decide." the Beta informed.

Aleu walked up to her friend "Are you sure this is going to work?" the male wolf nodded "I'm almost certain, after all it sounded like a good plan to me. That was quite a good speech you did there Aleu, I'm impressed. Keep that up and the rest of the clan will accept you in no time." Aleu blushed a bright red under her cheeks "hm, thank you."

Meanwhile with sky and Shade the blue and black wolves, both were still thinking hard on it. Until eventually sky spoke up "This clan has been starving for weeks, its only natural for us to eat more." Shade nodded "I agree but, this island is our home now, and the caribou share it with us. So its also natural to maintain a balance. And if we continue eating more than enough we'll be hunting for lesser food, and we'll be back to square one again back at the canyons, thus our journey over here, and the loss of our two greatest clan members; Nava and Niju, would be for nothing."

both nodded and so it was settled. The blue and black wolf approached Aleu and Taku. "Ok we're in. hey, sorry for what I said to you back then." sky apologized. "Oh that's alright. No offense taken." Shade growled "there well be when I'm threw with you."she said under her breath. the wait continued, as time went on more and more wolves agreed to Aleu's plan. After ten minutes, yak Nuk and sumac were the only ones who were left. "Ve're hungly, und itching all over." Yuk spoke up. "These fleas are eating us alive!" nuk, the bigger wolf added. Aleu chuckled at the three "Go out and bathe by the lake." the three wolves were then dismissed to go clean up.

"Okay, we all agree then? We wait until tomorrow, at lunch to hunt again. So lets have a good rest before then." Aleu ordered the clan. The pack of wolves looked confused. "Hey its alright, the caribou aren't going anywhere. We'll be fine as long as we keep this chain in balance." Taku said with a hint of confidence in his voice. The wolves then scurried off to do their own things.

Taku and Aleu went off for a stroll near the beach. after a long day of marking their teritory The two decided to stay by the shore and watch the sunset. As the glowing orb descend into the horizon, so to did its warmth and light. "The sky is so beautiful." Aleu said looking up in the air, starring at the multi-colored sky, filled with pink, orange, yellow, purple. Truly it was a sight to behold. "Yeah, beautiful." TakuĀ  whispered as he got closer to Aleu, who turned and faced him, both looking at each others eyes. He saw her blue orbs, while she saw his gray.

Their muzzles got closer and closer until they finally collided with each other. Their first kiss lasted for what seemed like an eternity. But they didn't complain, they had each other, and that's all they cared about. the male sighed as he snuggled closer to his new love. Aleu responded by licking his cheek and cuddling into his warm fur coat. Though they did not confess through words, they let their actions do it for them. They decided not to go back to the cave that night. "Say, I found this cozy little spot while walking around the shore, think we could sleep there?" Aleu giggled at the Auburn wolf "I don't mind where it is as long as its you I'm with." her eyes then caught something, glowing balls of light, fireflys, they were floating around the new couple, adding more romance to the atmosphere. "I love you." Taku confessed. Aleu's ears lowered, her cheeks flushed and red. "I love you too."
the two kept their eyes on the decending sun until it could no longer be seen. Night had finally come. it was time to call it a day. Aleu slipped her body through his chest, and tickled Taku's chin with her tail. Taku's face flushed, getting the gesture "Lead the way love," Taku gulped "Right, follow me my lady."

"Where are we going grandfather?"
"you'll find out shortly little one."
"You never answered my question earlier."
"I will answer but not this moment."
"why are,"
"we're here."
Taku stopped beside Nava, the little cub scanned the area around him, nothing was in front of him but a view of the horizons "and you shall find your answer now." Nava finished, pushing the little pup towards the edge of the cliff they were standing.

Taku screamed, eye's popped open, gasping for air and sprung up from his resting place. the young male scanned his surroundings, he was in a small cave, and beside him sleeping next to him was aleu, his leader and new lover. "just a dream..." he shook his head, standing up and exiting the cave he left for a quick drink near by the lake.

shortly after he arrived, he bent over the clear lake, licking, slurping up the liquid, quenching his thirst with satisfaction. finishing his needs, he looked at the reflection in the water. a full moon's light gave shined down upon him. "Taku?" the brown wolf saw aleu coming from behind seeing her reflection mirror her arrival. "are you alright?" Taku simply replied with a "hm". Aleu tilted her head, walked closer beside her love and nuzzled his chest. "bad dream?" she asked "no, a flash back." Aleu looked up at Taku "tell me," Taku scoffed "it was nothing" he tried to insure.

"it'll make you feel better. talking about it helps." the brown wolf smiled and returned the nuzzle. "I'll tell you later, lets get back in the cave. its about to snow."

the couple soon returned to cave they previously slept in. quickly snuggling up to each other and sharing their warmth and body heat. "I once had a phobia of water." Taku began "I once asked my grandfather, the shaman nava, to help me with my fears. he didn't give a straight up answer for cure, but what he did next, he turned my fears, into a weapon. He pushed me off a cliff above a near by the ocean." Aleu gasped "but he knew what would happen next."

Taku screamed his eyes closed shut, tears leaking out, his heart beat racing my the second. 'at this rate I'll die, DIE! I...I don't...' "I DON'T WANT TO DIE!!!" the pup opened his eyes, burning yellow orbs glowed with hot energy, his mouth closed shut, his mind focused on the water. suddenly forming and swirling around. gaining height above the sharp rocks bellow. beaming up with great speed, a pillar of water raced upward towards the descending wolf pup, colliding with the liquid and cushioning his fall.

with the water still rising, Taku found himself back on top next to the edge of the mountain, to which he walked back on. sitting there to greet his return was the one responsible for his would be death; nava. Taku's eye's stopped glowing. his little legs started shaking and he panted for breath. he looked up at his grandfather. his own grandpa, the one who had always picked him up when he fell, the one who raised him, feed him and took care of him, just tried to kill him "Wh-what just happened? you pushed me! why did-," Nava interrupted the little wolf "do you remember seeing me fading out of existence little one?" Taku stopped in mid thought "but you-, that wasn't a dream?" Nava nodded "that was me using the ancient power of the spirits."

"but you just tried to-," Taku tried speaking again only to have his elder once again interrupt him. "I wanted you to realize that you are capable of defending yourself. You told me your fears of water. the key being fear, one of the six spirit guides meanings. I forced you to channel those strong emotions to your advantage. for you now have the ability to manipulate and shape shift water into anything your mind see's fit."

Taku's jaw dropped, was he dead? what was this mambo jumbo this impostor talking about? Nava chuckled almost as if he heard or saw his thoughts "you see young one, these powers aren't taught, one just knows. and these powers of the ancient spirits which have been passed from generations have now chosen you to be the next user. Taku my son, you are to be the next shaman. one day you will lead this pack in my place, and perhaps you'll have pups of your own."

Aleu yawned, Taku finally finished with his story. "That was quite something, can you show me your water manipulating sometime?" Taku nodded "of course but not right now, lets go back to sleep." Aleu agreed and snuggled deeper into her lovers fur. Taku smiled at this and laid his head next to hers, entering a blissful slumber.

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"where in the world are those two? they've been gone for almost all night." luna the blue wolf said with concern. "who cares, they're probably dead in some ditch." the black wolf known as shade huffed. "I do, those two are our leaders after all." shade groaned at this "I swear if you need a leader I'm the one you should turn to. forget about staying up on watch, I'm going to take over!" shade retorted.

"You can't do that without challanging Taku to a duel first!" luna yelled. "We all know I'd win anyway." shade scoffed. "you know you're starting to act more and more like Niju." Luna said with concern in her voice. "He knew what to do and what was best for this clan!" the dark wolf raised her voice "He may have been a coward but he was right about one thing, the weak die and the strong survive! Aleu isn't strong at all! she's is merly a pup in a grown



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November 05, 2015
Usa
You have a really nice story here. :icon60:

February 03, 2014
Usa Male
There's also a bit of a logic gap on page 4. How would wolves know about teddy bears and hippies? I don't think the hippy movement started until about 30 years later. Teddy bears might have been around back then, but would wild animals know, or care, about them? As for T-bones, I don't know if wolves would use terms like that. "Haunch" or "shoulder" would make more sense.

Lastly, the whole thing about being serious vs. having fun doesn't really make sense to just throw in at the last minute. A change that significant should be taken more slowly.

February 03, 2014
Usa Male
As for the romance between Aleu and Taku, my main suggestion would be to mix it up a little. Throw in some times where they don't get along well for stupid reasons (one of my leading ladies once got mad at her guy because she felt he was treating her like an infant when, really, he was just trying to be chivalrous and make sure she was safe). Try reading Brian Jacques' book Redwall and then watching the animated series (season 1); the relationship between Matthias and Cornflower was, in my opinion, much more entertaining in the show because it had more ups and downs.

Aleu had a good hunting strategy on page 2, but the rationale used to defend it on page 3 overlooked the fact that those deer weren't native to the island; they had come en masse from the mainland, and would have created an imbalance. So although the wolves' role in the balance was key, the argument made in favor of limited hunting makes it sound like they were trying not to disrupt omething already in balance. Ecologically speaking, their presence would restore something that was currently out of balance.

February 03, 2014
Usa Male
Well, this is a nice story, but before you work on improving your romance writing I'd suggest you start with readability. Try starting a new paragraph each time the speaker changes, and taking more care with your punctuation and capital letters. For example, instead of

Aleu walked up to her friend "Are you sure this is going to work?" the male wolf nodded "I'm almost certain, after all it sounded like a good plan to me. That was quite a good speech you did there Aleu, I'm impressed. Keep that up and the rest of the clan will accept you in no time." Aleu blushed a bright red under her cheeks "hm, thank you."

Try doing it more like this:

Aleu walked up to her friend "Are you sure this is going to work?"
The male wolf nodded "I'm almost certain, after all it sounded like a good plan to me. That was quite a good speech you did there Aleu, I'm impressed. Keep that up and the rest of the clan will accept you in no time."
Aleu blushed a bright red under her cheeks. "Hm, thank you."

FYI, I used to make the same mistake (back before I joined this site).

May 13, 2013
Female
Wonderful.

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July 18, 2012
This is Awesome indeed!! Even awesome won't describe how touching this fanfic is!!

March 28, 2012
Usa Male
thanks so much frozen! this is my fave written story so far and im darn proud of it too.

March 21, 2012
Well, interesting story. Although, for me, everything went by too fast. Haha. But again, it's a good one.

August 08, 2011
Usa Male
thanks =)

August 06, 2011
Usa
Terrific!




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