investigation, he saw what looked like a black figure, one that looked like a shadow carrying one of the boxes, and he started asking what the figure was, thinking it was an employee, but he said that as soon as he got near the figure, it seemed to vanish out of sight. He said it was the fastest thief he had ever seen. Though I must say, it is really strange to have a figure cloaked in black stealing things, minimal and trivial things such as food, but it's apparent that he was wearing some kind of black cape or hood over his body, since the waiter said it was rather dark down there. So, in conclusion, this thief was definitely sneaky, and a quick one at that, to be able to take things that quickly, and bolt himself out of there without getting caught. Also, he probably has some good taste in wine, as it comes from Tokay, Hungary. Rather impressive, but I will catch him in the act if he plans of coming back. I will install a few officer dogs there at the Café, if you Messieurs would allow me to do so?"

   The Managers looked at each other, and nodded in response.

   Wow, Monsieur Kaltag thought surprised, he's good. The three were completely blown away with the fact that Jean-Claude had understood so much with the very few details that had been given to him by the waiter.

   "Also, Monsieur Moncharmin, you said in your letter that you would like to speak with me, is that right?"

   "Yes, it's true," The Chinook responded, "and it's about something that has been a pain in my tail for the past few days."

   "Oh, and what might that be?"

   "OK, you might think this is crazy," Kaltag began, "but according to the staff here at the Canine, they believe in what they call an Opera Ghost is haunting this place."

   "Hmm, that's odd," Jean-Claude pondered, placing a claw under his chin, "A detective of mine had mentioned that a while ago."

   Oh, please don't tell me that the police think this is a real thing, Kaltag thought, worried that the entirety of Paris might believe in this ghost.

   "Monsieur Moncharmin, do you know about this Opera Ghost? I was pondering about it on the ride here, and I wonder if you could give me some details about him."

   "Well, OK, but I'm going to tell you right now, these are not my words." Kaltag began, "This 'ghost' is said to be covered in black, wearing a gentledog's outfit, and a long, black cape around his shoulders. He's said to have a large, white skull mask over his head, and piercing yellow eyes that glow in the night. He has large paws, and large ears, and by the way, this comes from the scene-shifter Joseph Buquet, not me Monsieur."

   "Do you believe in the ghost, Monsieur?"

   "Of course not, why would I believe in something so stupid? I am a dog of realism, Monsieur Jean-Claude, and I don't think that it's possible for spirits to roam the Earth. I can't believe that this rumor has spread this much, and I was hoping you could debunk it for us, and show everyone that they are wrong about this entire ghost thing. It's ridiculous, ludicrous, nonsensical, a-"

   Madame Aurelia then got up from her spot, and spoke up, "Monsieur Inspector, mind if I say something?"

   "Of course you may," Jean-Claude answered, "Sorry, Monsiuer, but I believe that she might have some useful information for us."

  I wasn't finished, Kaltag thought, as he didn't exactly like getting cut off when he was applying his impressive use of adjectives to his sentences.

   "Well, I've worked here for several years now, and to tell you the truth, I don't exactly like the idea that these new managers aren't taking the ghost myth seriously. No offense, of course."

   "None taken, Madame," Kaltag replied, "But you have to understand that we love myths and legends and ghost stories as much as the next dog, but this one is getting a tad out of paw. Please, Inspector, don't listen to her, she'll fill you're head with nonsense!"

   "Monsieur, I respect all of my witnesses and I suggest you do the same," Jean-Claude declared in a somewhat firm, subtle tone, one that Kaltag could see when the Inspector seemed to glare at him. He sighed, as he wasn't about to argue with the Inspector of Police, and sat back down in his chair.

   "Very well, you may continue, Madame."

   "Now, Monsieur Inspector, I've been sworn to never say this to anyone, but…" She then darted her eyes around the room, "I believe it is the opportune time to tell you, seeing as how it would be of importance to your investigation."

   "Go ahead and tell us, Madame." The Box-Keeper then proceeded to tell her first experience with the ghost.

 

 

 Five years ago…

   Madame Aurelia had applied for the role of Box-Keeper during her first visit to the Canine, and during that time, the ghost myth had seemed so silly to her. She had heard the rumors, and myths, and stories, and sightings, and she thought of it as nothing but harmless fun, but after her first day as Box-Keeper, she was singing a different tune.

   It was on the night of the first performance of The Marriage of Figaro during the spring season at the Canine, and she was stationed inside the infamous Box Five. She had asked what the reason of not selling Box Five was, but was met with "It's the ghost's Box," and "It's a haunted by the Opera Ghost," and in response to these silly rumors, she decided to sell Box Five to a small party of 4 dogs.

   This, however, would be her undoing.

   During the first act, whilst she was sitting behind one of the curtains of the Box, she thought she heard the sound of growling emanating from around the Box.

   She turned to the dogs seated in Box, "Excuse me," she whispered, "whoever is growling, could you please keep stop?"

   "Sorry, Madame, but no one has made a sound," One of the dogs whispered back. After this, the growling stopped, and she returned to watching the opera.

   However, a few minutes later, that's when she heard it.

   Excuse me…but you are in my Box…A low, whispering voice suddenly came from somewhere in the Box, and Aurelia ignored it, thinking it was nothing, but she shushed the dogs again when she heard it coming from their side.

   "Excuse me, could you please stop whispering?" She asked the dogs.

   "We haven't said a word, Madame." Another dog replied. Madame Aurelia wasn't sure what to make of all this, as she knew for a fact that she had heard a voice somewhere inside the Box.

   The voice seemed to have stopped after the first act, and it did not return until the second act started. This time, however, it was much more serious, and sounded much louder.

   Excuse me, but you are in my Box… The Border collie was getting frustrated with this voice, and she started walking around the Box, trying to see if anyone was there.

   "Madame, what are you doing?" The first dog asked.

   "Sorry, Monsieur, but there is a voice here in the Box, and someone is making it." She replied, looking behind the curtains.

   "But, we haven't heard any voice." The second dog added.

   "Maybe she's mad, ha ha!" The third dog chuckled, before getting a smack to the back of his head by his fiancé. "What, I was joking!" He answered, rubbing the back of his head.

  After a few minutes of looking in the darkness of the Box, the Box-Keeper couldn't find anything, and shrugged it off as some kind of prank by one of the staff.

Of course, this "prank" soon got out of hand when the voice came back again, and this time, it was louder than ever.

   YOU ARE IN MY BOX, LEAVE THIS INSTANT! The voice's booming tone scared the collie out of her fur, and she immediately ran out the Box door to report to it to the manager. Upon coming back, Monsieur Levefre took a quick look around the Box, and couldn't find anything, and deemed the collie as being "paranoid and nervous," as it was her first night there, and she apologized to the dogs seated in Box Five for her false accusations. They accepted it, but of course, it was clear they didn't like being accused of doing such things, as one of them said they had been on their best behavior during any sort of event such as this, and weren't pleased with the way they were treated by the collie.

   After the opera had ended, and everyone had gone home, the Box-Keeper had stayed behind to check Box Five, and opened the door rather abrasively; angry at whomever had made her get a scolding from the manager and the 4 guests.

   "OK, who's ever in here, you'd better come out and expose yourself!" She barked, as she looked around the dark Box, but couldn't find anyone, just as she had before.

   Suddenly, she noticed that all of the lights in the Grand Theater started flickering on and off, making a rather eerie setting fall around the collie.

   "This…this isn't funny." She said nervously, not liking the idea of being a victim of some kind



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June 30, 2016
Usa Male
Thanks, it's no problem at all. I'm still working on the rest of the story, just been a while since i've been on here.

Ah yes, the Inspector is a character that I've created solely for this story, and perhaps I might continue to use him in some other stories (if not with animals than with humans, as creating detective characters is always fun.)

Also, his progression from naive detective to Inspector of Police is based off of Gaston Leroux's short story, The Case of the Yellow Room, just a little fun reference.

June 24, 2016
Usa Male
Pages 14-16
Quite gripping. You did the boxkeeper's description of her encounter very well.

June 23, 2016
Usa Male
Back after a long hiatus.

Page 13 (end of Chapter 3): Uh-huh; that's the Steele I remember, alright.

The detective character, Jean-Claude, intrigues - particularly as I've recently begun work on a couple of police-related stories.

My apologies for taking so long to get back to this.

April 30, 2016
Usa Male
Hopefully you'll enjoy them! :)

April 30, 2016
Usa Male
That all makes sense. btw, I've pasted the next several pages to a document for offline reading.

February 23, 2016
Usa Male
I totally know what you mean. Jenna and Steele just seem like a very unlikely couple. It's like Nala and Scar in the Lion King. You just don't do it!
But I can assure you, there will be some good Jenna and Balto scenes in this as well. ;)

Yeah, I've noticed that you're into mostly anthro Balto fanfics, and I just wanted to clear up that yes, they, and everyone else in the story, is a feral animal, not an anthro one (I said that even though they're anthropomorphic, I was mostly referring to the definition, not necessarily stating that they were anthro characters.)

I don't know, I just felt it was sort of appropriate. Somebody actually commented on that as some point, and was wondering as to why I did that. I mostly wanted to keep them in their original forms since everyone is mostly familiar with it, and it's also reminiscent with movies such as All Dogs Go To Heaven, where some scenes have characters doing what they do in my story (wearing clothing, holding objects, etc.) Yes, I know, dogs don't wear clothes, but I think it's a fun little addition, just for the sake of this fan fic.

Also, that's kind of the whole point of this part. Jenna and Steele haven't met in like 13 years or so (well, just for this story anyway) so it would make sense for her not to recognize him.

- Dante

February 23, 2016
Usa Male
Just chiming in here, since you and JC kind of lead into it; the first project on our collab list will not be anthro - just in case anyone was concerned about that.

Also, on to Page 12. Not bad, especially for a Jenna/Steele scene (which I usually detest, so getting a "not bad" out of me for one is pretty big). The description of them moving on all fours kind of threw me because when you describe them in clothes and so on my mind naturally drifts to a more "anthro" version of them. Also, I was kind of surprised at how long it took Jenna to connect the dots. Other than that, it's good.

February 21, 2016
Usa Male
I'm glad that you've enjoyed it. To tell you the truth, I'm also a purist for the original forms of the characters. And even though I stated that in the introduction, they are anthropomorphic, I was referring to that they have the same characteristics of the Balto film, they just have more human like qualities to them, such as wearing clothes and such. Of course anyone can interpret it in their own way, I hint in some of the chapters that they are still in their original feral forms.

Also, don't feel bad if you're not analyzing every aspect of the story. I'll take anything that I can get when it comes to comments or critiques. As long as someone enjoys it, it's good enough for me! :)

Yeah, it's a long one, since I wrote it in chapters, but I decided to just put the whole thing here. Might as well, but I didn't think it'd be as long as I originally thought.

Oh, I don't consider myself to be that advanced. I've just had years of experience, what with English always being my favorite subject in school. Always has. I may not write like the greats, but I know exactly what to put down, in order to give the reader something cool and interesting to read. And I'm glad you've enjoyed thus far! :)

February 20, 2016
Usa Male
O' Cap'n My Cap'n!
Okay, so, I have been pouring gradually through this, and I must admit, I am enjoying it! You have a keen writing style, which is pretty advanced (considering the relative writing skills of the average fan writer). A few thoughts:

1. I will continue to read the whole thing but, given that I have completed at least a few chapters, I feel that I have gotten the entire gist of this, enough to comment on it...

2. As I mentioned to DT with his recent submission, I am a purist when it comes to the characters. While I love seeing them in good and effective crossovers, I really am not a fan of anthro concepts. Now, that being said, you HAVE crafted an entertaining and engaging story line here, and it would be untrue to suggest that I am not enjoying it!

3. I guess the only anthro setting I ever have enjoyed (and continue to) is that created by Disney for the Robin Hood movie. For me, that worked. And I guess I have seen it that was because I viewed it years ago as a kid. It's another great crossover. And I SUSPECT that the "Zootopia" film will be likewise for me...I even have already made up my mind that it could work as a modern-day future of the Disney Robin Hood setting. Now that I can get behind! Not taking anything away from what you've crafted here of course.

4. While I am not a fan of the Phantom of the Opera epic (though I know the basics of the story, and went to read a full outline of it to get myself prepped for this read), I know it is a great work of literature, and I totally see why you chose it. Especially given the fact that you are a fan of that story.

5. I'm not much of a "Monday-morning quarterback", and I personally don't like to minutely analyze chapter and verse in comments. So you won't see that much from me (and I hope I'm not letting you down in that regard). The size of this work makes it very intimidating to try and flip back through and locate something to analyze in comments. I hope you don't mind!

All that aside, you really have crafted a very good story here so far, and I am impressed! It is a LOOOONG one (lol), perhaps the longest I've seen on Animation Source (as far as I can recall anyway), but I understand why it is as long as it is.

Best of luck with Part 2!

February 08, 2016
Usa Male
UPDATE: The 2nd part of this story is still being worked on, however, for those of you who don't wish to wait for the entire thing to be posted here, this story is also uploaded and updated on my DeviantArt account: HydeCorner, and on my Fanfiction account: Dante Frost.
Once I'm finished with the 2nd part, I will upload the entire thing here. Until then, feel free to follow along either my DeviantArt account, or on my Fanfiction account.

Also, for future stories, I am currently working with Dragon Tamer (Author of the Toby series and Balto's Treasure Island) or Omnitrix 12 on Fanfiction.net for a collab story. Be on the look out for that in the near future.

Peace!

- Dante Frost

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