NO MORE CLIFF HANGERS!!

The time problems continue to haunt you, but this is pretty good in all other respects. Intriguing plot, engaging confusion, and a dynamite cliffhanger! Next time, though, you might want to delve a little more into their thoughts, emotions, and body language. Even just a three-word piece here and there like "Balto thought fast" before he tells Jenna to stay put would help.

UPDATE!!!!!!! THE THIRD ONE WILL BE ABOUT KODI AND STAR, BUT IT WILL TAKE ME A LITTLE LONGER TO FINISH BECAUSE MY COMPUTER IS A BUTHEAD! SORRY, I AM TRYING TO WORK FAST AND STILL HAVE THE STORY BE GOOD!

dude that was awesome. you are making this great and with awesome paceing ( meaning how long the parts are). but please get to the part were you explain what is wrong with kodi. and also i wrote a script for a balto 4 and 5. and in the 5th one i have all of balto's sibling and pups in it. and i named his pups Kodi, Aleu, dingo, hunter, sara and stark and his siblings keine, moon, axel, and jack. tell me what you think of them.