dog.  "Still, I could use a fellow like you, now that I'm the leader" he noted quite vainly.  "Come with me...let's talk".  Charger started to walk off towards the exit, and then stopped and turned back to see the younger dog not following him.  He shot young Steele a stern glance, which compelled him to follow Charger out the door.

The scene faded around them, and they suddenly found themselves emerging in a new scene...one which drew an immediate emotional reaction from Steele.  "No, spirit!  Not here, please!"  But he received no response.  She remained silent.

Before him were several dogs from the team, loose on the tundra beyond the kennel yard of the master's home.  His younger self was there too (though a little older than before), laying down beside his mother, who was also laying on her side in the snow.  She was mortally wounded...and the snow around her was stained with her blood.  She was in obvious pain, and her breathing was labored.  The younger Steele was agonizing over her, at once nervous and angry.  "Why, mother?!  Why did you do that?!  WHY?!"  The young dog began to sob, and he buried his head in her fur.  Standing rigidly next to the spirit, Steele watched, his face contorted with misery.

She struggled faintly to respond, opening her eyes slightly.  "It was my job to...protect the pups in the yard".  You all were away on your run..."  She wheezed, and winced sharply in response to the intense pain she was feeling.

"They were wolves, mom!  You should have known better than to try and hold them off by yourself anyway!" young Steele whined bitterly.  She looked weakly over at him, lifting her head with great effort.  "No...choice son.  I'm...I'm sorry."  She dropped her head and fell unconscious.

Another dog from the team approached the younger Steele sympathetically.  "I don't think she's going to make it, buddy.  The wolves did a thorough job.  I'm really very sorry."  Suddenly, from across the tundra, a few gunshots rang out.  The other dogs turned to look off in the direction of the gunfire, and the footprints in the snow.  The dog turned back to Steele.  "You see?  The master's taking care of it.  They won't come back."

The younger Steele stood up slowly, his body awash in furious tension.  He stared out across the tundra for a moment, baring his teeth and growling quietly, his eyes fixated furiously into the distance.  Then, quickly turning his head away, he let out an angry yell and took off running in the opposite direction, disappearing over a low rise.

Steele started to turn away, but the spirit intervened.  "Wait...listen."

The dog who had tried to comfort younger Steele lay down beside his dying mother to keep her company.  She came briefly to consciousness without opening her eyes, and said, with her dying breath, "St...Steele...don't hold it against them...please.  They w...were only trying to survive.".  And in that moment, she died.

The master came walking back over the tundra, with Charger next to him.  As they approached Steele's mother, Charger stopped short, observed the tragic scene before him, and a slight but sinister smile played at his muzzle.  "Exactly according to plan", he muttered to himself.

The spirit turned to look at older Steele.  "You heard them both, did you not?"  Without speaking, Steele nodded sadly, again turning away.  "Take me away from here, spirit, I can't bear to look at anymore of this".

"But I told you", the spirit calmly protested, "these are shadows of the things that have been.  That they are what they are, do not blame me..."  Steele turned and glanced angrily at the spirit.  "Take me away!"

"Very well", she replied, as the scene faded around them.  "But we are not yet done.  We do but turn another page."

Suddenly, Steele found himself standing once again in the large room with the furnace and boiler.  It was some years later, and he saw his younger self again, now grown to full adulthood...strong and proud.  His younger self was examining a birchwood dogsled, as well as its gangline and harnesses, while a couple of other team dogs stood quietly nearby, not daring to interrupt.  One of them was Star, then just a yearling himself.  He was tense and apprehensive, and watched Steele warily.  Older Steele and the spirit stood silently and observed the scene.

Another dog entered from the outside door.  It was Nikki.  "Younger and more lithe back then, 'ey Nikki?" Steele thought wryly to himself.  Out of the corner of his eye, Steele caught a disapproving glance from the spirit.

Nikki walked quietly up to Star, keeping an occasional eye on Steele (the younger Steele) as he paced up and down the line scrutinizing every detail.  He nudged Star on the shoulder.  "Ey", I come from da master's house.  Charger ain't doin' good.  Da master thinks he's gonna die tonight.  You better let Steele know, so he can say his goodbyes if he wants to."

Star's eyes opened wide, and he shrunk a bit in fear.  "M-m-m-me??"  He shrunk down even further, shaking his head in denial.  Nikki frowned at him.  "Yeh, you.  I got to get back over there.  Now hurry up, kid!"

Star hunched up, gulped fearfully, and walked up to the younger Steele.  "H-hey, boss?" 

Younger Steele stopped and, without turning back to look at Star, replied coldly "What is it?"

Star hesitated for a moment, shaking, and said "It's about Charger.  Nikki said he's dying.  I was told to let you know so you could go see him."  He hunched down again, awaiting some sharp reproach.

Younger Steele just huffed.  Turning back to Star with a stern glance, he noted "We have a run to complete tomorrow morning.  I'm not finished going over everything yet.  It's important that I complete that first, so I'll go when I'm finished."  He then turned back to his scrutinizing of the equipment.

Without replying, Star skulked off and returned to Nikki.  With a hesistant and nervous giggle, he said "He...says he'll come when he's finished going over the equipment."

Nikki shook his head disapprovingly.  "Uh huh.  Well hopefully he'll hold out til then."  He turned and exited the way he came.

The scene suddenly changed to the hallway of the master's house, looking much the same as it had the night that Charger's ghost appeared to Steele.  By now, Steele was so distracted by the scenes he'd witnessed while in the company of the spirit that he was unaware of whether any time had passed and, if so, how much had.  He turned and looked into the parlor.  There, on some bedding, lay Charger, seemingly already deceased.  The master was sitting in a chair nearby, before the fireplace, lost in thought. 

Steele's younger self came walking slowly into the hallway, passing his older self and the spirit.  He gently and quietly walked up to where Charger lay, and observed him for a moment, looking for any signs of life.  As he leaned down to listen for any breathing, Charger's eyes opened, and momentarily startled the younger Steele.

"Oh!  Charger". the younger Steele said with mild surprise,  "Well, has the master seen to you properly?  Your final affairs and all?"  Charger nodded slowly without a word.

The younger Steele looked back at him as kindly as his own nature could muster at this point in his life.  "Is there anything I can do for you, old friend?"  Again, silently and slowly, Charger nodded.

"Hm?"  The younger Steele asked.  "What is it then?"

Charger strained weakly to speak to the younger Steele, a dire urgency in his voice and his eyes.  "Whi...while there's still time..."  Younger Steele leaned closer, trying to catch what he was saying.

"Hm?" younger Steele inquired.  "Time?  Time for what?"

Charger continued to struggle to get the words out.  "We were...wrong", he said very weakly.

The younger Steele, with a frustrated wince, asked "What?"

Charger swallowed, and repeated "We were wrong!"

The younger Steele straightened up a bit, and looked into Charger's eyes again.  "Wrong?  Is that all?  Well, we can't be right all the time, 'ey Charger?"  He let out a short laugh.  "Nobody's perfect.  We did no worse than the next dog.  Better in fact, when you think about it.  Don't blame yourself, Charger!"

Old Charger shook his head slowly in rebuttal.  "No.  We...were wrong!"  He struggled to lift his paw slightly, placing it on the back of younger Steele's head to draw him close.  "S...save yourself!"

The younger Steele pulled back in confusion.  "What?  Save myself?  Save myself from what?"  Gritting his teeth, he came almost muzzle-to-muzzle with Charger, commanding  "Speak up!"  But as he did, Charger's paw fell from his head, and down by the dog's side.  He was dead.  The younger Steele looked blankly at him for a moment



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March 02, 2016
Usa Male
Cool. And yes, I dare say we do.

February 29, 2016
Usa Male
O' Cap'n My Cap'n!
If you look now on the forum topic, the post about possible casting ideas is there:

http://www.animationsource.org/board/post1509920.html#p1509920

February 29, 2016
Usa Male
O' Cap'n My Cap'n!
Well thank you again, DT. I should be releasing my thoughts as to a what-if casting in that forum topic tonight sometime. But yes, I would imagine that, on its own (without being reworked AS a Christmas story), it probably wouldn't work as a televised movie (or otherwise). But then, that was never my intent originally, so I'm really not worried about that. It's just fun to imagine it. A lot of us do that with our characters and our fan fictions, don't we?

February 25, 2016
Usa Male
Well, I finally got to the last page. I've got to say that I don't know as this would have worked movie-wise, but as a fanfic... you've done it again, JC.

February 25, 2016
Usa Male
Private Messaging it is, then.

February 24, 2016
Usa Male
O' Cap'n My Cap'n!
Dragon Tamer, you must admit that, when weighing the names of two fictional figures, there is absolutely no doubt whatsoever that "Santa Claus" is going to be about a gajillion times more recognizable than "Wishbone". Say "Santa Claus", and the nostalgia spans generations--and more than one hundred years (just in the United States). Say "Wishbone", and (at least in the U.S.) somebody is likely to think you're talking about a brand of salad dressing. lol

You're an evangelical Christian. Not that I am knocking that, but I would imagine that if there are any Christians on the planet who do not generally ascribe to or condone a child's very harmless (and brief) belief in the secular Santa Claus myth, which takes nothing whatsoever away from Christian celebrations of the holiday, it would be evangelicals and fundamentalists. But that is, I will admit, a presumption based upon my own experience in encounters with evangelicals and fundamentalists. But I REALLY don't want that to become another tangent that gets discussed on this page.

February 24, 2016
Usa Male
You're welcome; I've found major typos in posts of mine in the past, so I can relate.

Your idea for the forum topic sounds promising. I've sometimes wondered who I'd pick to voice OCs myself.

One other note on the Wishbone thing (this is the last thing I plan to say about it here; I promise); I guess considering where you're at now it would be pretty hard to develop an appreciation for the books and show if you hadn't grown up with them, as you said. I know nothing of "Dog with a Blog," but I can relate to having a harder time latching onto younger-age entertainment when nostalgia isn't involved. All the same, I would point out that you yourself once thought it strange - if not downright unfortunate - that I went through my entire childhood never believing in Santa Claus beyond his historical roots.

February 23, 2016
Usa Male
O' Cap'n My Cap'n!
Ah yes...thank you for spotting that spelling error. That must have been at a point when I was writing late at night, and not keeping track. Even with my editing scan of the document later on, I missed it. Huh. But it has been corrected.

My interpretation of the Ghost of the Present was based mostly on the 1951 movie version. Even moreso than the literary one. I like the way the actor who played him brought a certain feel to the role. Kevin Michael Richardson would indeed be a good choice. I envisioned Dennis Haysbert, whom you may recognize as the pitchman who always appears in the Allstate Insurance commercials. He's not only got a resonating voice, but is a good actor who also, like Kevin, has VO experience in cartoons (among others, he played Kilowog in the Justice League series). Here is a snippet (sorry, you'll have to copy and paste) of him appearing on Conan O'Brien's show:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XHFQe7mTxqA

Interestingly, you've given me an idea...putting together a post, in the existing Balto forum post I have for the fan fiction, of a voice cast I would have loved to see for this. Got some pretty good ideas.

February 23, 2016
Usa Male
Kind of forgot where I was in the story, but looking gave me a chance to re-view the Ghost of Christmas Present. I like the character; charming, yet forceful towards the end. I could very easily seem him being voiced by Kevin Michael Richardson if this ever became a cartoon - which I would completely support based on what I've seen so far.

Chapter 4 is good, although I think you used the wrong spelling for "sight" in the first paragraph. In all other respects your choice of wording to describe the third ghost (like calling its body a "corpse") is impressive, as is the touch of describing how it sounded breathing.

I would have read past the end of page 12 if not for time constraints, but I'm impressed as before. The description of Star telling what had happened is a very well-written "what if," and the way you kept them going right up until that last obstacle really kept me guessing. Nice.

February 19, 2016
Usa Male
O' Cap'n My Cap'n!
I just watched some clips too (it appears the literature is based off of the television series, rather than the usual literature as inspiration for television series thing). Didn't care for it. Seemed too silly for me. But that is because now, as an adult, I see no magic in it, and no attraction. Perhaps if I were a child in the 1990s (and by that, I mean an ACTUAL child, whom the series targets for an audience, and not a teenager), I might have felt different.

But this thing strike me as being about as interesting as the TV series "Dog With A Blog"...which really isn't very interesting or entertaining. Or deep.

But again, just my opinion. Let's just leave this particular tangent at that.

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