Steele mocked, as he passed the husky yet again, as she was barely making it to the gate. The malamute laughed triumphantly, as he was running at top speed towards the bench.

   Steele skidded to a halt, as he finally reached the bench, and slapped his paw down on the bench's seat.

   "I win!" He exclaimed, but as soon as he looked over to see if Jenna was coming, she suddenly appeared in front of him, and tackled him to the ground. The two landed in a heap on the cool grass, with Jenna on top of Steele's chest, and Steele on his back.

   "Well…*pant…I just...*pant…pinned the…*pant…famous Steele de Chagny," She said, panting hard, "So, that means I…*pant…win."

   They then broke into playful laughter, as they snuggled up next to each other. It almost felt like they were pups again, wrestling and rolling around on the sandy beach at Perros. Jenna felt happy, even more than when she got that applause at the Gala. It was a feeling that made her feel all warm inside, with Steele licking her face.

   "Oh, Stephen, I'm so glad we remembered each other." Jenna said, as they lay on the grass on their backs, their paws dangling in the air. "I always thought you wouldn't recognize me."

   "That's weird, because I thought so too." The malamute replied, turning his head to the husky, "I mean, you didn't seem to recognize my face, or our past, even when I told you that I did in fact remember our childhood."

   Jenna seemed confused at this, "But, I did remember you, even before that."

   "Wait, so if you did remember me, and my face, and my name, then why didn't you say anything? Why didn't you ask me about it?"

   "It's because we haven't seen each other in so long." She answered, "It's been 15 years, Steele. Do you think I'd remember you after all this time?"

   This question seemed to tick the malamute off, his happy mood started to fade away. Was she trying to make him look stupid? Do you think I'd remember you after all this time? He repeated in his head.

   "So, you didn't remember me, did you?" Steele said, turning over on his side.

   "Steele, I said we haven't seen each in a long time. I've seen other dogs all over the place, and you were just one. Do you think that I would remember that easily? We just met each other again yesterday, remember?"

   "Oh, I see, you'd remember other dogs instead of me? Is that it?" He said his annoyance and frustration coming out.

   "Steele," Jenna said, clearly seeing that he was getting upset, "I never said that,"

   "But you said you didn't remember me, and yet, you also said you did, despite us not having met since yesterday! So, what is this? What are you doing? Do you think I'm stupid or something?" He asked, raising his voice.

   "I'm not doing anything, Steele." Jenna said, almost hurt at his accusation, "Why would you say something like that?"

   "I don't know, maybe because you don't care about me or about our friendship?"

   "Steele, please don't get upset." She pleaded, putting a paw on the malamutes, "I do care about our friendship, I really do, but I've been busy doing other things, making new friends and companions, and trying to go on with my life, but that doesn't mean I'll forget about you."

   "No, you shouldn't think about that. Why can't you just see that there are more important things in your life…like me?" The malamute exclaimed. This last statement made the husky get up from her spot on the grass.

   "Well, if you're going act like this, I don't think being friends should be an option anymore." She said, obviously upset by Steele's spoiled attitude.

   "Hey, Jen, wait!" He cried, as the husky started walking away. "Where are you going?"

   "I'm going back to my apartment," She said, before pausing and saying coldly, "I guess the one who's really changed is you, Stephen…or should I say, Steele de Chagny." She then walked away, leaving the malamute by himself on the grass.

 

 

Chapter 4

 

   The Inspector of Police had just entered the building that held the agency Préfecture de Police, which was part of the National Police of France. Monsieur Jean-Claude, a German Shepard from birth, had held the position of Inspector for the past 10 years, and was renowned as being one of the most brilliant and intelligent officers of the law that patrolled the streets of Paris, despite his young age. He had broad shoulders, a lean figure, but one with a rather straight back, with a customary officer uniform that was occasionally covered by a trench coat, with a top hat atop his skull. His entire form demanded the respect of all Parisians, (and one that the ladies swooned over).

   The Shepard's reputation as Inspector had first begun as an amateur detective, and whilst he was bright for his age, he had not exactly earned the respect of the older officers, who saw him as being far too young to be part of the police force, especially from the late Inspector Larsan. However, their tone soon changed when the young detective proceeded to take on the infamous Yellow Room Case, which detailed gruesome images of a severely injured prostitute named Mademoiselle Stangerson inside the Château de Glandier. It was said that it was a case that was nearly impossible to solve, as the assaulter had not been identified or found, and it was said that he had mysteriously vanished from behind the locked yellow-painted room.

   Eventually, after a long court session, and endless investigations, it was soon found that the one who murdered the prostitute was in fact Monsieur Inspector Larsan, having suffered from a personality disorder, confessed to this during his trial, having made several attempts on Stangerson's life. He was soon sentenced to an asylum shortly after. Without an Inspector in office, Monsieur Jean-Claude was soon enlisted as Paris's new Inspector of Police by his fellow colleagues, having tackled one of France's most difficult and complex cases.

   Over those 10 years, tackling criminals was no doubt his specialty, and he did it with pristine intelligence and skill, yet, something was lacking terribly in the city of Paris. There wasn't a case that he couldn't solve, and for the most part, they were all too easy for his taste. They were mostly would-be murderers, rapists, thieves, and smugglers. His interest hadn't been peaked in a long time, and he had been itching for a case that would really tense up his fur with excitement.

   The Shepard was sitting at his desk inside his office, as his emerald shaded eyes were set on a letter that had been written to him from the Canine. This particular letter had come from one of the Managers that read:

   To Inspector of Police,

   I have received report from one of the waiters of the Café de'l Opera that a few items have gone missing from their storage room. I do hope that you have the time to come here to see this problem.

   Sincerely,

   Kaltag Moncharmin

   P.S. Once you are finished, it is with great honor that my colleagues and I discuss a few issues that have been going on in this Opera House with you.

   The Inspector pondered for a moment (something that he was known for, as he was a deep thinker) and started coming up with a few theories. With the idea of small items such as food being taken, it was common sense to believe that this must be the work of some petty thief who managed to get into the storage room unseen.

   Petty theft yet again, the Shepard thought, not too interesting, but it's my job. As Jean Claude got up from his desk to fetch his trench coat, Monsieur Babet, one of the apprentice detectives, came into the room.

   "Off to catch another cat thief, Jean-Claude?" He chuckled, as he leaned against the door of the office, a puff of smoke coming out of his mouth.

   "It's possible, yes." The Shepard replied, fixing the buttons on his coat, "The thief decided to attack the Opera Canine. It's truly something, a thief stealing from an Opera House."

   "The Canine? I see…" The brown husky grinned, taking another puff from his cigar, "Take care, Inspector, of the Opera Ghost."

   Jean-Claude was just about to reach for his hat off the coat rack, when he stopped, his ears perking up at the term "Opera Ghost."

   "I'm sorry, what was that?" He asked the detective, taking his hat off the rack.

   "I said, take care of the Opera Ghost, Monsieur Inspector." Babet repeated.

   "And what, dare I say, is this Opera Ghost?"

   "You don't know, Inspector?" A confused expression came on the huskies face, "Ask anyone at the Canine and they'll tell you all about it. He's said to have a fiery skull head, and can pass through the walls in a black mist!"

   Now, one would easily be amused at the thought of a ghost, especially one that would haunt an Opera



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June 30, 2016
Usa Male
Thanks, it's no problem at all. I'm still working on the rest of the story, just been a while since i've been on here.

Ah yes, the Inspector is a character that I've created solely for this story, and perhaps I might continue to use him in some other stories (if not with animals than with humans, as creating detective characters is always fun.)

Also, his progression from naive detective to Inspector of Police is based off of Gaston Leroux's short story, The Case of the Yellow Room, just a little fun reference.

June 24, 2016
Usa Male
Pages 14-16
Quite gripping. You did the boxkeeper's description of her encounter very well.

June 23, 2016
Usa Male
Back after a long hiatus.

Page 13 (end of Chapter 3): Uh-huh; that's the Steele I remember, alright.

The detective character, Jean-Claude, intrigues - particularly as I've recently begun work on a couple of police-related stories.

My apologies for taking so long to get back to this.

April 30, 2016
Usa Male
Hopefully you'll enjoy them! :)

April 30, 2016
Usa Male
That all makes sense. btw, I've pasted the next several pages to a document for offline reading.

February 23, 2016
Usa Male
I totally know what you mean. Jenna and Steele just seem like a very unlikely couple. It's like Nala and Scar in the Lion King. You just don't do it!
But I can assure you, there will be some good Jenna and Balto scenes in this as well. ;)

Yeah, I've noticed that you're into mostly anthro Balto fanfics, and I just wanted to clear up that yes, they, and everyone else in the story, is a feral animal, not an anthro one (I said that even though they're anthropomorphic, I was mostly referring to the definition, not necessarily stating that they were anthro characters.)

I don't know, I just felt it was sort of appropriate. Somebody actually commented on that as some point, and was wondering as to why I did that. I mostly wanted to keep them in their original forms since everyone is mostly familiar with it, and it's also reminiscent with movies such as All Dogs Go To Heaven, where some scenes have characters doing what they do in my story (wearing clothing, holding objects, etc.) Yes, I know, dogs don't wear clothes, but I think it's a fun little addition, just for the sake of this fan fic.

Also, that's kind of the whole point of this part. Jenna and Steele haven't met in like 13 years or so (well, just for this story anyway) so it would make sense for her not to recognize him.

- Dante

February 23, 2016
Usa Male
Just chiming in here, since you and JC kind of lead into it; the first project on our collab list will not be anthro - just in case anyone was concerned about that.

Also, on to Page 12. Not bad, especially for a Jenna/Steele scene (which I usually detest, so getting a "not bad" out of me for one is pretty big). The description of them moving on all fours kind of threw me because when you describe them in clothes and so on my mind naturally drifts to a more "anthro" version of them. Also, I was kind of surprised at how long it took Jenna to connect the dots. Other than that, it's good.

February 21, 2016
Usa Male
I'm glad that you've enjoyed it. To tell you the truth, I'm also a purist for the original forms of the characters. And even though I stated that in the introduction, they are anthropomorphic, I was referring to that they have the same characteristics of the Balto film, they just have more human like qualities to them, such as wearing clothes and such. Of course anyone can interpret it in their own way, I hint in some of the chapters that they are still in their original feral forms.

Also, don't feel bad if you're not analyzing every aspect of the story. I'll take anything that I can get when it comes to comments or critiques. As long as someone enjoys it, it's good enough for me! :)

Yeah, it's a long one, since I wrote it in chapters, but I decided to just put the whole thing here. Might as well, but I didn't think it'd be as long as I originally thought.

Oh, I don't consider myself to be that advanced. I've just had years of experience, what with English always being my favorite subject in school. Always has. I may not write like the greats, but I know exactly what to put down, in order to give the reader something cool and interesting to read. And I'm glad you've enjoyed thus far! :)

February 20, 2016
Usa Male
O' Cap'n My Cap'n!
Okay, so, I have been pouring gradually through this, and I must admit, I am enjoying it! You have a keen writing style, which is pretty advanced (considering the relative writing skills of the average fan writer). A few thoughts:

1. I will continue to read the whole thing but, given that I have completed at least a few chapters, I feel that I have gotten the entire gist of this, enough to comment on it...

2. As I mentioned to DT with his recent submission, I am a purist when it comes to the characters. While I love seeing them in good and effective crossovers, I really am not a fan of anthro concepts. Now, that being said, you HAVE crafted an entertaining and engaging story line here, and it would be untrue to suggest that I am not enjoying it!

3. I guess the only anthro setting I ever have enjoyed (and continue to) is that created by Disney for the Robin Hood movie. For me, that worked. And I guess I have seen it that was because I viewed it years ago as a kid. It's another great crossover. And I SUSPECT that the "Zootopia" film will be likewise for me...I even have already made up my mind that it could work as a modern-day future of the Disney Robin Hood setting. Now that I can get behind! Not taking anything away from what you've crafted here of course.

4. While I am not a fan of the Phantom of the Opera epic (though I know the basics of the story, and went to read a full outline of it to get myself prepped for this read), I know it is a great work of literature, and I totally see why you chose it. Especially given the fact that you are a fan of that story.

5. I'm not much of a "Monday-morning quarterback", and I personally don't like to minutely analyze chapter and verse in comments. So you won't see that much from me (and I hope I'm not letting you down in that regard). The size of this work makes it very intimidating to try and flip back through and locate something to analyze in comments. I hope you don't mind!

All that aside, you really have crafted a very good story here so far, and I am impressed! It is a LOOOONG one (lol), perhaps the longest I've seen on Animation Source (as far as I can recall anyway), but I understand why it is as long as it is.

Best of luck with Part 2!

February 08, 2016
Usa Male
UPDATE: The 2nd part of this story is still being worked on, however, for those of you who don't wish to wait for the entire thing to be posted here, this story is also uploaded and updated on my DeviantArt account: HydeCorner, and on my Fanfiction account: Dante Frost.
Once I'm finished with the 2nd part, I will upload the entire thing here. Until then, feel free to follow along either my DeviantArt account, or on my Fanfiction account.

Also, for future stories, I am currently working with Dragon Tamer (Author of the Toby series and Balto's Treasure Island) or Omnitrix 12 on Fanfiction.net for a collab story. Be on the look out for that in the near future.

Peace!

- Dante Frost

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