Has Jenna fallen for Steele?!
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Balto's gone for a whole week and Jenna is left at home all alone without any bundles to take care of. And thats when Steele decides to start messing around Jenna's house.
When Balto returns what will he find? Is Jenna as faithful as everyone thinks?
Rewritten, new plot change.
Introduction
First off I would like to start this presentation by saying. Yes, I did delete all of my past fanfics. Thats for anyone who hasn't checked back since my last fanfic was put out.
This is still Sandstorm, to clear up the confusion I simply changed my username to something I prefer over the previous one. My new one is Kittylover, which you may or may not have figured out yet depending on if your blind or not >.<
I like to go by 'Kitty' for short, thats the reason I changed it. As well as the fact that Kittylover is a more common username that I go by online as well as the fact that I simply got sick of using the name of my favorite WarriorCats character.
As I have promised in previous Presentation rewrites, I WILL be rewriting all of my past fan stories. Though most will hardly resemble the past ones, especially 'Is Jenna falling for Steele?!' which has a completely different outcome and plot. Hopefully one that is a bit more liked by the people who actually DO read my fanfics. Who I all appreciate deeply for their favs and comments, I like to know that some people enjoy my work!
The Aleu and Teak fanfics I am deeply pondering whether or not I will rewrite them, and if I ever do most likely some things may be changed.
I also have NEW fanfics on the way, as if you can't call my rewrites entirely new fanfics in a way. =3
All of them will be CLEAN. Just a little heads-up.
Some new fanfics will include, my version of Saba. As well as a whole new set of characters not yet mentioned. And of course all the other unnamed pups of Balto and Jenna's litter, their stories and my names for them of course.
Expect a few Presentation rewrites, I change my mind frequently.
Upcoming Fanfics
Mostly all of my rewrites, which will of course share all the past names that they had originally. Thats so they can be recognized. I will NOT rewrite my 'Alien of Nome' fics. Those fics were simply the cause of my love of Sci-Fi shows, which runs a muck within some of my stories. It may occur in the near future, but I sure hope it wont. I tend to regret it later, since they don't turn out as well as I may hope...
Lady and the...wolf?: Coming Fic of my newest character Lady and her tale of love with Balto's unknown half-brother. This also features my past charrie Star who in the past fell in love with Kodi and bore his pup Ruby, who was close friends with Saphire.
Star is sad and needy for love and Lady is head-over-heels for her very first love. But will this new wolf in town break up the close bond between two sisters Star and Lady?
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Comments
er
stuff out... well now I do, , I'll try to learn from my
mistakes and fix some of the stuff in later storys. Which I
hope wont be a disaster! ~.~
Stormwin
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was not good! and you never mentioned the breed of Tuck and
Huck. plus it might have been different to ad something like
a fox, cyote or wolf to help her! i admire yopur passion for
writing, but some matches shouldn't be.
er
like my Jenna and Steele match up, and will lead to my next
story.. So enjoy it when its posted!
(and if you don't
like the next one, well hope you don't get eaten by my
penguin stuffed animal) ...... I didn't say that!
Razor
to get along very well.
first page!I got to the part where Balto hurt Lilly,and that
was enough.Balto would never do something like that,and make
his son mate with someone he didnt know well?!Please!Im
sorry too,but I would also delete this one.
Razor
write, but this whole storyline goes from bad to worse. None
of the characters-Balto especially-were at all in character
except maybe for Kodi. I'm sorry, but if I were running the
site I'd probably delete this one.
er
Tamer!Jenna wouldnt even THINK about leaving Balto,and why
would she ditch Balto for Steele?!I really didnt like that
one.like your name though.
Razor
big, balloon-headed moron.
Sandstorm--> I guess
I see the point in wanting to do something differently, but
ironically, as I pointed out before, you probably would have
come up with something more original if you had just stuck
to Balto and Jenna. My advice if you want to be original is
to use your own characters.
er
something other than balto and Jenna.
Stormwin
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well written out! not to graphic and the point came thorught
like a swords blade! exellent job i say!
er
Razor
that, and that's how many me there are than would be ideal.
was something about it that made me not like it. Like Dragon
Tamer said, there are lots about Jenna leaving Balto, for
Steele.
Razor
anything good to say about this one (I'll at least try to be
constructive, though). Personal prejudices aside (I have a
zero-tolerance attitude towards adultery), you did several
things which were extremely unwise from a literary angle. To
begin with, you gave the ending away right at the beginning.
Second, the whole premise of Jenna even THINKING (and that
would only be in the loosest sense of the word) about
leaving Balto for Steele makes no sense. Also, it's a
concept that (in my opinion) is far too frequently placed on
this site. Finally, the sequence of events, plus some of the
dialogue, are practically cut and pasted from other stories.
In other words, plagiarism. Next time, maybe you can write
something a little more original and a LOT more logical.
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er
er
at in my stories don't you!?
Yade and Krazyarc-
I'm glad you both like my stories TY! ^^ I 'm happy 'most'
of the people who comment on here like my stories!
Razor
improvement, that's all. You have skills, it's just that
there are places where you could make it better, you know?
Especially when you cross a line like what Steele did to
Saphire, which I've already pointed out could warrant
deletion. Think of it this way: if I didn't think you had
potenial as a writer, and if I felt your stories weren't
worth helping along, I'd have reported what Steele did to
Saphire already, and there's a pretty good chance the story
would no longer be on the site. Sorry if I've come across as
being a little too strict. *shrug* I do think it was a good
thought to try and fix Jenna's mistake.
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