Steele haven't met in like 13 years or so (well, just for this story anyway) so it would make sense for her not to recognize him.

- Dante

February 23, 2016
Usa Male
Just chiming in here, since you and JC kind of lead into it; the first project on our collab list will not be anthro - just in case anyone was concerned about that.

Also, on to Page 12. Not bad, especially for a Jenna/Steele scene (which I usually detest, so getting a "not bad" out of me for one is pretty big). The description of them moving on all fours kind of threw me because when you describe them in clothes and so on my mind naturally drifts to a more "anthro" version of them. Also, I was kind of surprised at how long it took Jenna to connect the dots. Other than that, it's good.

February 21, 2016
Usa Male
I'm glad that you've enjoyed it. To tell you the truth, I'm also a purist for the original forms of the characters. And even though I stated that in the introduction, they are anthropomorphic, I was referring to that they have the same characteristics of the Balto film, they just have more human like qualities to them, such as wearing clothes and such. Of course anyone can interpret it in their own way, I hint in some of the chapters that they are still in their original feral forms.

Also, don't feel bad if you're not analyzing every aspect of the story. I'll take anything that I can get when it comes to comments or critiques. As long as someone enjoys it, it's good enough for me! :)

Yeah, it's a long one, since I wrote it in chapters, but I decided to just put the whole thing here. Might as well, but I didn't think it'd be as long as I originally thought.

Oh, I don't consider myself to be that advanced. I've just had years of experience, what with English always being my favorite subject in school. Always has. I may not write like the greats, but I know exactly what to put down, in order to give the reader something cool and interesting to read. And I'm glad you've enjoyed thus far! :)

February 20, 2016
Usa Male
O' Cap'n My Cap'n!
Okay, so, I have been pouring gradually through this, and I must admit, I am enjoying it! You have a keen writing style, which is pretty advanced (considering the relative writing skills of the average fan writer). A few thoughts:

1. I will continue to read the whole thing but, given that I have completed at least a few chapters, I feel that I have gotten the entire gist of this, enough to comment on it...

2. As I mentioned to DT with his recent submission, I am a purist when it comes to the characters. While I love seeing them in good and effective crossovers, I really am not a fan of anthro concepts. Now, that being said, you HAVE crafted an entertaining and engaging story line here, and it would be untrue to suggest that I am not enjoying it!

3. I guess the only anthro setting I ever have enjoyed (and continue to) is that created by Disney for the Robin Hood movie. For me, that worked. And I guess I have seen it that was because I viewed it years ago as a kid. It's another great crossover. And I SUSPECT that the "Zootopia" film will be likewise for me...I even have already made up my mind that it could work as a modern-day future of the Disney Robin Hood setting. Now that I can get behind! Not taking anything away from what you've crafted here of course.

4. While I am not a fan of the Phantom of the Opera epic (though I know the basics of the story, and went to read a full outline of it to get myself prepped for this read), I know it is a great work of literature, and I totally see why you chose it. Especially given the fact that you are a fan of that story.

5. I'm not much of a "Monday-morning quarterback", and I personally don't like to minutely analyze chapter and verse in comments. So you won't see that much from me (and I hope I'm not letting you down in that regard). The size of this work makes it very intimidating to try and flip back through and locate something to analyze in comments. I hope you don't mind!

All that aside, you really have crafted a very good story here so far, and I am impressed! It is a LOOOONG one (lol), perhaps the longest I've seen on Animation Source (as far as I can recall anyway), but I understand why it is as long as it is.

Best of luck with Part 2!

February 08, 2016
Usa Male
UPDATE: The 2nd part of this story is still being worked on, however, for those of you who don't wish to wait for the entire thing to be posted here, this story is also uploaded and updated on my DeviantArt account: HydeCorner, and on my Fanfiction account: Dante Frost.
Once I'm finished with the 2nd part, I will upload the entire thing here. Until then, feel free to follow along either my DeviantArt account, or on my Fanfiction account.

Also, for future stories, I am currently working with Dragon Tamer (Author of the Toby series and Balto's Treasure Island) or Omnitrix 12 on Fanfiction.net for a collab story. Be on the look out for that in the near future.

Peace!

- Dante Frost

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