orders and threats were all baloney. Still, that is a good point. If we agree to this, then we will risk our reputations-,"

   "What reputations?" Star asked suddenly. The three paused for a moment, as they realized they weren't really all too popular, even if they were managers.

   Kaltag continued, "And if we do not agree to his orders, we could jeopardize, endanger, and risk the lives of everyone at this Opera House."

   "So, are you going to agree?" Nikki asked.

   "As much as I don't want to guys, it looks like we have no choice. If this is what the ghost wants, then we shall give him what he wants." The three nodded in agreement, and proceeded to tell the acting manager to give Jenna the lead role, and prepare for the next day's performance.

 

 

   Just as the ghost had said, this truly was an important night for all, as all of the tickets were sold out, and it being held at the famous Opera Canine was definitely something everyone wanted to see.

   The first 2 acts came by and went, and for the most part, Jenna had never been onstage, except for a few brief appearances, however, she soon won the audience over during Act 3, which displays that popular Jewel Song, in which Marguerite finds a basket of jewels left for her by a mysterious man.

   Jenna, who was completely sunk into her role, placed a few of the necklaces round her neck, and lifted a mirror to her face, gazing at the shining jewelry, as the music thrust itself into the aria.

   "Ahhhhhhhhh…! Je ris de me voir si belle en ce miror," She sang, caressing her face, "Ah! Je ris de me voir si belle en ce miror, est-ce toi, Marguerite, est-ce toi? Réponds-moi, réponds-moi…réponds, réponds, réponds vite!"

   As the husky continued singing, she couldn't help but smile her way though the song, as she had never acted before, and during rehearsals, she was somewhat nervous at playing such a role. Especially since this role was meant for La Carlotta, not for her. Still, she was having the time of her life, as this was an experience unlike anything she had ever felt before. She found it rather funny, as she almost felt like Marguerite, never having been

   As the aria went on, one particular dog wasn't all too pleased with what he was seeing, and he seemed to have a smug look on his face. He was an albino husky with scarlet, almost bloodshot eyes, and his face was usually one that would make dogs refuse to make eye contact with him. Monsieur Harris was one of the toughest critics in Paris, and he had a reputation as being rather arrogant in his reviews, matching his "perfect" point-of-view, and because of this, his search for perfection led him to the Canine, where he was rather stunned by La Carlotta, whom he praised for her voice.

   He had expected to see her this night, but this was not the case, of course, and this made him angry, but he thought it would be an opportune time to take a look at this Daae that everyone talked about in the papers, this mysterious costume dog that took the poodle's place at the Gala.

   Let's just say, he wasn't all too happy when he found out that she "supposedly" never had any formal training in acting or in singing (this was mostly due to everyone's lack of knowledge of her past, and of her teacher). Therefore, he found it completely absurd that a dog like her could have an incredible voice without any vocal training. He knew for a fact that it takes years and years of training and practice in order to get to that level of power, yet this was rather perplexing.

   He jotted down a few notes on his notepad, and he continued to stare at the husky far below, who, as she finished the aria, received yet another standing ovation, as everyone howled and cheered. Monsieur Harris gave a rather slow clap of his paws, as he wasn't all too thrilled with the performance, and he got up and left, not wanting to see anymore. His mind was made up with what review he was going to give and he knew for a fact that everyone would see the husky for who she really was.

   As the husky made his way down the steps outside the Canine, and noticed that La Carlotta was fanning herself inside her carriage, looking rather upset.

   "La Carlotta?" He greeted the poodle, running up to her carriage, "I expected you to be onstage, not off."

   "You can thank those managers, those cons." She then noticed who she was talking to, "Monsieur Harris? Aren't you the one whose been writing my reviews, correct?"

   "Yes, Mademoiselle," He bowed slightly, "You're voice is far greater than that…Daae. I've always thought that."

   "Greater?" She glowered, "My voice is more than that, Monsieur! I deserved that part, I deserved to sing at the Gala, but I was replaced by that dog! I refuse to be pushed to the sidelines! But…" She then grinned evilly, "I can fix that…"

   "Is that so, Mademoiselle? How do you intend on getting your reputation back."

   "I'll need your help, Monsieur Harris, but before you do, I need to know, what do you think of that costume girl?"

   "What do I think?" He asked, folding his arms, "As far as I know, she's never had any experience with music, but I still don't know why she has such a voice. It's so weird."

   "She's gotten lucky, Monsieur, but I will change that, I definitely will." She chuckled, "I have a little plan, and you are going to be part of it, Monsieur. Tomorrow, I will make all of Paris know that she isn't as good as she thinks she is."

   "I already know what I'm going to write about in the papers, and all of Paris will see it."

   "Thank you, Monsieur Harris; you will be brilliant as always!" She smiled, "Make sure you mention me."

   "I will, Mademoiselle, I will." He gave a small smile, "Once everyone knows her faults, you will take her place, and you will rise to the top…but, what are we to do about Mademoiselle Daae?"

   "I don't know, but I'll think of something. In the meantime, don't speak of this to anyone. Just write your review tomorrow after the performance, and I'll take care of the rest."

   "Of course, Mademoiselle," The two then chuckled, as they planned on Jenna's downfall.

 

 

   Meanwhile, the performance had ended, and Jenna was received with a warm praise, as everyone cheered and applauded when she came out during the curtain call. As she made her way to her dressing room, she wasn't sure if she would be able to get through the crowd of staff members who wanted to hand her gifts and paw-shakes and roses and what not. Thankfully, she got through the crowd unscathed, and she gasped when she entered the room.

   Dressing Room 1 was probably the best room in the Canine, as it was originally for the best of the best singers and actors alike. It was mostly pink in color, with pink walls and velvet red carpet. There was a vanity mirror with lights above them, with a few drawers that contained makeup equipment. There was a chair in the corner, and a couch on the other side of the vanity mirror. There was a large mirror that seemed to hide something behind it, but it was probably a closet that no one used. She felt like she belonged in this place, almost like she was meant to play the lead role, just as her Angel had said. It was strange, since her Angel had told her that "tonight was her night to truly shine".

   She walked into the room, and saw that there were a few baskets of flowers in the corner, left by some of the dogs at the performance and some from the staff. She rolled her eyes, as the flowers were mostly tacky, store bought flowers that had laces around them, and she noticed that there was a small package next to one of the baskets, and she groaned when she saw who it was from by looking at the label:

To: Jenna

From: Steele de Chagny

   She wasn't sure what to do with the package, as it wasn't really big, but after the few times they've met, it almost seemed strange that he would send this to her. At the moment, Steele was the last thing she wanted to think of. The guy was a complete jerk that was so full of himself he didn't even notice it! Still…

   He was my friend, she thought, and I thought that we would be able to rekindle that friendship. I know he's changed, but how can I accept that? He's far too different now, and I don't think his attitude will ever change. But, maybe it…oh what am I thinking? I shouldn't be concerned about this. That was then, and this is now, and I shouldn't think that just because we were friends, we can be lovers too…

   Jenna sighed, and placed her paws on the couch's cushion, as she knew thinking about Steele would only increase her frustration, and this wasn't the time to be angry, this was the time to be happy. She had performed in the lead role of Faust, her very first lead role, and she wanted to savor this moment forever.

   Jenna… The husky's ears perked up; as she thought she heard a voice call her name.

   "A-Angel?" She whispered, "Is that you?" She had usually heard



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June 30, 2016
Usa Male
Thanks, it's no problem at all. I'm still working on the rest of the story, just been a while since i've been on here.

Ah yes, the Inspector is a character that I've created solely for this story, and perhaps I might continue to use him in some other stories (if not with animals than with humans, as creating detective characters is always fun.)

Also, his progression from naive detective to Inspector of Police is based off of Gaston Leroux's short story, The Case of the Yellow Room, just a little fun reference.

June 24, 2016
Usa Male
Pages 14-16
Quite gripping. You did the boxkeeper's description of her encounter very well.

June 23, 2016
Usa Male
Back after a long hiatus.

Page 13 (end of Chapter 3): Uh-huh; that's the Steele I remember, alright.

The detective character, Jean-Claude, intrigues - particularly as I've recently begun work on a couple of police-related stories.

My apologies for taking so long to get back to this.

April 30, 2016
Usa Male
Hopefully you'll enjoy them! :)

April 30, 2016
Usa Male
That all makes sense. btw, I've pasted the next several pages to a document for offline reading.

February 23, 2016
Usa Male
I totally know what you mean. Jenna and Steele just seem like a very unlikely couple. It's like Nala and Scar in the Lion King. You just don't do it!
But I can assure you, there will be some good Jenna and Balto scenes in this as well. ;)

Yeah, I've noticed that you're into mostly anthro Balto fanfics, and I just wanted to clear up that yes, they, and everyone else in the story, is a feral animal, not an anthro one (I said that even though they're anthropomorphic, I was mostly referring to the definition, not necessarily stating that they were anthro characters.)

I don't know, I just felt it was sort of appropriate. Somebody actually commented on that as some point, and was wondering as to why I did that. I mostly wanted to keep them in their original forms since everyone is mostly familiar with it, and it's also reminiscent with movies such as All Dogs Go To Heaven, where some scenes have characters doing what they do in my story (wearing clothing, holding objects, etc.) Yes, I know, dogs don't wear clothes, but I think it's a fun little addition, just for the sake of this fan fic.

Also, that's kind of the whole point of this part. Jenna and Steele haven't met in like 13 years or so (well, just for this story anyway) so it would make sense for her not to recognize him.

- Dante

February 23, 2016
Usa Male
Just chiming in here, since you and JC kind of lead into it; the first project on our collab list will not be anthro - just in case anyone was concerned about that.

Also, on to Page 12. Not bad, especially for a Jenna/Steele scene (which I usually detest, so getting a "not bad" out of me for one is pretty big). The description of them moving on all fours kind of threw me because when you describe them in clothes and so on my mind naturally drifts to a more "anthro" version of them. Also, I was kind of surprised at how long it took Jenna to connect the dots. Other than that, it's good.

February 21, 2016
Usa Male
I'm glad that you've enjoyed it. To tell you the truth, I'm also a purist for the original forms of the characters. And even though I stated that in the introduction, they are anthropomorphic, I was referring to that they have the same characteristics of the Balto film, they just have more human like qualities to them, such as wearing clothes and such. Of course anyone can interpret it in their own way, I hint in some of the chapters that they are still in their original feral forms.

Also, don't feel bad if you're not analyzing every aspect of the story. I'll take anything that I can get when it comes to comments or critiques. As long as someone enjoys it, it's good enough for me! :)

Yeah, it's a long one, since I wrote it in chapters, but I decided to just put the whole thing here. Might as well, but I didn't think it'd be as long as I originally thought.

Oh, I don't consider myself to be that advanced. I've just had years of experience, what with English always being my favorite subject in school. Always has. I may not write like the greats, but I know exactly what to put down, in order to give the reader something cool and interesting to read. And I'm glad you've enjoyed thus far! :)

February 20, 2016
Usa Male
O' Cap'n My Cap'n!
Okay, so, I have been pouring gradually through this, and I must admit, I am enjoying it! You have a keen writing style, which is pretty advanced (considering the relative writing skills of the average fan writer). A few thoughts:

1. I will continue to read the whole thing but, given that I have completed at least a few chapters, I feel that I have gotten the entire gist of this, enough to comment on it...

2. As I mentioned to DT with his recent submission, I am a purist when it comes to the characters. While I love seeing them in good and effective crossovers, I really am not a fan of anthro concepts. Now, that being said, you HAVE crafted an entertaining and engaging story line here, and it would be untrue to suggest that I am not enjoying it!

3. I guess the only anthro setting I ever have enjoyed (and continue to) is that created by Disney for the Robin Hood movie. For me, that worked. And I guess I have seen it that was because I viewed it years ago as a kid. It's another great crossover. And I SUSPECT that the "Zootopia" film will be likewise for me...I even have already made up my mind that it could work as a modern-day future of the Disney Robin Hood setting. Now that I can get behind! Not taking anything away from what you've crafted here of course.

4. While I am not a fan of the Phantom of the Opera epic (though I know the basics of the story, and went to read a full outline of it to get myself prepped for this read), I know it is a great work of literature, and I totally see why you chose it. Especially given the fact that you are a fan of that story.

5. I'm not much of a "Monday-morning quarterback", and I personally don't like to minutely analyze chapter and verse in comments. So you won't see that much from me (and I hope I'm not letting you down in that regard). The size of this work makes it very intimidating to try and flip back through and locate something to analyze in comments. I hope you don't mind!

All that aside, you really have crafted a very good story here so far, and I am impressed! It is a LOOOONG one (lol), perhaps the longest I've seen on Animation Source (as far as I can recall anyway), but I understand why it is as long as it is.

Best of luck with Part 2!

February 08, 2016
Usa Male
UPDATE: The 2nd part of this story is still being worked on, however, for those of you who don't wish to wait for the entire thing to be posted here, this story is also uploaded and updated on my DeviantArt account: HydeCorner, and on my Fanfiction account: Dante Frost.
Once I'm finished with the 2nd part, I will upload the entire thing here. Until then, feel free to follow along either my DeviantArt account, or on my Fanfiction account.

Also, for future stories, I am currently working with Dragon Tamer (Author of the Toby series and Balto's Treasure Island) or Omnitrix 12 on Fanfiction.net for a collab story. Be on the look out for that in the near future.

Peace!

- Dante Frost

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